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Fishsing

“There…I’ve used all my words up! I get lots of points for that don’t I?” Tom declared, sitting up proudly.

“All your letters? Yes you do darling.” Drawn back to the scrabble board from her ironing Louise peered down at the child friendly squares. “But only if the word is right. You don’t spell fishing with two s’s honey.”

“You don’t?” Tom looked down baffled. “But that isn’t fishing, that’s fishsing.”

“There is no such word as fishsing sweety.” Louise smiled. “You can’t use made up words.”

“But it’s not made up!”

“Sweety…fishsing isn’t … .”

“Yes there is! Daddy said. It’s that place he goes. His fishsing place!”

Louise sighed, watching her young son’s face crumple into a scowl of determination. She knew that look. It meant that Tom had put his stubborn hat on.

“He took me there once, …but it was boring! They didn’t even do Teddy Bear’s Picnic or Nellie! And all he did was sit, and stare…for hours…listening to that wailing…it was boring.”

There were times that Louise adored David for his imagination that inspired Tom, delighting him with adventures and fairy worlds. But other times, when she had to return him to the real world, to improve practical things like spelling, she dreaded the new ideas he had instilled in the young mind.

“Alright. We’ll leave it.” She was too tired to argue, resting her hand on the bulge of his forthcoming baby sister. “Let me see what I can do…”

Several hours away, David eased himself down on to the springy grass. He knew he shouldn’t be here, knew that returning, that these moments were always a risk. Lying on his front, he crawled forward slowly, ever cautious of the delicate ground beneath him.

As his chin breached the cliff edge, he heard their song echoing up the steep cliffs surrounding their inlet. Peering down, he watched entranced as they hauled themselves onto the rocks, draping their tails, glittering with water and sunlight, over their worn seats. The merwomen smiled as they reached up to brush their hair and sing for him.

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(Yes I do challenge you to say the title three times fast!)

My entry for the Start Twister 76- fishing prompt.

Hopefully an interesting twist of subject and interesting twist to end…Had to fight this one again not to leave it open ended!

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Comments

  • Alenka Co
    Alenka Coover 4 years ago

    Love the way you’ve combined the everyday elements with the not so everyday

    Title had me going till the last paragraph :)

  • :-) Thanks…I was trying to think of alternative uses for the word fishing (had to think then) aside from the obvious, but couldn’t…so invented a word instead! lol

    – KMorral

  • Zolton
    Zoltonover 4 years ago

    ha ha… a fairytale for adults. : )

  • I can’t resist them, so figured I would have a go! :-)

    – KMorral

  • CDeblin
    CDeblinover 4 years ago

    …what happens next K – DO TELL! Hahaha
    Great crescendo with the scrabble game and isn’t communication (at any level) wonderful in it’s complexity and ambiguity making for your wonderful twist!

  • …and here were me thinking that I had irradicated/ satisfied the ‘what happens next element!’

    My first draft ended with the line ‘They knew he was theirs, all they had to do was wait. ’, which was clearly too ambiguous (I hadn’t decided if he was to be prey, or their new king…)

    Communication at its best/worst is certainly a delight to try and capture :-) Thanks for such a kind comment

    – KMorral

  • DBA Lehane
    DBA Lehaneabout 4 years ago

    This is wonderful (I do love a good adult fairy tale) and it genuinely had me guessing to the end. (One little amusing typo early on you might want to change, when she’s criticising the incorrect spelling, she says “You don’t SPELLING fishing…”)

  • Well spotted! (sigh)…thanks, glad the twist was hidden, I was mildly concerned it was not so subtle. :-D

    – KMorral

  • Karirose
    Kariroseabout 4 years ago

    I sort of like the idea that he would be their prey…. but then I tend to lean to more gruesome thoughts. LOL Good write. :)

  • Well, I think the original fairy stories had (depending on the country and the creature) them as predators…so you could be the more accurate. I think only the more recent romantic works suggest otherwise. :-)

    – KMorral

  • Mark Bateman
    Mark Batemanabout 4 years ago

    Sweet… The title had me when you posted it, as you’d said you were in kind of a hurry. Could she really have spelt it wrong? Clearly not. Nice story :)

  • Lol…glad there was a small twist in the title too! (Though it is something I could do :-S) Thanks

    – KMorral

  • Solar Zorra
    Solar Zorraabout 4 years ago

    I love mermaid stories….very magical story. :) Solar

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