Growing Up (Flash)
“Happily ever after” Flash Fiction Challenge winner, to my huge surprise.
Once upon a time the world was mine. With a snap of my fingers it would appear. With a blink of my eye the sun would rise, with another, night would draw near.
My world was amazing; it could change in a wink from a spaceship to a schoolroom and then to a farm where sad-eyed ponies and cows and dogs would come at my call, great people all, to play the day away.
Then something went wrong. Other people came along and took over my world, and it refused to change when I tried. It became solid and boring and frighteningly real. And the days all go faster and never slow down; my world is on a downhill slope without brakes and there is only one ending.
So I comfort myself for the loss of this world with steadfast hope in that happily ever after.
indeterminacy
This is so right, works so well, I predict another win.
Leoni Venter replied
Thanks Inde! Well, your track record is very good so far ;)
Dorothy Venter
“other people came” – why do I feel like the culprit?
In any case, guilty or not, I think it is a well writen work taking us all back to our beginnings.
Well done.
Leoni Venter replied
Not to worry Mom, I don’t blame you ;)
Larry Davis
I have just turned 60, and I still remember vividly playing cowboys & indians in the long grass, and building a soap-box billycart so I could race it down the street and win the world championship.
Nowadays I loose myself from reality, by getting involved in my photography and music.
My real world disappeared when I grew up.
Damian
Very nice Lee! I hope you find some brakes :)
Peter Davidson
very well writen flash indeed. Well done!
Natella2020
This is such a wonderful piece of writing.
fleece
omg leoni this happened to me too :)
Natella2020
Congratulations, Leoni. It was a well-deserved win! And Indeterminacy predicted right, didn’t he?
Leoni Venter replied
Thanks so much! Yes, Inde’s getting scarily good at this. I told him I should employ him to predict wins for me, because when he does, I do ;)
Chanel2
Well done leoni, a great story and well deserved win :)
Peter Davidson
Well done on your win!
Mary (~~wv~~)
Congratulations on your win… very well deserved!
I can SOOO relate to this! Beautifully written!