banks of a crystal flowing creek

Lisa  Jewell
Author: Lisa Jewell
Word Count: 195
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banks of a crystal flowing creek

banks of a crystal flowing creek belongs to the following groups:

All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Core [C.O.R.E], Pleasure & Pain, The Art of Pain, The Word Tree and Vibration in Art and Verse - VAVoom!

I asked my best friend
to braid my broken veins
on the banks of crystal flowing creek
he said
“I am almost out of time”

I watched
as he cried
I took his hand
to my lips

we walked
in each others arms
toward the banks of the crystal flowing creek

we talked
I made him belly laugh one last time
he pulled his love knife out of my heart

like a fault beneath the earth
we stirred and splintered
an owl sang our
heart to heart song

“you shall never walk alone
inside my heart I will walk on
with you tucked up inside”

my friend and I

a solitary man
when he found me
a solitary man
when we parted

now walking apart
right or wrong

confused kin folk
grimaced
like birds caught in a wire

hoping they’d heard wrong
it can’t be true

best friends
soul mates
can’t go wrong

together
our hands still clinging tightly
said
it can
it has

like a river
long
we fought hard
over
time
into a foreign tributary

paddling separate canoes
in different directions
searching day and night
for the banks of a crystal flowing creek

  • Birgitta

    Birgitta

    This is my absolute, all time, favourite piece from you ever.
    Ever ever.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    awwwwwwww that means so much to me…as this took a great deal out of me xxxx

  • Birgitta
  • mimi yoon

    mimi yoon

    oh my gosh…. sad and beautiful all mingled up…. please continue dreaming of flowing into the banks of a crystal flowing creek... best friends and soul mates can’t go wrong… so sad and so beautiful, lisa… xxxxx

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Hey Mimi,

    I’ll never stop dreaming….

    thank you my Darling xxx

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    God I just am totally there with this….I have so much to say but it all will come down to a few simple words…..I love you….you are so more real and that in itself has a pain all of it’s own attached to it. You will never walk alone….NEVER XXXXXXX You are far too precious X

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    I took this one down but decided it belongs up :))

    thank you for all your care and consideration…it means the world to me xxx

  • BiographyofRed8

    BiographyofRed8

    this poem seems very personal, almost like a letter.. with the flowing river taking two people to different places.. beautifully written

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Hey Red,

    after I read your comment, I did freak a bit as it is very personal, I woke this morning and decided it should be up – and when I consider my work, each piece really is a part of me….

    thank you xxx

  • ambient-1

    ambient-1

    You know, best friends and soul mates are forever and in many cases, unconditional. Whereas lovers are so very conditional and in many cases, temporary. You will always be in my heart and so will the crystal flowing creek. Many deep, warm hugs to you beautiful Lisa! X

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    “You know, best friends and soul mates are forever and in many cases, unconditional. Whereas lovers are so very conditional and in many cases, temporary. “

    Wow that belongs in super size font, bold and on my fridge….as a reminder of truth…

    Thank you so much for being a friend…
    xx

  • Cassey

    Cassey

    One of the saddest yet most beautiful pieces I’ve read. Hearts are so strong and meant to be broken at times, and you know what I told you. I am proud that you decided to republicate (is this a word) this piece.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you so much…so very much X x X

  • Erika .

    Erika .

    This has to be the most beautiful deep and profound poem of unconditional love I have read in a long while…..this is just utterly beautiful Lisa. And I agree with what Robert has said. Very true and wise words…This is a super favorite. XX

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thanks Erika,

    I am so glad you read “unconditional love”.....
    and indeed, Robert did say it wisely….

    xxx

  • Sally Omar

    Sally Omar

    so sad…yet so beautiful..touches the soul…amazing!!!!!!! xoxoxoxo

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    awwwwwww thank you Sally…..xxxx

  • Del Millar

    Del Millar

    Those last ‘things’ – the prolonging the agony things – you write here with
    a clarity I can feel; the wrenching from skin one felt to be in and of each other
    for all time.
    a solitary man when he found me
    a solitary man when we parted

    now walking apart
    right or wrong

    A most beautiful work Lisa

    Search for you now sweetheart….

    Much love from me oxoxox and wishes for lots of little sweet happenings
    in each day and peace within.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    I really can’t thank you enough…...

    I have faith that you can feel it…xxxx

  • Caroline Gorka

    Caroline Gorka

    How sad ..beautifully written from deep down in your heart.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    x x x

  • Tracey Mac

    Tracey Mac

    I cried….....you are so deep….....and this is like a stream running straight from your heart
    All my love to you…....and big warm hugs forever xxx

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Lots of love for you…..

    thank you for your precious comment xxx Hugs..

  • Shoaib .

    Shoaib .

    you are so delicious as a writer
    haha
    brilliant poem

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Oi I’m delicious fullstop hehe lol…

    Thank you Shoaib xx

  • Solar Zorra

    Solar Zorra

    Simply amazing! You’ve written this so accurately with images so real. I’ve been on this trip down the creek, the banks are slippery. :) SZ

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you SZ, I’ve no doubt the banks are….I could use a mud bath…:)) xxx

  • Rhana Griffin

    Rhana GriffinRedbubbley Schweppervescence

    I broke my favourite button. My dear heart… this is heart wrenchingly beautiful.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    I’ll fix your favourite button My Bellababe…..thank you from the bottom of my heart for being you and for being there for me always…for loving me real xxx

  • Suzanne German

    Suzanne German

    touching to the core lisa…xxx

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    xxx

  • Astoreth

    Astoreth

    This makes me cry like a three year old. love you. xxxx

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    love you too xxx

  • Symmetry45

    Symmetry45

    My God Lisa, this is the best piece you’ve ever lived and breathed.

    In the midst of sadness you’ve conjured a beauty, a dream of what was, in hopes of what might yet become.

    I’m crying for this and for you because this is the beauty that is the woman I’ve come to call my friend.

    My wish for you is that life leads you as you lead it, hand in hand into contented horizons.

    I love you sweetheart, more than you’ll ever know….just wow…..

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    I’m still at a loss for words…...xxx I’ll get there.

  • Rhenastarr

    Rhenastarr

    Congrats on your beautiful feature. Such beautiful words that flow so easily upon the tongue. Wonderfully illuminating.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you very much :))

    I’m honoured to be featured :))

  • Isa Rodriguez

    Isa Rodriguez

    I am so touched by this beautiful writing….....so sad… so mourningly lovely . I feel this, ..

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you very much Isa, such a lovely comment…:

  • Birgitta

    Birgitta

    Featured!
    Way to go. ;)

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    hehe…..xxx

  • bearpaw

    bearpaw

    xoxo

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    xoxox

  • Ushna Sardar

    Ushna Sardar

    Love this Lisa! just love the way you write! xo

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you so very much to you and to CORE :)))) I’m really honoured…

  • Rex Inkpen

    Rex Inkpen

    wonderful lisag. love the watery imagery and the tales heavenly reslution.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    awwww thanks Rex xoxo

  • MrHill

    MrHill

    This is very good.. like a fault beneath the earth we stirred and splintered… thank you…

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you Mr Hill :))

  • natapee

    natapee

    this is beautiful. especially this line – you shall never walk alone inside my heart I will walk on
    with you tucked up inside

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you so much, Dear Nat xxx

  • Matt Penfold

    Matt Penfold

    This is so real and so beautifully written Lisa, I feel the sadness and finality in it, I see you crying over it… It had the same effect on me when I read it months ago, very evocative and powerful. x

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    I woke thinking about this piece…..
    and missing that what was.
    a real sense of being alone has grabbed me in its vice grip..

    I’ve got to swallow hard…
    xo

  • Matt Penfold

    Matt Penfold

    That sense of being alone is cold and cruel and deceptive, sometimes it takes far more than it’s fair share of the stage and stops all the real stars from shining… you’ve plenty of real stars loosening the vice Lisa x

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    if you were not so far, I’d run to you for a cuddle.
    xo

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