Summer Breeze

Looking out from the deck of their summer cabin, Jo squinted as diamonds of light danced brilliantly on the breeze-blown lake. Her husband Dave was a silhouette out on the water, contentedly flicking his fishing line out as his boat slowly drifted with the soft wind. He had promised to bring back dinner.

Pine boughs gave out a faint cracking noise now and then and leaves softly rustled through the wooded area around the cabin. The chirruping noise of cicadas somehow made the day seem hotter and stiller than it really was.

Jo gave a happy sigh as she settled back down into her deck chair. This was, in essence a second honeymoon for them. Devastated, after discovering that Dave had done the stupidly obvious with his secretary, Jo had insisted on couples therapy (complete with screaming accusations and hysterical tears) and this trip to get away from it all. A fresh start was desperately needed.

Glancing at her watch, a soft smile played across Jo’s lips. It would soon be that time of the afternoon. As she adjusted the top of her bikini she knew she would never have to worry about him straying again. Bill (if that was his name) would take care of that. After all, didn’t people often have boat “accidents” on deep lakes?

She looked out at the lake again. Dave was nowhere to be seen. The sun seemed to have passed behind a cloud and she shivered.

Good.
It was done.

From the other end of the lake, Dave smiled, pleased with his catch of fish. By the time he got home to cook dinner, talk about his relaxing afternoon and have a couple of beers out on the deck with his old friend Bill, he would be a free man once again.

© Jeannette Sheehy 2010

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Comments

  • Solar Zorra
    Solar Zorraover 4 years ago

    Yes!!! A double twist……..quick and clever, very good Jeannette. :) Solar

  • cheers SZ! :) Nice to be back…been so busy!

    – Jeannette Sheehy

  • Arcadia Tempest
    Arcadia Tempestover 4 years ago

    Double crossing husband and hitman….. Bloody men!
    Good stuff….Oh and maybe her ghost can come back and rattle something later…

  • yes…a woman scorned and all that…from beyond the grave. :)

    – Jeannette Sheehy

  • Alenka Co
    Alenka Coover 4 years ago

    I like how you made the scene come to life in your second paragraph, Jeannette ….. the sounds and the heat and the stillness of summer.

  • thanks Alenka. I think I need to work on the second half! :)

    – Jeannette Sheehy

  • Matthew Dalton
    Matthew Daltonover 4 years ago

    Hey! Great to see you back. The intro to this is excellently written. (The whole piece is good in fact).

  • Hey yourself! Nice to be back. I think that the third paragraphs onward kind of clash with the first two. Perhaps it needs a bit of a re-write to keep the story cohesive in style? what do you think? I did it in a hurry just to try and get back into writing, but now I think of things I could have written or done to make it a lot better and stronger. Might have a second go at it. :) Nice to see you back. I’m going to read your new story when I get home from work tonight.

    – Jeannette Sheehy

  • KMorral
    KMorralover 4 years ago

    Oooo, what happens next?! What has happened to Bill? This is a tantelising double twist that asks demands more!
    Great to see you back, I think you can safely say that I have been drawn in hook line and sinker. :-)
    Fab very real descriptions and I love the line ‘he did the stupidly obvious with his secretary’, who needs more explanation then that?!

  • cheers KM! :) glad you liked it! :)

    – Jeannette Sheehy

  • Alison Pearce
    Alison Pearceover 4 years ago

    Wonderful!! So glad to have you back Jeanette!

  • thanks Alison- a lot has been going on in my world at home. Been getting ready for art shows etc.. good to get a break. :)

    – Jeannette Sheehy

  • CDeblin
    CDeblinover 4 years ago

    Hi Jeanette, Whats the saying? Keep your friends close and enemies closer?
    “The sun seemed to have passed behind a cloud and she shivered. Good. It was done.”ooooo now I’m shivering! ha! Great write and a great read! Kind regards Cobie :-)

  • thank you Cobie – I’ve really been enjoying reading your stories :)

    – Jeannette Sheehy

  • Zolton
    Zoltonover 4 years ago

    ha ha ha… yes… good to have you back. : )

    a guy once said to me “the bitches come and go, but a friend is forever”. This caused me to scowl at him. haha!

  • haha!! that’s hilarious!!! :)

    – Jeannette Sheehy

  • Zolton
    Zoltonover 4 years ago

    Hey… welcome back, lady : )

  • Zolton
    Zoltonover 4 years ago

    Jeannette… totally forgot to feature this! So sorry… done now! Aaaarg! xx

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