in the bottle
ive spent some time
swimming helplessly
round and round
inside her angry
womb
until she throws
me up onto
the cold unforgiving
Sydney streets
where i lose blood
and teeth
in fist fights
and piss myself
in public
one hand
on the
shoulder of
a friend
singing
sex
drugs
and rock
n roll
hurling
abuse at strangers
that hurl bottles
then fists
and kicks
and alone
again
i bleed on the
pavement
thinking
of my
family
whom
i no longer
speak to
or recognize
through
these
corrupt
tainted
old blue eyes
that now
cry in
irony
at the
sight of
all things
beautiful.
Cassey
Intense. I wish you would write more. You have stories to tell.
joshuapie replied
thanks Cassey
been writing a couple of short stories of late which i have never done before so i am a bit hesitant to share them. but yes i do have stories, lots of them but putting them in words i find difficult.
peace josh
Shoaib .
great stuff … your stuff is exciting to read
joshuapie replied
thanks shoaib! glad you liked it man
peace josh
JonoCarrick
Joshua this is amazing. Wow!
joshuapie
thank you jonocarrick ! this one was very intense for me, it just spewed out of me as it is and i read it in tears i couldnt believe it. scary stuff hey! very sad but also beautiful somehow?
peace mate josh
Yasemin Sumner
this is beautiful and urgent and raw.
joshuapie replied
thankyou so very much yasemin im thrilled you liked it.
and a very flattering comment
wow!!! i just noticed it is featured!!!
thanks, peace
leewrites
Your talent seems effortless. I really enjoy your style.
joshuapie replied
wow thats a special comment to recieve thankyou very very much
very glad you liked it.
peace josh
thesamsonite
Are you me? I’ve lived this also…
joshuapie replied
hahaha maybe?
its nice to have someone to relate…
thanks for the comment mate peace
PJ Ryan
i like the rawness of this .. the honest intensity ..
joshuapie replied
thankyou so much, i really wrote this with my heart and not my head.
i wish i could always do that…
thanks for reading and commenting
peace dear
Kym Smitt
This is really awesome mate. Grats for being featured out of all the writing on redbubble. The way you write is really raw and honest. You are so special.
joshuapie replied
FUCK i just noticed when i read your comment thats crazy, this one i wouldnt of thought… thankyou for your very beautiful words mate
truly special…
peace dude
Brandon Harris
Wow, very deep, and thought out!!
joshuapie replied
thanks dude happy you liked it.
thanks for stopping by man
peace josh
kimangeline
Joshua…very intense…raw emotion. well done!
joshuapie
thankyou so very much kimangeline i wrote this from my heart and not my head
so it felt special to me
glad you liked it thanks for reading
peace josh
phantomlimb
Really great stuff Josh, keep on writing…
joshuapie replied
thankyou for reading mate
peace
Mardra
This hits home with it’s reality. Well done, thank you for sharing.
joshuapie replied
thanks for reading mardra, glad you liked it…
peace, josh
mistletoes
What a terrible, lonely image you paint … but oh how beautifully you do it.
joshuapie replied
aawww thankyou for your beautiful words mistletoes
this was very cathartic for me…
peace josh
Leda D
i adore this! stirs up a lot of emotion in me
joshuapie replied
thankyou lozzid, im glad to of got to you thanks for reading
peace n love
Minna23
Beautiful writing,Thank you
joshuapie replied
thankyou for reading minna
glad you like
peace josh
JonoCarrick
a huge congratulations is in order for having this featured in the featured writing section.
joshuapie replied
thankyou thankyou thankyou, i couldnt beleive it, what a suprise hey
i havent been online lately and i get this lovely suprise…
how have you been? i like your new photos too
peace josh
loramae
Soooo Intense…and moving…I hate to think what brought you to these emotions,,,but applaud that you are able to pen them down…
joshuapie
thankyou very much loramae, yes alot of depth here
thanks for reading
peace josh
CrystalNoellyn
very moving, so much raw emotion…
no wonder this was featured.
joshuapie replied
thankyou crystal thats a lovely thing to say and im glad i could move you its mind blowing to me that i effect people in some way with my writing, i only started to write a few months ago and am overwhelmed with the lovely feedback i get.
i love this site its perfect
peace
pe-nutbutter
Wow!!
This is so intense and full of TRUE feeling!!
Flawless!!
joshuapie replied
thanks so so much mate i wrote this from inside thats for sure…
and thats one of my favorite compliments too
peace
Monkee
quality! raw to the bone! ;o)
joshuapie replied
thanks monkee i love to hear people say my stuff is raw its flattering
thanks for the comment dude
peace and love josh
Leo Head
great stuff…...it’s like a reflection of what i like to call “my other life”, of which past but seldom forgotten. You’ve a rare talent.
joshuapie replied
i think many can relate to this one it was very cathartic for me…
im really touched by your beautiful comment too
thanks mate peace
Prasadh
Well this might sound a bit messed up but you didn’t write about Sinatra, did you?
joshuapie replied
hahaha classic, no , about myself but all too many can relate though
thanks for reading mate
ArcadiaTempest
Very raw indeed….......cuts the paper….a story told in few words that makes you feel…
joshuapie
thankyou beautiful person , i love this comment alot
peace and love
judithtaylor
Am I your mum
are you me?
joshuapie replied
hey there thanks, um i could do with a mum right now hahaha but seriously are you my mum?
peace
Kaiya Knox
The way this moves is very intriguing. It’s short and to the point, sort of makes the emotions… sway. You know?
greeneyedlady
reading this i am struck by how easily we can trade up from feeling pain to dissolving it momentarily in fits of anger…i have always been able to do that and it has been just as bad for me as booze or any other addiction….this is a fantastic poem joshua and i hope you are not still feeling this way….=)
joshuapie
thankyou for your heartfelt comment i am glad you felt my words.
and thank god i dont still feel like this..
thankyou for your comment peace
Louise. C. Thomas
There is beauty in raw emotion and vomit. More so than in the obvious, and this is beautiful. It’s lonely and angry and really very touching. Love it. x
joshuapie
thankyou loulou6 im happy you liked this, it was amazing how these words came out from inside me,
honestly, kind of like vomit, i felt better instantly…
thanks again, josh
HAwhenlifeisfun
wow this hurts to read ( i mean that in a good way :), you convey emotions without going overboard with your words..its beautiful
joshuapie replied
thankyou very much for your comment
peace josh
ozgrunt
Well written poem about yet another loser on our streets feeling sorry for themselves and the mistakes they make. Just what we don’t need! Still it does sum up the “I’m hard done by” idiots who cause all the violence outside my flat every Friday and Saturday night.
joshuapie replied
mmm maybe you need to look inside yourself abit more? life isnt the same for others as it is for you. why is this person a loser? maybe he has a mental illness or something else that stops him from fitting into society? and i know alot of kids that are hard done by and thats not their fault…
what are you doing inside your flat every friday and saturday night? maybe if you got out and met some friends you woulnnt be so bitter…
peace
Shay-marley
ii Like ii Like.
=)
joshuapie replied
thankyou very much shay marley im glad you liked it
peace josh
Songwriter
I’ve had to sit with your poem for a while to let myself absorb it. It raised grief in me and fear and I so feel what you wrote. The beauty comes through in how you crafted so much with so few words. They all just seem to be like a simple carving, with few strokes in just the right places. I applaud you and weep.
joshuapie replied
thankyou so much,
what a lovely comment thankyou very much
i am glad you feel this
peace josh
gerrardt
wow..i like how you express yourself..well done!
joshuapie replied
thankyou gerrardt
glad you liked it
peace
caysnco
magnificent and strong…thanks for sharing.
joshuapie replied
thanks caysnco
felt nice to release that one
peace
AllisonRhodes
that was deep. it was excellent, great job.
joshuapie replied
thankyou alison for reading
peace
Moniquitacute
Great poem!!! Beautiful writing!!! :)
joshuapie replied
thanks im glad you liked it
peace and love
joshuapie
thankyou for your kind words
peace
ladidalaura
this is rugged and raw and beautiful. i like your style :) it flows well.
joshuapie replied
thankyou very much ladidalaura for your flattering comment
glad you enjoyed it
peace
roger boreham
A little tooo self indulgent for my tastes I would have liked to have seen some fresh optimistic air in dose words ,,,, but hey if you got something off your back,,,, thats ok ,,,,,
quality writing tho….
joshuapie
thanks dude
maybe there is nothing optimistic for some of us?
at times but to write from the heart, when your dying whats there to be optimistic about?
thanks for your comment
peace
TBall
Powerful stuff- it did bring out the parent/ social worker/ too gooder out in me to somehow rescue the character from Sydney and say “Go Home to your mother”. Life is too complex for simple solutions
joshuapie replied
thankyou very much tball , i would love to go home to my mother but she is crazy and lives in a park lol hahaha my life is quite colorful but i love it , but feel free to come rescue me anytime
thanks so very much for yourlovely words, and life for me is bliss these days ..
please read “my birthday love and cracked pepper” i wrote it yesterday” its nice and light
thanks again peace
naomiinreality
this is really intense i love it.
=]
xo
joshuapie replied
thankyou very much dear glad you love this , i recently have written some lighter stuff and it feels great , please feel free to read it
josh xo
13leonard
benzo you are talented write more brother
deetinley
yes he has a mother and some say she is crazy I say get fuct crazy is as crazy does I wasnt living in a park I was living in an ovapriced unit with jak shit 4 support bcoz I come from one of those fake as shit ‘look how happy we are dont look too close u may see the dysfunction type of families” I was occupying our local park in Byron Bay everyday to wrestle it bak for the children of BBay who have been treated disgracefully with our duty of care responsibility, still no skate park in bbay after 18 yrs of lobbying. (Josh was a world class skata) I did this in desperation afta years of community work to try and improve this lawless drug n alcahol pit that continues to ignore our l ocal and long suffering community. esp the young of which is a 1/4 of this shire.
I shut my gob for 3 1/2 months fighting off judgement, GOSSIP,corrupt cops, my blood family I estranged myself from months b4 who being the control freaks that they are couldnt cope with and harrased mental health and wrote to the police about my drug taking etc (my drug of choice pot) I survived a machete, syringes, broken glass, a lazy negligent council, drunks, real crazies, meth fools, cowards, women bashers and yuppie takers peddling a legal drug booze NOT my drug of choice for obvious reasons, two booze addict husbands and an alchy son tends to turn one off. Also booze is like a religion in this stink hole with tourists trashing our community continuously and drunken sexual predation a constant threat to our young girls.
I knew it would take a while and finally after blocking my emo retarded family; too little too late, support 4 my unwell son since Josh and his bro were unfathered unsupported teens, only judged by my ex family. the local cops and the community and even the homeless could see and feel the peace and clean up of the pathetic 2 acres we call a town rectangle. I was in a hurry to change the energy b4 yet another summer of abuse, rape, ciggy butts and disrespect unloads itself on the exhausted un housed local population. Also I knew Josh was going and I wanted to be able to show him wat could be achieved if we all just cared a little more. too late 4 Josh and all of us whom love him but not 4 my grandkids and my bloved nieces and nephews (no blood).
As Josh was in Melb and I knew booze was going to claim him finally I felt I had nothing to lose and it was a lesson in judgement dont say wat u r doin just do it and let them knock themselves out with their gossip. Josh passed just as the cops and mental health got it that Im NOT insane just damaged.
Oh well the park is nice n clean and the council are curiously concerned with attending to the little park where my babies grew up in.
deetinley
I love my son and have since his inception he was both my salvation and my crushing but he is safe and at peace now with my dead muthas and friends. He liked to pretend he was mothaless but truth is if he nothing else he always had a mama whom loved his fabulously flawed and unique self and always will thing is NO ONe got me like him altho it was a combative relationship from the get go. When there is no caring relatives NO REAL GET UR HANDS DIRTY in the emotional work (the HARD work) wen u afta begging for help with them go ignored and u know u have to go it alone u tend to feel a bit ripped off.
fuk all youall who judged me and my kid walk a mile in someone elses shoes and then JUDGE if u must.
I love and miss u son ALWAYS UR mama xxx
deetinley
fuk u booze n tourettes, depression and anxiety medications fuk u too Josh for hurting so many of us…wish I could stop loving u.