Why does the taste of pennies remind you of losing a tooth?

I love the fact you’ve selected so few points at which to capitalise – and found the parts with parentheses spot-on. Well done! Love the title too xoxo

excellent dear

Your words about sunsets have me longing for a fuchsia sky. X o

beautiful writing !! this is amazing

good job everyone else has said what I wanted to say. keep up the great work

ah for a second reading the title i thought “pennies” said “penises” and I was like, okay that is interesting.
but it did not and it was way better. great work. i agree that the parenthetical parts are perfect.

oh wow
i love this.
so surreal and so much in it. ;-) xox

great imagery….sublime….

The birthing in the clouds …..rather amazing, the concept is so original and stunning to me.. This whole write just oozes such depth into the hidden need/want/desires in the human psyche. WOW!

i think because blood can taste coppery?

So good I wanna put on some flippers Jess :)

epic

I just love the message in this poem…the last lines are so hopeful

I wasn’t bled from the sea
The sky bled me, opened
her clouds, her
vaginal wounds
And spitting and coughing in grays
and bruised violets gave birth.....Love this part, the imagery is incredible. “The Birth of Venus” came to mind when I read that….except you came from the sky. x

Very nice Jess.

beautifully written, the words tumble lightly down the page. I sense a sad almost regretful feeling. well done :))

The title alone was worth the look , but the poem and the imagery lived up to it. Cool poem

omg this is so kewl !

interesting poem

love x

Visceral, intellectual, physical, spiritual. This poem is a feast for the mind and heart.

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This is very beautiful. I love it.

super imagery. I envy your title talent. Grin.

this reads like ocean waves.

awesome

beautiful writing !! We are immersed in love inside, but never lost.
Love is a myth, filled the air in every corner.

This is sweet! Like your cloud birth thang. COOL! Cheers, Rhino

Wow! I’m breathless, speechless. Great lines.

nice im speechless

wonderful writing…..

I love this piece very much – the last two lines are just simply beautiful.

Sublime is the perfect word. Lush. :)

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beautiful writing, wonderful imagery

I love this! The imagery, everything; it’s just…wow.

Sublime – the cloud birthing imagery is just incredible. What a provocative, moving piece. Beautiful!

the bleeding, coughing, waning, waxing
whispering, swimming and aching to a…float

splendid writing and imagery

beautiful, evocative writing! the imagery is gorgeous.