Serendipity’s Pass

Lisa  Jewell
Author: Lisa Jewell
Word Count: 94
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Serendipity’s Pass

A rewrite

Long lines stretch
through trials
hoping to reach
Serendipity’s Pass
not knowing
if life knows the reason
or altitude of day and night
or the dreamers way
at times bashing blindly
shredding layers of skin
reaching for the night light
possessed by demons
flicking the switch on and off
herding lines into corners
to cower and fidget with the harlequin
sewing a message on the final curtain
spurring all dreamers
to rip everything apart
with a bloody masturbation
of oxygen
that will suck lines through the iron gates
of Serendipity’s Pass
to unabashedly dream.

  • MyheART

    MyheART

    wow…powerful and intense…excellent writing:)

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you so much, Robin xx

  • Emmahleee

    Emmahleee

    Yes, very powerful writing

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you for reading, Emma :))

  • DeviousLili

    DeviousLili

    shredding layers of skin and reaching for the nightlight …

    Have you been seeing my nightmares? Wonderful flow in this one, sweetheart. *snugs

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Sometimes I feel as though my nightmares are playing out on the big screen. I’ve found myself trying to find the projector so I can turn the feature off…
    I have wondered at times if while watching is it possible I am watching other’s person’s nightmares. I am weird.

    Thank you so much beautiful….reach out for my hand next time you’ve in a nightmare..xxx

  • Symmetry45

    Symmetry45

    Absolutely one of your best pieces sweetheart.

    I miss you SO much Lisa. Always on my mind I assure you beautiful one.

    Love to you my friend…..

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Hi Steve,

    I’m thrilled you think so highly of this piece…

    Don’t go away then you won’t miss me…;) xx

  • Rebekah  Anderson

    Rebekah Anderson

    This has a completely tangible anger and franticness to it that brings it almost alive. This wonderful, loaded writing, Lisa. I love it xx

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    This piece did come from a darker place….thanks Rebekah your comments are always so thoughtful xxx

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    Life sometimes just doesn’t give us the reason or the height or width of what may seem immovable…..the feelings here of what the fuck was that…...this conveyed an element of fear and determination to get what is needed….”to unabashedly dream”......don’t know if I am way of the mark here but this is what I felt. Brilliant piece…..XXXX

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    You are deliciously on the mark….my intuitive friend. There are times when I would like the dimensions of thoughts and feelings…perhaps then I could knit a warm jumper for them.

    xxx

  • mimi yoon

    mimi yoon

    frantic and violent… brilliantly conveyed emotion, lisa…
    hope you’re sleeping tight right now with beautiful dreams…
    love ya~
    xxx

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    How I adore your interpretations…you know that even when you comment you paint…
    Thank you Darling Mimi xxx

  • erika15

    erika15

    ...wow…so strong…love this part:
    “not knowing
    if life knows the reason
    or altitude of day and night
    or the dreamers’ way?

    Filled with such emotion. Intense writing….as always, it’s a pleasure reading your work. :)

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    You are such a sweetheart, such a talent and gracious with your time and care. Thank you Erika..xx

  • erika15

    erika15

    ooops! take off the ? beside “way” Sorry. :)

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    xxx

  • ambient-1

    ambient-1

    This has a passion that overrides the intellectual. It’s raw, emotional and self-revealing.
    Powerful stuff Lisa! This is fundamentally human. I love it!

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Your encouragement and insights have come to mean so very much to me. It is strange how that can occur between two people so quickly…or is it? x

  • Del Millar

    Del Millar

    Writing from the core of the deepest feeling of the moment of grasping.
    This reached me to my innermost oxo

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    It is times like these I feel myself spinning around in circles, flapping my arms like dodo bird….screaming thank the Gods I love writing..

    xxxx

  • Shoaib .

    Shoaib .

    wow ! not only do i love your words but i love your passion for them
    i feel it mirrors mine

    :) for that you are gorgeous

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thanks Shoaib, I am a passionate wordy…..amongst some absolutely mind-blowing other wordy’s…so glad of your company. xx

  • p.s. eliot

    p.s. eliot

    doing rewrites now? great work lise. rewrite them all…lol

    love you, love you work;)

    pass on and then pass over
    under the beautiful broken table
    with only 3 legs

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Hey Hudson,

    I’m taking a leaf off your tree :)) I doubt I’ll rewrite them all LOL you nutter.

    I feel like a table with 3 legs…what an excellent description…

    xxx

  • Cassey

    Cassey

    Strong writing from a strong soul.

    not knowing
    if life knows the reason
    or altitude of day and night
    or the dreamers’ way

    Life never knows the reason.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you Cassey,

    I tend to agree with you….xxx

  • Ben Ruskin

    Ben Ruskin

    Oh wow, really powerful words..but beautifully written. This is brilliant.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you very much, Ben :))))

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