I Wanted To Write You A Love Song

JenniferB
Author: JenniferB
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I Wanted To Write You A Love Song

I have a mix of poems I’ve been writing offline, both hard, soft, clean and dirty… This is one of the softer ones, it began without rhyme and then somehow kind of stumbled into a pattern of rhyming, I may revise and edit it some time, but for now, this is all there is.

I wanted to write you a love song
but the words felt awkward
falling from my fingers
like a clumsy adolescent
all limbs and no brain
or a newly born foal
falling and then trying
to find its feet again

I wanted to write you a love song
but the words that I needed
to describe how I feel
are an unfamiliar language
and don’t do justice
to the feelings so strong
and so real
inside of me

I wanted to write you a love song
filled with gratitude and care
at how you managed to dig through
all of the layers that are me
to find something of substance
hidden there
which is something that nobody else
has been able to do
but I can’t find the words
to be able to say
that I thank you

I wanted to write you a love song
find the melody and tune
that makes words sing
and describes all of the hope and laughter
just having you around
can bring
and you don’t even need
to say too much
sometimes it’s just in the way
that you reach out and touch
the parts of me
nobody else has found
it’s in the silent space between us
and in the lack of sound
a feeling that can’t be expressed
that just sits in the very heart
of my chest
waiting for you to breathe life into it

I wanted to write you a love song
but I find it easier
to talk dirty and rough
because I’m so much more used to
playing a role
and acting tough
defending myself without a war
accepting less
while taking more
scared that if I don’t play it hard
your feelings and words will break my facade
and I’ll expose more of myself
than I know how to handle
your love shining through me
burns like a candle
of hope
kinda makes me feel scared
because I’d have to acknowledge
how much I cared
and sometimes it hurts less
to know less
or feel less
and say less

I wanted to write you a love song
a kind of thank you song
for helping me through
the times and places
I could only get to
with you by my side
to guide me and steer me
through the memories I’d chosen
to keep buried so long
that only you could help me
to feel strong
to deal with
and feel with
those places I couldn’t
handle alone
where you’re the only person
I’ve trusted or known
well enough to open
myself up to you
to let you inside
let you break through
the borders and barriers
that surround me
you found me
and cared

I wanted to write you a love song
but I’m just not used
to soft sentimental shit
and sometimes even though it’s wrong
that which is familiar
is so much easier to handle
than to let it
break down or make way
for feelings or words
that are too hard to say
all the things I would tell you
all the dreams I could sell you
all the promises I could make you
and places I’d take you
if I could only write you
a love song

I wanted to write you a love song
but instead
these words were the best I could do
and I know they don’t really
truly describe
the range of feelings
that I feel inside
but they’re all that I have
and all I could find
in the recesses and alcoves
of my mind…

So they’ll have to do
these words to you

that should have been

a love song.

  • eon man

    eon man

    WOW

  • JenniferB replied

    You like?

  • invisible

    invisible

    WOW …TWICE !!!! Andre & Andre
    MERCI JENNIFER !;)(;

  • JenniferB replied

    Aww… Thanks invisible. :-)

  • giovanni

    giovanni

    difficult sometimes to trust another…place yur heart in anothers hand…love this alot. :)

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks giovanni, I’ve been reading your fantastic poems this morning so your words of encouragement mean a lot to me.

  • martinilogic

    martinilogic

    That was freakingly awesomely so real…...and so eloquently spoken.

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks martin… weird, I feel a bit shy and awkward about this softer kind of writing and yet I can cuss comfortably like a ho any old time. :-)

  • Vivian V Mairo

    Vivian V Mairo

    how beautiful for the one you wrote that, you offer so much to him

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks Vivian. :-)

  • Niki Renee

    Niki Renee

    amazingly written
    I too find it hard to write my feelings towards matt down
    Magnificant

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks Niki, sometimes it’s like if you write them down they’ll slip away from you… kind of. :-)

  • martinilogic

    martinilogic

    cuss away

  • JenniferB replied

    Ha! I might keep the sheets in here clean for a little while longer… I’ll go mess up someone else’s bed. ;-)

  • martinilogic

    martinilogic

    You are wise too…... Damn

  • JenniferB replied

    ;-)

    xox

  • PJ Ryan

    PJ Ryan

    I think you just wrote that love song :)

    beautiful ..

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Nicole. :-)

  • eon man

    eon man

    I’m Hummin it.

  • JenniferB replied

    I’m Hummin YOU, :-P xox

  • Outdoors2

    Outdoors2

    Bout time you wrote something of REAL substance!...;-P
    And I don’t mean to imply the others don’t have that zing either, just that this is you, No doubt, Raw JB…Authentic,
    “Jenuine”....xoxoxo

  • JenniferB replied

    It’s a part of me… I’m complicated. :-)
    Thanks OD2.

    but if one more person bmails me and calls me a softy I swear I’ll demolish it! :-P

  • Outdoors2

    Outdoors2

    Softy? You hard ass!
    hey I like that too…xo….;-P

  • JenniferB replied

    Ooh… That’s better, now spank me! :-P

  • Niki Renee

    Niki Renee

    By the way
    I like the soft side as well as the hard

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Niki, you’re a real sweety. :)

  • giovanni

    giovanni

    hi jennifer…glad yu enjoyed my writing… :) thanx that means alot to me to

  • JenniferB replied

    my pleasure. :-)

  • Outdoors2

    Outdoors2

    Surely shhhhh xxx

  • JenniferB replied

    I didn’t know you had a poetry site… Great writing! It seems that the big, fierce ole lion is a bit of a pussycat too. :-P

  • Outdoors2

    Outdoors2

    Well you got the pussy cat part right anyway…;-P

  • JenniferB replied

    how come you don’t write poetry here @ RB? Is it meant to be a secret, like you’re a closet poet who hasn’t come out? :-)

  • Lisa Jewell

    Lisa Jewell

    I hope you’ll keep showing off all your sides….I can’t pick a favourite side….they’re all so brilliant…

    I am envious of the lucky recipient of this Love Song…

  • JenniferB replied

    I guess like all women it depends what kind of mood I’m in. ;-)
    Thanks Lisa.

  • Outdoors2

    Outdoors2

    Some of it is here and there too. click on the title and go to the beginning

  • JenniferB replied

    Yep… Will do, I’ve bookmarked it. It’s a nicely set out website, ha! I’m a web design freak. :-)

  • Outdoors2

    Outdoors2

    ....;-)

  • JenniferB replied

    :-P

  • natapee

    natapee

    great ending.

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks. lol :-)

  • Sticky Flower

    Sticky Flower

    just curious..if this were a love song who would you want to sing it?because sometimes,it all hinges on that..I really like Peter Gabriels In Your Eyes..I heard a new version of it the other day on my daughters ipod and I couldn’t believe how awful it was! ):-(
    this is beautiful writing.
    bmailing you..haha! just kidding :-P

  • JenniferB replied

    Oh I’ve been overdosing on Leonard Cohen lately… What a deep, sexy husky voice he has and nobody write’s love songs better than him. :-)
    Thanks SF. :)

  • Sticky Flower

    Sticky Flower

    yep,reckon he’d do your words justice…not sure about the second bit..Nick Cave can handle matters of the heart in a very special and unique way :-)

  • JenniferB replied

    sigh… True :-)

  • Crowmanic

    Crowmanic

    Wow… JB… you went a long way with this one!! +Fav and it resonates even more so because, it is so uncannily close to something I wrote many years ago, and have not (to my recollection) made “public” now having read this… guess what, I’ll probably do so soon ;-) (oh yeh, of course I’ll get about 6 visits, 3 will be mine, and possibly 3 comments) [shrug]

  • JenniferB replied

    Lol… I just came back from reading your one which in my opinion is so much better than mine, I kind of feel a bit uncoordinated and clumsy in my brain as I stumble through words to write anything soft or romantic. :-)

  • Crowmanic

    Crowmanic

    As I just wrote in response to your comment to my “I Want To” ... I read yours (this one) 1st… and got motivated to put mine online. Now I’m starting to feel caught on a carousel chasing comment/response betwixt you and I… help!! There’s a glitch in the Matricks!!

  • JenniferB replied

    Hahaha! Synchronicity and weird coincidences happen around me all of the time, we must have been in the same mind-sets when we wrote our poems, pondering life, love and what not. :-)

  • Aurora Pintore

    Aurora Pintore

    FANTASTIC JENNIFET, I LIKE THIS VERY MUCH !!!!!

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Aurora. :-)

  • Wendy Slee

    Wendy Slee

    this is very beautiful writing…... whatever you feel or say, these words most of all speak with sincerity and with a voice that is distinctly rising beyond the harshness of experience and allowing the fresh breath of hope to emerge…. and the basic human belief in the existence of love and connections that are real…..

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Wendy, it was one of those poems you write when you’re still half asleep and feeling in dream mode.

  • Astoreth

    Astoreth

    this is magical writing….touching, beautiful, deep and sincere….i just love it and believe me, whoever receives these beautiful words will never forget them!!

  • JenniferB replied

    Aww… Thanks Astoreth, I feel a bit embarrassed about writing softer stuff.

  • ambient-1

    ambient-1

    This is wonderful! Not full of sappy sentimentality. Edgy, raw, vulnerable and honest. I would prefer that someone write this to me than so much stuff that sounds like a hallmark greeting card. I love your ability to be sweet, dirty, playful brutally honest. I don’t know who you wrote this for but he or she is very lucky!

    I love it! Well written and totally engaging! Kudos Jennifer!

  • JenniferB replied

    Ah… Strange you should mention a hallmark greeting card, that was one of the things I was scared my writing was turning into! lol Thanks Robert. :)

  • butchart

    butchart

    you put it out there… and i’m glad you did….... it took courage and it is wonderful…........ thank you…......b

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks butchart, from someone who writes as beautifully as you do that’s a real compliment. :-)

  • Matt Roberts

    Matt Roberts

    Love the way it ends.
    Interesting read.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks.

  • Russell Anderson

    Russell Anderson

    This absolutely is a love song.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Fenderhead… Now I’m trying to hide it. :)

  • Damien Venditti

    Damien Venditti

    i love all of this especially how it began without rhyme and then slowly as it progressed began to
    like you and the writing were gathering a momentum … it would make a wonderful L.Cohen type piece set to some acoustic guitars and maybe violin

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks Damien, I love Leonard Cohen yet I was only introduced to his poetry and music just recently, weird but I feel a bit strange about writing softer pieces of work, each day I shove it a little bit further back into my archives. Thanks. :-)

  • Damien Venditti

    Damien Venditti

    i feel a bit the same about the softer romance pieces plus i think there harder to write
    and yeah i started getting into Leonard about a year ago brilliant!!1

  • JenniferB replied

    Yep, they’re harder for me to write too. :-)

  • Wanda Lechene

    Wanda Lechene

    beautiful

  • JenniferB replied

    thankyou. :)

  • lolowe

    lolowe

    The clarity of your words are both beautiful and intoxicating. Really nice work Jennifer. Your words felt like a song to me.

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks lolowe, I hope life’s treating you well. :-)

  • bearpaw

    bearpaw

    very beautiful and touching words that flow like a melody straight to the heart…

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks bearpaw, much appreciated. :-)

  • Liis

    Liis

    I really identify myself wih these words. They are so true.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Liis. :-)

  • wasy35

    wasy35

    This is great reading, love songs and unfamiliarity, wow.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks for dropping by with your kind words wasy35. :-)

  • Jonathan Sloat

    Jonathan Sloat

    Love it!!

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Jonathan, it’s always great to see another handsome, smiling face around my little part of the bubble. :)

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