Circus moving on

Creaking timber, and grumbling wheels rolled over the dirt road as we set off on our slow journey onto the next town. I settled back in my cushion bed, safe against the rolling motion of the cart as Black Bessie pulled us on into the future. Leaving Martin riding on the hard seat. Replete I closed my eyes.

In the shadows of the wooden caravan I dozed as the rest of the weary troupe followed Bessie’s lead. Martin knew where to go and what to do, so I left him to it. The sounds of the lively conversations from the followers drifted towards us, muted slightly through the timber, accompanied by the steady patter of the young children of the village running alongside as they made their repeated farewells. Every year, we had to turn people away who wanted to abandon their tedious life for one perceived as exhilarating. The circus with its daring exploits, bright colours, and outrageous clowns always seemed inexplicably attractive. Maybe having grown up with it I had lost, or perhaps never gained, that sense of delight and wonder. Of course, they never see the unexciting work, only the chance to flaunt themselves in front of the public; a different town each week.

For one girl the attraction had been too great, and despite many refusals, had persisted in taking her interest to the top. She came to me, as ringmaster and offered herself to the circus, her determination new no bounds. I accepted and she jumped into my arms. She smelt so sweet, so fresh that I had fight to hold on to my resistance. Early dusk light coated the vibrant colours with a muted grey light. The timing was all wrong.

In the security of the caravan I hid from the bright sunlight streaming across the countryside taking us far away from the village and the girl. The travelling life of the circus suited me just fine; they wouldn’t find her body for many months. It isn’t often a meal throws herself at you; what’s a vampire to do?

I know, arguably a bit predictable, and based on an idea I had for a bit of a fanfiction longer piece that never evolved. My entry for the Star twister 77 challenge Circus

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  • geoff curtis
    geoff curtisover 4 years ago

    Great words Karen.

  • :-D Thank you so much!

    – KMorral

  • DBA Lehane
    DBA Lehaneover 4 years ago

    Those darn vampires get everywhere!!! All along I was wondering what the twist was going to be…love the idea of a vampire travelling with a circus (very Darren Shan). I’d disagree that it was a predictable twist…if anything I’d argue it was a bit too cloaked. Apart from the laying in the shadows of the caravan there was nothing else to remotely suggest the character was a vampire. I wonder if you could have just used something else to hint, without givinging away? Unless there are a few clues along the way a twist can ring a little hollow. That said, I thought it was wonderfully written and was beautifully evoked.

    I know, I know…I can’t help spotting a typo….but you might want to just correct “her determination KNEW no bounds. I accepted and she jumped into my arms. She smelt so sweet, so fresh that I had TO/A fight to hold on to my resistance” Sorry – it’s the old editor in me!

  • That’s good- I like editing comments (rushing to get this uploaded in the half hour of my last lunch time before the deadline is an excuse I probably shouldn’t be using but…)

    Thanks for the great comments, I’m glad the twist was hidden. I toyed with the idea of him/ her (I still don’t know which) dreaming about the chase of the meal, but that might have been a bnit much and a bit long winded!

    – KMorral

  • Teacup
    Teacupover 4 years ago

    certainly not predictable… good twist… x

  • :-D Thanks

    – KMorral

  • Alenka Co
    Alenka Coover 4 years ago

    I like the way you can set the scene, develop the characters and tell a story with so few words!

  • It has taken much practice and lots of discarded and sometimes brutally abandoned words! Thank you so much :-)

    – KMorral

  • Zolton
    Zoltonover 4 years ago

    ha ha….great Halloween warm up!!!

  • I hadn’t thought of that :-) Cheers

    – KMorral

  • Solar Zorra
    Solar Zorraover 4 years ago

    Damn, you got me on that one! Didn’t see the vampire coming. Cool twist Zol. :) Solar

  • What a relief- to sneak past the queen of the twists :-) Cheers

    – KMorral

  • Solar Zorra
    Solar Zorraover 4 years ago

    I am so sorry, I meant to say Kpot. please forgive me.

  • lol…I hadn’t noticed either! I mis-interpreted…so don’t worry, forgiven and I might even let you have a few cookie crumbs just to be certain :-P

    – KMorral

  • Alison Pearce
    Alison Pearceover 4 years ago

    Great tale!!

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