Dream

Leoni Venter
Author: Leoni Venter
Word Count: 246
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Dream

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My dream was thus:
A wooded glade, and moonlight streaming down
like scarves of silk, so delicate, through trees and leaves
and to the ground.
I saw a figure sleeping there,
stretched in the fragrant grass:
She wore my face
and in repose looked pale and cold and fair.
Then from the east a movement came
and from the wood it stepped:
Its mane a blowing, tail a flowing,
hooves struck sparks of forest green
as to my other self it strode
and with its golden horn aglow
gently touched her sleeping brow.
She woke at that, my other self,
with nimble poise she rose,
touched the slender graceful neck
and stroked the velvet nose.
Then she bowed with deep respect,
looked in the liquid eyes.
Like the center of a storm they were:
eternal movement caged and tamed
yet burning still with fearless will
and courage never shamed.
It then bent down, that shining soul:
allowed my other self to mount.
Its mane she gripped, it read her thought
and through the forest night they rode.
Like faerie steed and SĂ­dhe they flew
and where they went, they only knew.

I woke this morn, the dream but wisps
the woodland glade but haze.
But through me pounds the rhythm still:
the hooves, the wind, the daze.
And on my forehead, soft but glowing
shines a mark but rarely seen:
A hoof, a horn, what is it showing,
and is it real, or just a dream?

  • Carisma

    Carisma

    This piece is absolutely delightful!!!
    Now you must do one of you great fantasy picture to much this special mood…...

    Exceptionally well written and rhymed – congratulations! Please do more of this!

  • Leoni Venter

    Leoni Venter

    Thanks! I’ll give a picture a try, I certainly have enough images in my head to do something :-)

  • Dorothy Venter

    Dorothy Venter

    This is as good as any poem I have ever read. You have real talent and should exploit it to the full.

  • Suzanne German

    Suzanne German

    This is lovely! – you have a very unique and magical quality woven through this piece of prose!
    Please feel free to post it to the ‘Poetry & Prose – Questions & Meaning Group’

    And I would like to welcome you to the group (in advance – that is if you are interested in joining!!)
    Suzanne
    Group Moderator

  • Leoni Venter

    Leoni Venter

    Thanks so much Suzanne!

  • Joyce Dickens, IPA

    Joyce Dickens,...

    This is just beautiful Leoni!!! It is superb writing and it takes you there; very well done my young friend!!!

  • Leoni Venter

    Leoni Venter

    Thank you, Joyce!

  • Lisa  Jewell

    Lisa Jewell

    Superb writing…..mystical and so very delightful…

  • Kimberley Gifford

    Kimberley Gifford

    What a beautiful dream…..wish it were my own!!

  • Damian

    Damian

    Wonderful Leoni, a dream vision with the unicorn.

  • ladyb

    ladyb

    Beautiful.

  • Empress

    Empress

    Congratulations on the Community page feature.

  • artstruggle

    artstruggle

    Excellent piece, the action was playing like a movie in my mind as I read it.

  • genevievem

    genevievem

    a beautiful piece of writing, a pleasing, dreaming read.

  • Raymond Carle

    Raymond Carle

    wow. How do you write like that. That’s amazing

  • nodakami

    nodakami

    Congrats for the feature ! Lovely poem which reminds me of my favourite lyrics writers.

  • budrfli

    budrfli

    beautifully, magically written!

  • hugh023

    hugh023

    Nice visual poem. . .

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dream, fantasy, night, poem and unicorn