JenniferB


A poem draft (not quite creative enough to be called a poem yet)

Not really a poem, more like just a few ideas about things to come back to and maybe work over into a more creative format some time, fuck my brain’s numb and my concentrations is screwed… Darn chemicals. Ah well… It’s a start I suppose.
I’m gonna jot poem ideas onto my journal every now and again to revisit when I’m able to string them into something more creative, so if it smells like shit, looks like shit… then it probably is! hahaha

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It’s not that
Environmentalists
piss me off
or that I think
their intentions
are wrong
it’s just that I think
respect
care
love
preservation
and
conservation
should begin
with ourselves
it starts
in the school playground
when the kid
who feels worthless
kicks
a can
instead of picking
it up
progresses
to the streets
where a whore
fucks a man
staining the sheets
discarded rubbers
and syringes
left to litter
the sidewalk
and then
ends up
in a foreign country
on a battlefield
where men
kill strangers
Bombs
left to maim
without thought
for life or death
no loss
no gain
dropped
in a minefield
blowing the arms
and legs
off children
and eventually
it all ends
with the death
of a Planet…
Teach people
to love
care
respect
and hug
themselves
and then maybe
some day
they’ll grow up
to hug
a Tree.

  • Scott Bricker

    Scott Bricker

    damn Jen, what the fuck is wrong with this??? quality insight here, woman! (deserves a title!)

  • JenniferB replied

    it comes from a numb Mind, I hope to come back to it to refine it and turn it into something a bit more passionate some time, but the ideas are there so that’s a start, thanks Scott. :)

  • Rhenastarr

    Rhenastarr

    Wonderful, just wonderful.

  • JenniferB replied

    thaks Rhenastarr. ;)

  • skinnyman

    skinnyman

    wow jen….your sooo right with this….full of passion for the absurb and contradictory way life is….

  • JenniferB replied

    mmm… weird how people tend to spend millions of dollars and lots of energy tackling the problem but never the cause… ;-)

  • TrishMarrs

    TrishMarrs

    Not smelling any shit here! Love the stream of thought here and the presentation. Very expressive. Excellent points as well.

  • TrishMarrs

    TrishMarrs

    I think I want to try your meds if they would help me write like this! :D

  • JenniferB replied

    Ha! if I could pronounce and spell the name of them I’d tell you what they are! ;-)
    I don’t know, maybe I’m just in a calmer mind-set to what I used to be and my style of writing has just mellowed and changed… Still trying to figure it out. :)

  • Java

    Java

    Well said.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks. :)

  • trwoody

    trwoody

    Give me some of those chemicals and I’ll string images as you do. I have 8-10 ideas or starts for poems at all times in different notebooks and in file in the computer. Sometimes I put some of them together, sometimes steal verses from them, some remain unused,and some make it to be poems. Nothing wrong with this one, I liked it

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks trwoody, (sorry, I have a shitty memory for names! haha!), oh, I’ve got text files of ideas all over the place, nothing I can string together to make anything creative out of yet though, but still, they’re resting there, like little fetuses waiting to be conceived! ;-)

  • skinnyman

    skinnyman

    Its all gone to shit…...a little money in the right place could change lives for thousands….xx

  • JenniferB replied

    can’t say I agree that money would solve the problem, but yep, unfortunately, that’s the way the world spins… weird when you think that money is just paper that’s invented to control.

  • Lisa  Jewell

    Lisa Jewell

    Oh poppy cock,
    this belongs in your writing.

    such profound truth
    a in your face reality check

    written intellectually wisely and street wisely
    now that is cool.

    x x x

  • JenniferB replied

    maybe later… not yet, it lacks flow and creativity, but the concept’s there I guess. thanks Lisa. :)

  • amanda marx

    amanda marx

    love your work jen . . .
    reminds me that “everything i need to know i learned in kindergarten”
    cheers sweetie
    xXx

  • JenniferB replied

    yep… back to basics I guess.. thanks amanda. :) xox

  • Crowmanic

    Crowmanic

    These thoughts in words are understood by some, yet not enough… welll written. I concur with the sentiment/feeling.

  • JenniferB replied

    Fine in concept, crap in creativity! haha! Thanks Crow. :)

  • theyellowfury

    theyellowfury

    Really nice. I enjoyed galloping through it.

  • JenniferB replied

    galloping? lol… As long as your horse doesn’t stumble and fall before the finishing line. ;-) Thanks tyf.

  • madvlad

    madvlad

    in the beginning was the word ,but every one was deaf or blind- the word was? get your dam act togerher stupids!! in the end is the word—still stupids – here.,, – im out of here suckers !! your heart is in the very right place and your words not heard either but keep pissing into the wind -anyways i do too love this poem pill or not pill=hugz fighter!

  • JenniferB replied

    lol… thanks madvlad, maybe I should write a poem about the curse of chemical confinement? ;)
    it seems humanity always invests time and energy into trying to solve the problem… but never the cause. ;
    )

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  • JenniferB replied

    hahaha! Bad monkey! Bad! LOL… Yep, that’s the genius of southpark, telling it like it is! thanks for the laugh tyf. :)

  • H M Bascom

    H M Bascom

    Evidence of a passionate free mind.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Helen, but your own passion and ability to create constructive Change goes unequalled… After all, talk is just talk, and a poem is just a poem. ;-)

  • Matt Roberts

    Matt Roberts

    Excellent.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Matt. :)

  • Paul Rees-Jones

    Paul Rees-Jones

    You are too hard on yourself…it’s amazing.

  • JenniferB replied

    mmm… it lacks passion to me, I seem to be writing thoughts but not feelings, maybe I’ve just mellowed and am more at peace than I used to be and so my style of writing has changed accordingly… not sure, but I don’t get that same sense of release any more that writing used to give me. Thanks Paul.

  • Mark Ramstead

    Mark Ramstead

    Raw works for you…

  • JenniferB replied

    yeah, but to be raw I have to feel intense about something, like really pissed off or depressed, and my Mind has been main-streamed, so I guess I’ll just have to dish out diluted slop for a while. ;-)

  • Sticky Flower

    Sticky Flower

    hell yes#
    love your wisdoms :-)

  • JenniferB replied

    great message and poetry in that song… someone shoot me if I start writing poems about flowers, rainbows and tuis shitting in kauri trees… haha!

  • funkyfacestudio

    funkyfacestudio

    This is excellent Jen ! :)

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks funkyface, it’s a start I guess… :)

  • Wendy  Slee

    Wendy Slee

    this works!
    It sure caught my emotion and enthusiasm and made me feel something….
    A powerful message (yet again) from you and written extremely effectively because it starts slowly and then slides right up and hits home…... in the heart.
    (so as for your analogy, stop being so hard on yourself….. it aint what you think….I would step in this, I would roll in this, I would spread this all around…....lol)

  • JenniferB replied

    it began as a kind of a though, more like a report or something, and then kind of fell into being a poem, I prefer work to flow from the beginning to end with more intensity, but at least it’s a start, thanks Wendy. :)

  • Aurora Pintore

    Aurora Pintore

    I LOVE TO HUG TREES, IT MAKES ME FELL PROTECT.

  • JenniferB replied

    Well trees and nature are definitely healing and soothing to be amongst. :)

  • Kristin  Reynolds

    Kristin Reynolds

    This is not diluted slop! This is a clear, neutral (which is necissary to be effective, if too much one way, the point will be wrong and cause ill effects) balanced poem of compassion and understanding. I know it’s hard not to be hard on one’s self (I am in a similar period right now) but this is really good, J. :)

  • JenniferB replied

    hahaha… I’m not sure who I am kristin, but i know that I’ve come to the point where I really don’t give a shit either! lol… Thanks for your encouraging words. :)

  • Jen Wahl

    Jen Wahl

    This should definitely be in with your other pieces…. it’s “in-your-face, take-responsibility”... and I love it. Very honest and well said.

  • JenniferB replied

    Thanks Jen, maybe, one day. :)

  • markgb

    markgb

    Jesus Christ, this is finished if you ask me. Perfect, needs nothing!

  • JenniferB replied

    It kind of started off like a factual report or something and then flowed into verse, I might adjust the beginning some time, or I might just keep it as is, either way, it’s all I can pull out of my addled brain right now, thanks for your kind words mark. :)

  • Dwayne Boyd

    Dwayne Boyd

    I’ve always known you still had it in ya…Holy crap, Jen. You need to just freestyle like this more. It think you just need to get used to the way you pills affect you. They can’t keep a writer like you down. Even if you don’t do it here. Write it on paper. Grease the gears. Before long, you will be blowing our minds with poetry and prose and digital art, JenB=triple threat!

  • JenniferB replied

    Ha! Thanks Dwayne, I’ve got text files of ideas all over my computer waiting to be turned into something substantial, the bits I have make good lines for posters and image combination, I’m not quite able to write an entire poem yet though. :)

  • charliethetramp

    charliethetramp

    its a poem jen ….minimalist in structure,but there is no problem in that
    sometimes over elaborate pieces over work lose meaning yours certainly hasn`t.
    as for the content does love really make the world go round,?possibly….. but i`m not really sure tho..

  • JenniferB replied

    not sure exactly what ‘love’ is for another person, other than a form of codependency, but I’m sure that Self Love is a great place to start. thanks charlie. ;-)

  • Paul Rees-Jones

    Paul Rees-Jones

    Your writing was from a deep emotional place before…it welled up and exploded on to paper…I am not saying that this is the same…but it is a start.
    Not much welling occurs when the well is capped witha lid of antidepressants….but spillage will happen….
    : { )}

  • JenniferB replied

    yep, it’s that ‘deep place’ that I kind of miss… weird, it’s sort of like that compelling feeling a woman gets when she feels the need to return to an abusive partner… I’ve grown co-dependent and controlled by my older Muses and Poetry, I liked the way they dominated and took over me… ;-)
    Might make a muse out of that concept some time… ?

  • Amorous  Requiem

    Amorous Requiem

    hot damn!!! that’s a great collection of ideas for a poet, i was at a point like that before i went blank and my creativity left… i called them rough drafts, and it sure did piss people off that i never once finished any of my work and kept calling them “Rough Drafts” but they helped me get stuff out. I need aMUSEd or something, my whole thinking is indifferent these days about everything, but i still enjoy others art, i just feel like i cannot create my own art anymore…

  • JenniferB replied

    someone told me once about this reknown poet, I can’t remember his name, he wrote a prolific amount of intense poetry and then one day just suddenly stopped, could never write again and never did… I kind of feel like that, but yep, the ideas are still there, thanks AR. :-)

  • msdebbie

    msdebbie

    Hi Jen – what a great way of storing drafts! I haven’t done it this way, but lvoe it. Can get your fans all excited about what might be just around the corner too – lovely! xoxo

  • JenniferB replied

    thanks msdebbie, oh I have oodles of drafts all over my puter, but I always forget to come back to them to make anything out of them. :)

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