Something About...

JenniferB
Author: JenniferB
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Something About...

I just lay here on my bed with an old notebook thinking ‘I want to write something about…’ But I still haven’t done it.

I guess there’s still something inside of me waiting for the right time.

xox

Something about aging,
illness and death
and never quite knowing
when you’ll take
your last breath
just a niggling feeling,
that questions why
we’re born to live,
and yet live to die

Something about wishing,
you knew about love
or believed in something
below or above
something about needing,
to call it your own
to covet and nurture
when you’re alone

Something about thinking,
of days gone by
and those who have left you
high and dry
friends forgotten,
and lovers now gone
and those who have died,
while you still live on

Something about chasing,
memories and dreams
and hearing life’s laughter
instead of death’s screams

Something about feeling it,
there deep inside
and bottling it up
like tears never cried

Something about,
the faces of men
who’ve passed through your life,
to touch you and then
drifted away
to begin new lives
forgetting the whore,
in search of their wives

Something about needing,
to forget the pain
while reliving the past
again and again

Something about needing,
to write something down
that wont be forgotten
when you’re not around
something about dying,
and making way
for other lost souls
who have something to say

Something about poetry,
stories and dreams
mountains and valleys,
sunsets and streams
something about needing
to make amends
with lovers now gone
and long lost friends

Something about realising,
it hurts to care
and wishing you’d taken
the time to share
your feelings with someone,
who’d stay by your side
instead of building a wall
and a safe place to hide

Something about aging
and feeling old
and wondering if all
of your stories
have been told

Something about needing,
to find your way home
feeling calm and contented
within one last poem
something about anger,
surrendering to peace
where the words give you freedom
and one last release

Something about wasted
years locked inside
feeling bitter and angry
with self-centred pride

Something about…

holding grudges,
and then letting go
giving yourself space
to heal and grow

Something about…

  • Juilee Pryor

    Juilee Pryor

    this is brilliant

  • JenniferB replied

    you think so? thanks Juilee, I was afraid I couldn’t conjour up the feelings needed to write any more.

  • invisible

    invisible

    amazing you !

  • JenniferB replied

    aw… thanks invisible. :-)

  • Lisa Jewell

    Lisa Jewell

    Oh Jen,

    This is an incredible piece of writing….I’m in awe. You’ve truly written a journey.

    Love it…

  • JenniferB replied

    It’s a bit softer than a lot of my previous work, maybe I’m mellowing out in my old age! lol – Hopefully not too much… ;-)

  • Juilee Pryor

    Juilee Pryor

    stop worring about conjouring and just be…. have you thought about doing some morning pages?

  • JenniferB replied

    morning pages? what are those?

  • blamo

    blamo

    Incredible writing JB you should feel proud of yourself ….......... poured out like an Avalanche

    phew you can keep the staple gun in a holster for another day ….......................Class

  • JenniferB replied

    hahaha, yep, I’ll keep the staple gun handy. Thanks blamo.

  • Sticky Flower

    Sticky Flower

    something about the way you say things xo

  • JenniferB replied

    aw.. thanks Stick Chick. :-)

  • Juilee Pryor

    Juilee Pryor

    go out and get a cheap old lined school type note book…. then every single morning you get up and have a pee and make a cup of tea and sit down and write anything whatever comes in to your head into the book… three foolscape pages every morning before you talk to anyone… no reading it back and no showing to anyone…and before you know it…. the words are pouring out…...morning pages….

  • JenniferB replied

    ah… thanks for that, I’ll give it a try some time.

  • woof

    woof

    very powerful!!! nice work!!

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks! For a long time the only words swimming around my head were the words ‘something about…’ :)

  • giovanni

    giovanni

    this is inspired… truly…

  • JenniferB replied

    thank you giovanni.

  • grarbaleg

    grarbaleg

    this just flows through
    JennifferB thank you for writing it, I feel previledged and changed having read it.
    Much abundance to you and your beautiful soul
    Grarbaleg

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks grarbaleg. :)

  • poeticgenius

    poeticgenius

    another one that just proves you earned every ounce of respect I have for your work and the grains of truth within this piece have inspired many I’m sure

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks, it’s a change in style from some of my earlier work, I guess I’m feeling a bit mellower these days. :-)

  • Damien Venditti

    Damien Venditti

    its funny Jen that you say maybe you’ve mellowed or gotten softer, but to me this is great from the heart writing and its got the journey of life flowing thru it … its hits a lot of truths and in that way is profound … well done to ya .. i enjoyed this a lot : )) xx

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Damien, I did kind of feel the words when I wrote them but I miss the rush and adrenalin that simple, pure venting in my poetry can give me. :-)

  • PJ Ryan

    PJ Ryan

    something about you

    xx

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks Nicole. :-)

  • Damien Venditti

    Damien Venditti

    yeah i know what you mean …. it must be like a cycle within creativity or something … i bet it returns again .. i still think the work you have here is still of quality

  • JenniferB replied

    Cheers! :)

  • Phineous Cassidy

    Phineous Cas...

    i enjoyed reading that great stuffs jenniferB =]]

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks igo, I’m easing my way back into writing again.

  • Crowmanic

    Crowmanic

    as above … I too enjoyed the reading …
    +Fav

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks Crowmanic, I felt like writing something a little softer this time around.

  • Aurora Pintore

    Aurora Pintore

    this poem is very very beautiful, I like it very much !!!!!!!

  • JenniferB replied

    thank you Aurora. :-)

  • April Mansilla

    April Mansilla

    i read this to Sur le fil by yann teirsen …...and it was a beautiful moment ….with my morning tea ..you can write don’t doubt yourself ….enough people in life will do that for you

    take beautiful carexxx

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks April, I really appreciate the compliment as I’m a huge fan of both your Art and Writing. :)

  • Abeona

    Abeona

    of everythin i have ever red on red bubble or anywhere for tht matter this is without a doubt my favourite poem in the fuckin universe!!! bravo hun its amazing. i fav piece of writing is “if” by rudyard kipling but this tops that for me!!! excellent xoxoxoxox

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Abeona, I needed to turn off everything making a noise and shut myself away like a hermit to write it! :)

  • Matt Roberts

    Matt Roberts

    Awesomely brilliantly superb poem!!!

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Matt. :-)

  • ltruskett

    ltruskett

    This is a superb piece Jen. It resonates so fully with me. Almost as if I had written it…...(which I would not be able to do so eloquently as you). An instant fave because to me IT SAID IT ALL…. So when you say you ‘can’t write it’ .......you most certainly DID…..... brilliant honey, brilliant. xxL

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Linda, some feelings are so darn hard to put into words, I’m glad you liked reading it. :)

  • p.s. eliot

    p.s. eliot

    this could have an endless number of verses, sought of like Leonard Cohen’s “A Thousand Kisses Deep”. And both are fucking beautiful:)

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks hudson, long time – no see! Hope you’re doing well in the real world. :-)

  • Shoaib .

    Shoaib .

    Wow this is really an awesome poem, i loved it, i always write myself so that the poem is bigger than just myself, so everyone can relate to it, I’ve only just started posting tho! cant wait to read more of your work

    - shoaib

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks shoaib, glad you liked reading it, it’s alway great to hear the view point of a new member, I’ve added you to my watchlist so I can catch up on reading some of your work later. :-)

  • eon .

    eon .

    SO BEAUTIFUL …. Your Soul Sings with Music that needs no sound ” – ))

  • JenniferB replied

    Aw… Thanks Steve, it’s kind of you to say so. :-)

  • p.s. eliot

    p.s. eliot

    yeah long time. i’m doing alright but i don’t know how real the real world is…lol

  • JenniferB replied

    let me know if you’re going to be on Air again, I was really pissed off that I didn’t get to hear you last time. :)

  • p.s. eliot

    p.s. eliot

    won’t be for awhile. but i’ll let you know;)

  • JenniferB replied

    okay, thanks. :-)

  • Ushna Sardar

    Ushna Sardar

    Excellent written Jenni!! would you join us in Core? :)


  • JenniferB replied

    Oh… Thanks for the offer, but I’m a bit paranoid about groups, Lol.

  • JRobin Whitley

    JRobin Whitley

    I think did a good job of writing it for me!

  • JenniferB

    JenniferB

    thanks JRobin, for you?

  • bearpaw

    bearpaw

    this brought tears to my eyes and left a lump in my throat…. wow JenniferB wow….

  • JenniferB replied

    aw… sorry if it made you feel bad bearpaw, I was in a bit of a funk when I wrote it, but once it’s all out, things feel better. :-)

  • sunsetrainbow

    sunsetrainbow

    ‘Something about wishing’

    Very nice.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks!

  • mstrace

    mstrace

    I wish you could see your work through my eyes. You’d drown in absolute amazement.

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks mstrace, I’m never really happy or satisfied with what I create, it always seems a bit flat for me now that the edge has been medicated out of me.

  • deliriousgirl

    deliriousgirl

    Stunning rhythm, m’dear.

  • JenniferB replied

    Hey dg! it’s good to hear from you again, we always did have great rhythm. ;-) lol thanks!

  • lostboy13

    lostboy13

    so beautiful, wrecked.

  • lostboy13

    lostboy13

    i mean i`m wrecked, it`s been a rough day today…x

  • JenniferB replied

    it has? sorry to hear that, wrecked in a good, mellow way or wrecked in a shitty way?

  • lostboy13

    lostboy13

    just drained, but i`m in a good place now.

  • JenniferB replied

    that’s cool… you’re too hard on yourself, people either accept you the way you are or they can fuck off – simple. :-D

  • lostboy13

    lostboy13

    we build our own cross to bear..the weight is inevitable.

  • JenniferB replied

    Mmm… true enough.

  • adamkade

    adamkade

    I love this poem. Keep on shining. XXX.

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks adam, I go through phases, sometimes i can’t write a thing for months. :)

  • Leon Walker

    Leon Walker

    This is a phenomenal and gripping piece of writing!!! Among the best I have read on here. You are very gifted… I hope you know that…

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Leon, I’ve been reading some of your poetry, you really have a beautiful way of expressing yourself with words, no, I don’t see myself as gifted or anything, it’s just kind of like if I get an itch every now and again, I scratch it. :-) xox

  • lilgem4u

    lilgem4u

    I hope you are making money off of your work. If not you need to!

  • JenniferB replied

    Ha! Nah… Nah, just another deadbeat poor poet wearing her heart on her sleeve, theres’ something wildly romantic about being poor. :-) Long time, no see by the way!

  • gsj0408

    gsj0408

    wonderful, wonderful.
    -gloria

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks gloria. :)

  • JenniferB replied

    is this the gloria from myspace?

  • Matt Penfold

    Matt Penfold

    Jennifer, this is a wonderful work about something and everything, beautifully crafted and thought provoking. I really enjoyed reading it. :-)

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Matt, it’s certainly heading in a different direction for me. :-)

  • colorblind

    colorblind

    JB one of my favorite writers on here
    love the work chick
    and nice style of writing ….

  • JenniferB replied

    Aww thanks colorblind, you’re too kind, can’t wait to see more audio/video work of yours. :-)

  • colorblind

    colorblind

    i have “i’m only human” behind a beat and it sounds real good -in my opinion ….once i get someone to put it on …..i’m suppose to film a video today so hopefully i get to do so it should be good

  • JenniferB replied

    Cool! Keep me in the loop if you get it done, shit, it’s almost four o’clock in the morning where I am, I’ve been on the bubble all night! Lol Better get some shut eye as I have a busy day tomorrow. :-)

  • grarbaleg

    grarbaleg

    once again this peice draws you in makes it feel like it is your own
    like a memory
    beautiful Jen can’t say it enough your words shall wipe the tears now and not let the past mortor the walls i have built
    thanks stay safe

  • JenniferB replied

    what a beautiful comment, thanks grarbaleg. :-)

  • giovanni

    giovanni

    i had to read this again… sometimes i feel like ive lost my grasp…

  • JenniferB replied

    hu? my poem made you feel like you’ve lost your grasp? I can give you something to hold onto if you like. lol :-)

  • giovanni

    giovanni

    haahahaaaa… actually those were 2 separate thoughts. BUT… yur invitation does have a certain appeal!

  • JenniferB replied

    I guess that depends on whether you need to hold or be held. ;-)
    There’s nothing wrong with losing your grasp, sometimes that feeling of flying aimlessly in mid air above everyone can be quite liberating.

  • giovanni

    giovanni

    i only wish it was flying above…more like scraping along a dry pavement head over heels…like i once did riding my bike as a kid…that hurt!

  • JenniferB replied

    Ouch! Then you better be careful, or they might take away the pavement and replace it with a padded room… still, it can be peaceful in there. :)

  • Phil Threlfall

    Phil Threlfall

    Yes you can JB

  • JenniferB replied

    I can? Thanks Phil… I think! Lol :-)

  • lolowe

    lolowe

    I leave for a while and when I come back I’m greeted with your words. It’s always so refreshing.

  • JenniferB replied

    Aww.. thanks lolowe, I’ve been missing you, I always feel re-energised when I read your great writing. :-)

  • Astoreth

    Astoreth

    deep and touching….something about being honest and beautiful. xx

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks… I was going through a soft reflective phase, I’m feeling a bit tougher today though. :-)

  • lolowe

    lolowe

    Aww I’ll be back with more writing I promise! As soon as I get it all organized lol.

  • JenniferB replied

    can’t wait to read it! keep safe and well in the meantime. :-)

  • Ulrikeart

    Ulrikeart

    Jennifer…you are a beautiful soul….........Blessings Ulli

  • JenniferB replied

    Thank you Ulrikeart. :-)

  • Druidstorm

    Druidstorm

    You capture the essence of memory truly friend! We are but ghosts longing to be, our touch but forgotten upon the emptiness of their souls! If only we could begin again and say them words “REMEMBER ME!” Your craft is amazing Jennifer!!!...)o(

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks for your thoughtful comment Druidstorm. I don’t know, I felt kind of flat and numb when I wrote this so I’m glad it came out okay.

  • Druidstorm

    Druidstorm

    Right I see! I thought you were reminiscing important times! Still your words ROCK!!!...)o(

  • JenniferB replied

    Aww… Appreciate your kind words as always, thanks! :-D xox

  • eon .

    eon .

    Go on write the next SOMETHING ” – )) PLEASEEEEEEE

  • JenniferB replied

    Hu? The next something about? How about Something About You? :-)
    This poem could have gone on forever… :-P

    xox

  • Cassey

    Cassey

    Your words are often mesmerizing. They swirl around in my head until they finally settle down, I catch my breath and say, “wow.”

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks for the wonderful compliment Cassey. :-)

  • JonoCarrick

    JonoCarrick

    This poem is so brilliantly deep and profound. Hypnotic. Poignant. Amazing.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Jono, it’s one of those poems you write when you can’t fully put your thoughts into words so you just keep thinking “something about…” :-)

  • JonoCarrick

    JonoCarrick

    most of the time the best poetry is spontaneous, raw and straight from the heart. This is a prime example of such poetry.

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks Jono, your words of support are much appreciated. :)

  • Shoaib .

    Shoaib .

    read this one again, i just liked it even more this time

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Shoaib. :-)

  • Mark Ramstead

    Mark Ramstead

    forgetting the whore,
    in search of their wives

    True

    I wished you could be found in that fantasy home… I would ask you to move your car… ; )

  • JenniferB replied

    Hahaha…I’m in there, second room on the left, lying on the big ole four poster bed. :-P

  • Mark Ramstead

    Mark Ramstead

    I’m getting in my car…

  • JenniferB replied

    ;-)

  • Cassey

    Cassey

    Jennifer, I love this. The artistry of the rhymes without losing what you are saying for the rhythm. It’s so touching and real.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Cassey, much appreciated. :-)

  • cathrinedp

    cathrinedp

    a beautiful poignant journey. In not knowing what to write about, you wrote about so many things that touches each of us.

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks cathrine, I still don’t know what to write about lol… :-)

  • aglaia b

    aglaia b

    wise old woman you are!!!
    love your words and how they rhyme and ooze so much truth! ;-) xox

  • JenniferB replied

    Oy! Watch out with the old woman bit! hahaha, thanks hon. :-)xox

  • amanda marx

    amanda marx

    gorgeous writing jennifer . . . all these beautiful responses say it all . . . i’ll have to revisit this piece lots more before i can give you the response this deserves . . . beautiful work darly girl
    xXx

  • JenniferB replied

    aww thanks amanda, you’re such a darling, I’ve just added you to my watchlist so that I can go back and read about your journey and look at the beautiful photographs you have on display. :-) xox

  • amanda marx

    amanda marx

    thankyou jennifer . . . what a gorgeous community this is . . .
    xXx

  • JenniferB replied

    yep… it sure is. :-) xox

  • Vivian Mairo

    Vivian Mairo

    Something to read… every morning!
    A beautiful reminder!
    :) xoxoxox

  • JenniferB replied

    aww thanks Vivian, you’re so sweet. :-)

  • KristineNora

    KristineNora

    a deaf ,dumb and blind kid ..sure

    plays

    a MEAN

    pinball

  • JenniferB replied

    acid queen.

  • KristineNora

    KristineNora

    some thing about illness and death

    it tends to take your breath…I breathe

    k

    and when you look …

  • KristineNora

    KristineNora

    Yes I will be here.

  • KristineNora

    KristineNora

    acid queen… LOL I have not any Idea what you mean yes?

    ifi I could give you my brain sweetface I would do it in a heartbeat…

    it a matter of choice.

  • JenniferB replied

    any brain would be a better option than how my brain’s feeling right now. :)
    Acid Queen… Another track from The Who’s Tommy album.

  • KristineNora

    KristineNora

    wait let me breathe PLAY

  • KristineNora

    KristineNora

    No wait you see freddie …and Mr. Collins

  • JenniferB replied

    That deaf dumb and blind kid..

  • KristineNora

    KristineNora

    I am just hurt tonight life was not meant to be this way ... and I can do nothing to take it back

  • JenniferB replied

    Nope, you can’t take it back, but you can ride through it, there’s always tomorrow…

  • lazydaze

    lazydaze

    Something about YOUR poem !!! its AWSOME! well written! :)

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks lazydaze, it’s full of questions but empty of answers, lol

  • Paul Rees-Jones

    Paul Rees-Jones

    This is such beautiful prose.
    There is a sadness and a journey.
    There is tenderness and something so wise in these words.
    Thank you.

  • JenniferB replied

    Awww… Thanks for your wonderfully thoughtful comment Paul. :-)

  • charliethetramp

    charliethetramp

    there`s always something,it has the illusion of being endless but sadly its not
    again brilliant insight JenniferB
    a wonderfull rolling poem,observing the inner and outer nature of life and death

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks so much for your thoughtful comment charlie, this was a strange one to write, I was feeling kinda numb and reminiscing a bit. :-)

  • Antanas

    Antanas

    long story, lovely writing

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks Antanas. :-)

  • Novice

    Novice

    something tells me this could be a masterpiece

  • JenniferB replied

    it was like the last spurt of inspiration I had before I went brain dead!!! :-) Thanks.

  • nnimus3

    nnimus3

    y’know what? I don’t like this poem very much, sorry. But I think

    “Something about,
    the faces of men
    who’ve passed through your life,
    to touch you and then
    drifted away
    to begin new lives
    forgetting the whore,
    in search of their wives”

    is a fantastic verse. Just take a good long look down my throat into the deepest fear in the very bottom of my heart, then stick it on the internet for me to confront, will you?

    No one’s ever going to trap me with Wife chains.

  • JenniferB replied

    you know what nnimus3, like it or not, I take any and ever response and reaction as a compliment, so thanks for taking the time to comment! :-)

  • silverstrummer - David Everitt

    silverstrummer...

    Wow Jennifer I love this poem in verse and in rhyme ….... a lot pf poets find this hard to do …...... but you have made this poem flow so brilliantly. In parts of your poem I relate to it a lot and your words are comforting! Thank You – David

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks David, I really appreciate your comment because you’re such a great writer yourself! :-)

  • jimmywatts

    jimmywatts

    very rad writing jennifer. Hit me in a weird way.

  • JenniferB replied

    Ha! weird way or not, I thank you for your comment jimmy! :-)

  • Pete Costick

    Pete Costick

    Truely something very special, worderfully written, loved reading this.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Pete… Weird… But I haven’t been able to write anything since, still, I guess my creativy and passion for writing will return in good time. :-)

  • 4242

    4242

    Hmmm.

    A friend of mine just told me about the ‘morning pages,’ thing.
    Her version has her doing 2hrs of scribbling every morning.
    Sounds dodgy if you ask me.
    I find I write best at the end of the day – between 5 and 8 in the AM.

    I dig this Jen, it could be my favourite of yours to date.
    I’m kinda over the bubble after I burned myself, but I’m stoked I can sneak in again and hang out with you and your twisted sense. ;->

  • JenniferB replied

    Oh… I’ve burnt myself here on a couple of occasions! Life and the bubble still goes on. Glad you liked reading this and thanks for the memories! ;-)

  • eon man

    eon man

    PERFECT X

  • JenniferB replied

    MWAH!!! XXX
    Hey, I put that art piece up for you, you better jump in quick!!! :-P

  • scoob29

    scoob29

    Great writing wods so true love it.

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks so much susan, sorry I somehow missed seeing your comment earlier, :-)

  • Tracey Walker

    Tracey Walker

    AMAZING! I hope i grow as wise when I grow old! Than kyou so much. It’s going in my favourites. I’ve written a journal called “who will be your saviour” on here that talks about some of the points on your poem. xx

  • JenniferB replied

    Heeeeeeeeey!!! less of the ‘old’ stuff thank you! I’m not that old yet! LOL I’ll check out your journal soon, thanks. :-)

  • Tracey Walker

    Tracey Walker

    LOL – I wasn-t refering to you as old, don’t worry!! The poem gave me the impression of a journey through life, the kind of thing you might contemplate in old age. That surrendering to peace…it somehow made me think of an old person close to their last breath (or I suppose it could even be a young person close to their last breath) contemplating their life at the end.

  • JenniferB replied

    no worries Tracey, I wasn’t offended or anything, maybe I just feel old sometimes! L:-)

  • Impassioned

    Impassioned

    Wow! I love this…love your writings! the words you speak and what you share. Thank you!

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Mark! I must get around to trying to write again soon. :-)

  • MrHill

    MrHill

    Very strong words, and images….let the ink flow…........

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks MrHIll… I’ll try to get it flowing again some day. :-)

  • DarKarsean

    DarKarsean

    this poem is really something – absolutely love it

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks! :-D

  • April Mansilla

    April Mansilla

    just so beautiful Jennifer…I always love how I can relate to your words and I can here them spoken like a converstaion …real..I love that

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks April, I’m really flattered by your comment for as you know I’m in awe of you as both a writer and artist! This was the last poem I wrote before a huge wall of writers block set in, still waiting for it to shift! :-)

  • jomash

    jomash

    Great poem, glad you wrote it down ! xxx

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Joanne, I’ve been thinking about you a lot, hoping that you’re doing okay and stuff. xox

  • linaji

    linaji

    What amazing prose.. I just got back from a symposium and your work should be in a book.. wonderful truthful feelings abound within and without each syllable you allow us to share.

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks linaji! my older work is in a book but I’ve only been able to write a handful of new poems since, ah well, when it’s meant to be written it will be I guess. :-)

  • Mukesh Srivastava

    Mukesh Srivastava

    This REAL life… Beautifully described…Love this,Jennifer!!!!

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks so much Mukesh. :-)

  • jacqleen

    jacqleen

    OMG…..................I’m SPEECHLEES here….I LOVEDDDDDDDDDDD this…every stage of it…..so well written…it makes you think about your own life and choices and feelings and thoughts…wow….THIS IS SO SO GOOD! I LOVED IT Jennifer…BRAVO!

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks heaps jacqleen, weird, but this was the last poem I wrote before I couldn’t write any more… Maybe it summed up the last of what I wanted to say? Time will tell I guess. :-)

  • jacqleen

    jacqleen

    NOOOOOOOOOO….you need to write MORE…..You Do Magic with WORDS….just take your time, I’m sure it’s STILL INSIDE YOU somewhere…...it will COME and I can’t wait to READ THEM :)))) xx

  • JenniferB replied

    Awww… Thanks Jacqleen, I guess when it’s ready to happen again it will… It’s something I can’t force is all. :-)

  • wigs

    wigs

    An incredible piece of work…..it just flowed beautifully… loved it

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks wigs, I’ve just had a brief glance over your work and can’t wait to view/read it in more depth a bit later on when I have time, :)

  • AngelMay

    AngelMay

    Beautiful. soft, reminiscent piece

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks so much AngelMay. :-)

  • Tania Donald

    Tania Donald

    wow…i hear that….so moving and powerfull….

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks Tania, I think this was the last poem I wrote before the big writer’s drought came on. :)

  • JasmineLove

    JasmineLove

    Absolutely brilliant!!!! Profound!!!! Jasmine xo

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Jasmine! :-))

  • Tracey Mac

    Tracey Mac

    Every passing minute is another chance to turn it all around
    (I watched Vanilla Sky the other night)
    This is superb, totally true and made me catch my breath Jen…....
    My fave of your amazing work…....................so far :) xx

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Tracey, i’ve never seen Vanilla Sky but someone showed me the trailers to it once, it looked like a great movie.

  • Shanina Conway

    Shanina Conway

    Brilliant Jennifer, something very special;)

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Shanina, I appreciate your dropping by to comment. :)

  • Tracey Mac

    Tracey Mac

    Yeah it starts off great, but then it ends up a bit of a mindfuck…......it’s weird to say the least, but it makes you think. It’s one of those movies where they show you the only great parts in the trailer lol!

  • JenniferB replied

    hahaha! I think most movies highlight the few minutes of best movie parts in their trailers. :)
    I like movies that are mind fucking and have a psychological context like serial killer movies and stuff, lol… Not that I have any plans to be one, though my fiance pushes the limits at times!!! ;    )

  • Tracey Mac

    Tracey Mac

    LOL!!
    Ok then you better go rent it out….......I think you’ll love it hahaha!
    (the ending pissed me right off, I actually slapped the couch and cried Nooooooo don’t end it there you bastards!! hahaha)

  • JenniferB replied

    hahaha! I’ll check that intentional vandalism to a television is covered by my insurance policy first. :)

  • Karen Cougan

    Karen Cougan

    so glad you ended up on the home page today, I don’t usually have time for a good read, you work is awesome
    xkc

  • JenniferB replied

    I did??? Oooh, that’s cool News, I’ll go check it out! :-))
    Thanks Karen.

  • Christie Moses

    Christie Moses 29 days ago

    this….there is something about this write….damn it screams out to me and I relate in so many ways I can’t really find the words. AMazing writing.
    xoxo

  • JenniferB replied 29 days ago

    I was in a strange, kind of detatched state of limbo when I wrote this, you know, the kind of mind set where you’ve shut yourself off from everyone and everything and just feel numb, it was a weird poem to write. thanks again Christie. xox

  • lupa

    lupa 29 days ago

    everybody has already said it…..I just wanted to tell you how much I love this….I think it’s just beautiful…I get this…in every cell…

  • JenniferB replied 29 days ago

    thanks lupa… I think I wrote this at the point when I decided not to let things hurt or touch me any more and just let everything go.

  • adelechanel

    adelechanel 29 days ago

    Well I’m a fan too.

  • JenniferB replied 29 days ago

    Thanks so much adelechanel. :)

  • Mudsoldat

    Mudsoldat 29 days ago

    ur not a whore ur life xx

  • JenniferB replied 29 days ago

    aww… thanks Mudsoldat. :) xox

  • ChuckCheatham

    ChuckCheatham 28 days ago

    Beautifully done!!!!!!!!!! I Loved It!!!!!!!
    I so envy those of you who can put down in words, that that so many of us feel.
    Bravo! ~ Chuck ~

  • JenniferB replied 28 days ago

    Thanks Chuck, I struggled through writer’s block to write this one so it kind of came out like a lot of disjointed thoughts and feelings, I’m glad you like it. :)

  • Tainia Finlay

    Tainia Finlay 6 days ago

    I am deeply touched by this work Jennifer superb!! I love the ebb & flow of words, somehow comfortiing. Truly brilliant, into my faves.

  • JenniferB replied 6 days ago

    Thanks Tainia, I appreciate your dropping by to comment. :)

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