You and I

Jim Marshal
Author: Jim Marshal
Word Count: 75
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You and I

Meeting on the inside first.

You and I belongs to the following groups:

! Creative Writing & Poetry !, Freedom In Words & Art, The Sensual Word and WMG

You’re blessed enough to have me
even though you don’t.
I’ll be your silver sea, you my blonde earth.
I know your time-trapped beauty,
your gracious urn. Your patience
is worth waiting for.

Most couples meet in domes of flesh
and greet the sun, its naked rose.
But you and I are not like that, from inside
the temple comes the spire.
Tied to coloured stakes; immortal leaves,
shades of fire.

  • Astoreth

    Astoreth

    Your choice of words is always so stunningly beautiful and so fitting for the very different person that you are my dear friend. xxxx

  • erika15

    erika15

    Just beautiful. Your words just bloom when put together in poems. This is really captivating. Very nice writing. :)

  • Leda D

    Leda D

    this is beautiful.

  • Jim Marshal replied

    Thank you.

  • liliana

    liliana

    This is so deep, meaningful and beautiful ….such soulful writing

  • Jim Marshal replied

    Thanks liliana, means a lot. x

  • linaji

    linaji

    Holy Cow.. I am in awe.. maybe you would like to meet this other fine poet.. parole
    mewhile.. I will savor every moment I come over.. your so not contrived..

  • Gabby87

    Gabby87

    WOW …............................................. That’s so very lovely and beautiful..
    And nice work too!!!!
    =D

  • Jim Marshal replied

    Cheers Gabby, appreciate your visit.

  • erika15

    erika15

    If I already favorited, I will do it again. Just love this one.

  • Jim Marshal replied

    Thanks Erika!

  • natapee

    natapee

    lovely choice of words.

  • Paul Compton

    Paul Compton

    Captivating. Quite delicate and thoughtful. I love this piece.

  • Holly Ringland

    Holly Ringland

    jim, i just promptly fell in love with this piece.

  • Jim Marshal replied

    whoa really? I’m so happy… thanks, nice to hear from you :)

  • Kristin  Reynolds

    Kristin Reynolds

    from inside
    the temple comes the spire.
    Tied to coloured stakes; immortal leaves,
    shades of fire.

    awesome. you know it. love, K

  • Jim Marshal replied

    ;)

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    A deep work on love between two….really wonderful imagery. Poetry that totally involved my emotions….I am in love with the romances of life so it is always so uplifting to read about such things especially when it is written so eloquently .X

  • Jim Marshal replied

    in love with the romances…. that doesn’t seem remotely like tautology to me… lol thanks Karen Sue, you words are always well received.

  • Philosophy Lee

    Philosophy Lee

    “Your patience
    is worth waiting for.”
    These words were ‘worth
    waiting for’! :)

  • Jim Marshal replied

    Ah that means a lot from you, the master of zen koans… lol

  • wasy35

    wasy35

    great write jim, your patient worth waiting for, excellent.

  • Jim Marshal replied

    thanks wasy, I appreciate your comment.

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    Hi Jim….yep tautology is one of my favorite haunts that I like to frequent as much as possible whenever I possibly can if I get the chance to ….. ;)

  • artyfifi

    artyfifi

    Sublime. Joy to read!

  • hsien-ku

    hsien-ku

    passionate yet elegant. a beautiful piece of writing! any woman who hears these words from you is very lucky.

  • Ushna Sardar

    Ushna Sardar

    fabulous Jim!

  • hsien-ku

    hsien-ku

    “H-K227: collaboration with Jim Marshal” was featured in artists of redbubble
    :)

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