Observations at a Shopping Centre
Observations at a Shopping Centre belongs to the following groups:
! Creative Writing & Poetry ! and All Things Poetic, Artistic, PhilosophicalThe place is thick with the neon stench of socially acceptable prostitution. A smell so strong it can only be seen. It drips and pools like sticky piss, forming puddles, unbound by the laws of gravity, that move as though possessed of consciousness.
All this goes amazingly unnoticed by the horde of shoppers. Too much exposure to it has caused their eyes to be stunned, the pupils contracting to tiny points, closing off their ability to take in their atrocious surroundings.
Continued exposure over time leads to a dulling of the senses and, consequentially, a complete inability to take in anything real. At this point, the contraction of the pupils is reversed. This dilation, which gives the eyes an eerie, cartoonish appearance, signals the beginning of the permeation. First stealthy and then cloying, the strange sticky substance begins to seep in at the cracks, insinuating itself right down to the bones.
It seems that once it gets that deep, it’s got them. They’re inextricably hooked. Then the TV sets, shoes and two-for-one towel sets being pimped by shop assistants become important, necessary. They want things. They are made to realize that the reason they’re not happy is because they don’t have item x. With this realization comes the somewhat dubious discovery that happiness can be bought. So long as they remember to upgrade.
ArcadiaTempest
This is brilliant…..just brilliant. I love your style of imagery….gutsy and earthy and smelly and just love it
Skip Ward
This is marvelous…great use of the language…stark imagery. I hope I was supposed to smile & laugh, because I did.
Krystle replied
no, goddamn it, you’re not allowed to smile or laugh. you’d better not be smiling or laughing at this comment either…
Shoaib .
great first line
fleece
i like your cynicism :-P
Skip Ward
won’t happen again