He always thought
her eyes
mirrored water
forever on the move
and deep
so deep
it terrified him
in her dark depths
She thought
his blew through her
like the air
winter air
cold and fleeting
almost
as if
they didn’t
want to be trapped
where
nothing grew
either
so
he held his breath
and she pulled
her shawl
around her throat
for warmth
and together
they both
fell victim
to the elements
atomikboy
Thats awesome Jessica…...
greeneyes
brilliant
Lisa Jewell
Tragic…...:(
Jess, this is a stunning piece….
Hayley Cafarella
i love it, it creates such a beautiful moving image in my mind that I wish i could paint things and make them move…
shaktipat
here’s to throwing ourselves into the fire – or diving in deep – and being blown away.
Nikki Trexel
simply amazing….i love the stark rhythm and the simple words…a bleak and profound picture.
bellerjeau
I love poetry like this one. It allows the reader to be in the same thought and feeling you were in when writting.
c’ est excellent !!
B
PJ Ryan
I have read this quite a few times … damn those elements xx
Erin Lyall
It’s amazing that you can grasp things like this and put it in writing.
Van Cordle
Excellent!!
Luke Downes
oh…damn…
reminds me of the girl i think about more than i should…
bronbennie
tragic
Shoaib .
incredible… wow
msdebbie
Maybe it’s my mood, but the conclusion doesn’t seem all that tragic to me? I love the lines
and together/they both/fell victim/to the elements (except perhaps for the word victims?) But after all, I think we all can be slaves to love, lust, or powreful emotions.
Great thought-provoking piece whatever way you interpret it though!
Congrats xoxoxo