fishbowl
not sure really.
maybe someone çan explain it for me.
fishbowl belongs to the following groups:
Midnight Ramblers, The beauty of poetry and WMGi saw through fishbowls and dew drops and pearls of sweat.
saw spaceships and stardust and wide expanses.
all i want is a handhold,a collection of tears in a little glass jar or even a few wisps of saffron.
what i need is some common sense, a bit more bravery and a starfruit cut into to slivers.
if i was perfect i would be courageous and dream less.
i would use big words like ‘vociferous’ and remember to water my garden .
i would stop reminiscing and accept time as a man created illusion.
i would drink less coopers and call them smile lines.
what i need is some strong arms to do the holding, heavy lifting and pick me starfruit.
what i want is a timemachine and the ability to embrace those some moments forever.
see the cracked hearts burnt fingers and closed boxes?
i see through camera lenses and steamy windows and keyholes to nowhere.
ArcadiaTempest
The main feeling from this writing was the need to be cared for , to be able to rest a while and the unique qualities that make us who was scattered in this. A twist of sadness peppered with that desire for some moments that there was a lighter sense of life maybe as well…..well that is how I found this writing tonight. Quite a moving piece of writing for me X
koby replied
thank you, yes as i re-read it there is definitely sadness. your comment rings very true..
linaji
i would use big words like ‘vociferous’ and remember to water my garden .
i would stop reminiscing and accept time as a man created illusion.
i would drink less coopers and call them smile lines.
Brill work for me my friend.. I think Karen Sue said quite a bit.. I live the above lines as for me they are about acceptance.. of ALL OF LIFE.. it is what it is.. God Bless us for allowing our selves to be here to experience this leading edge of thought!! Love it FAV!
koby replied
ha, that comment could be poem in itself. wonderful! acceptance it is!
halftone
I’m not sure either, however I think the two ladies above have gotten close.
natapee
we all wish we could be a little more brave, have a bit more muscle and be able to hold on to the things that feel transient. this was beautifully wistful. love the repetition.
koby replied
thank you kindly :)
Natella2020 24 days ago
I liked your transitions – how the flow of each phrase leads from the vast and abstract to the thoughtful and meaningful of the tangible and the everyday. I think what this poem captures is the depth of an instant of time. Have you ever wondered what it would be like to chronicle the history of a second? It would have to be infinite, and infinity is what I got out of your poem.