You know what I’d like to do?
I know you’re not a mind reader, silly. That’s why I’m going to tell you.
I’d like to go the the coast, you know, like we did last summer. It was a fabulous vacation. The best we’ve ever had together.
And how lucky was it that we were able to time our vacations at the same dates. I mean, after that business two years ago when we almost had to honeymoon separately because of scheduling mix ups. What a fiasco that was.
Even though it was a great vacation I really don’t want to get the same cabin. It was so dirty and in need of some minor repairs. Yes, you’re right. After we swept and dusted it wasn’t too bad. It did serve its purpose and made those two weeks even more memorable. What with the refrigerator turning itself off then on again and melting our ice cream, and all.
It was all so romantic. The sound of the waves crashing, the smell of the ocean, the breeze blowing the shabby curtains. Yes, very romantic. Well, except for the night we did it on the beach. It’s not nearly as romantic as the movies make it out to be. I mean, all that sand! And all the places where we found it later. Not very pleasant at all.
Yes, yes, of course you’re right. Vacation in the summer just won’t work this year. So what do you think about a trip to the city in the fall. Maybe October? It will be so awesome to peruse the art museums, take in a play or two and stay in a five star hotel.
So that’s what I’d like to do. What to you think, Honey?
Looking down she awaited his approval. But the cold, gray gravestone gave no reply.
Maureen Bloesch
Nice twist…..........guess he wasn’t much when he was breathing…now it’s YOUR time!
Karirose replied
Thanks Maureen. Glad you liked the twist.
sssshuknowwho
Good twist, really didn’t see that-a-comin’! :-)
Karirose replied
Thank you, WA! I’m so glad you didn’t see it coming! :)
Alison Pearce
Yes, great twist! Excellent write!
Karirose replied
It was the first time I tried this way of telling a story. Thank you for the high praise.
Miri
nice twist & i like the way of telling…..the sort of conversation that goes on a lot in my head!!
Karirose replied
I appreciate that, Miri. I, too, have those sorts of conversations! :D
Natella2020
This is so very sad. Either the woman was paranoid because of his death or she was crazily enjoying her time without him. At risk of sounding like a copy-cat, I would like to commend your ending.
If you don’t mind my saying, I would like to suggest the addition of quotations to indicate her diaolgue with a character (even though he’s dead). But your the writer, and if you like this better, I respect that. It was a very nice tale.
Karirose replied
I debated whether I should have used quotation marks or not. I thought of reasons to go either way. I’m still not sure which way would be the best but since you made the suggestion, perhaps quotation marks would be the better.
Thank you very much for not only reading but commenting as well as the kind words.
Natella2020
Thanks for your consideration.
Warrior
cool words!
Karirose replied
thanks
Warrior
Anytime Rose…...these are really wonderful lines…...:X
Debbie Irwin
Wonderful story!
PJ Ryan
mwahahahaha (that’s my evil laugh)
great writing !!