Death in the Morning

Author: Jeannette Sheehy
Word Count: 268
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Death in the Morning

Death in the Morning belongs to the following groups:

All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Graphic Scratch, Short stories - Spherical Scriptings, Twisted Tales, Up & Coming Writers and WMG

The room was hushed, save for the mournful keening of notes emanating from the old electric organ in the corner. The woman at the keyboard looked depressed as if she had gone through a hard life of misery; her magnified eyes blinking furiously behind large spectacles, her hands moving as if of their own accord over the notes, sharps and flats.

People quietly nodded a solemn greeting to their neighbour as they took a seat amongst the rows of chairs laid out. All eyes were turned to the front. Two young women entered the room, catching up on news and each other’s lives with whispers and giggles. A short burst of laughter from one of them drew a couple of stares and frowns, quenching their good humour as they quickly found their places.

Outside, the sky burst with brilliant blue. Clouds scudded across the azure canvas like puffs of white cotton wool, rejoicing in freedom. Trees danced and shouted a welcome to the breeze, echoed by the flowers bobbing in the hedgerows. Nature was alive; bright, glorious and exultant.

As the final funereal note from the organ died, the elderly man seated at the front of the room stood wearily. His face was grey and lined with years of disappointment. He gazed out at those seated before him, and sighed. He was about to utter the same words he had uttered so many times before; words that did not seem to make a difference to those who came, to those who heard.

“Good morning, and welcome to our Sunday Praise and Worship Service.”

Kazzoom IPA

a women of many talents well written, love the twist at the end.
Jeannette Sheehy replied

thanks Kazz! I wrote this a couple of years back…and decided to take the plunge and put it on RB…(it’s kind of based on my true life experience for a couple of years!!! and I was one of the giggling wimmen!!) Thanks so much for the kind comment :)
Karin Taylor

oh that had me intrigued…
I love how it’s not what we thought it was!!!
Jeannette Sheehy replied

thanks so much Karin.. I really appreciate it. I went to a church like that for a couple of years…now I go to a great vibrant and lively church, thank goodness!! :)
Kazzoom IPA

now why dosnt that surprise me
Wayne Cook

Superbly written, a sharp left turn at the end drove me to excitement at an author who has a vibrant and creative mind!
Jeannette Sheehy replied

thank you so much Wayne – I really appreciate you reading and commenting on this :)
iAN Derrick

Like they say in de good books…”Dat dame has bin truly blessed.”
Jeannette Sheehy replied

thankee most kindly sir ::curtsey:: Certain writer folk on RB have motivated me and inspired me to try a little scribing. :)
MillicentMorrow

Great descriptive piece. Most enjoyable..
Jeannette Sheehy replied

thank you very much Millicent – I still have your last piece roaring round my noggin!
Mark Bateman

Well, well Mrs Sheehy. That’s some writing, and some twist! Fantastic. So not only are you a great photographer, but you are a great writer too! We look forward to some non parodies of non RB folk.. ;)
Jeannette Sheehy replied

lol…it’s a description of how I felt for a couple of years when we were stuck in a church like this when I first moved to the states. :) I think I will leave the witty parodies to the excellent Messrs. Bateman & Derrick LLC.
Christopher Bi...

wow, mz j, wasnt expecting this. will need a re read, great descriptions, i can see the images so clearly from this…c xx
Jeannette Sheehy replied

Thank you so much c – I’m glad you enjoyed it. I’m paying for it this morning though, having stayed up so late last night writing it. (I lost my first draft when our old computer crashed a few weeks back). Cheers m’dear!! J :)
Enivea

Lol, should be sent out to all churches as a ‘wake-up call’!! You’ve really nailed it, great twist!
Jeannette Sheehy replied

Thanks Enivea…glad you enjoyed it! :)
tjsnow

That was beautiful. You really paint a picture with this.
Jeannette Sheehy replied

thank you so much – I’ve only just started scribbling stuff down..so I’m glad you liked it :)
darrell1973day

cool piece. it’s funny at the end. I don’t know if that was intentional but it made me smile, anyway. I like this very much. Good work.
Jeannette Sheehy replied

thanks Darrell – yes it was intentional…lol… I was at a place like this for a couple of years… I appreciate the comment and glad you liked it. Thanks for taking the time to stop by :)