little boy climbing
As I was uploading a photo on RB of a friend’s son climbing a tree, I looked into the little boy’s eyes and in them and his smile, saw something more, beyond the obvious, the seeming surface image and these words flowed.
When his mum read them she was amazed, saying people don’t see this side of her son, and felt I had.
I knew it wasn’t me, for I didn’t consciously ‘think’ anything. The words were simply inspired by the visual, the image, and flowed.
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little boy smiling down at me
“where are you going ?”
he said to me
that little boy riding high in a tree
little boy climbing high in a tree
little boy smiling down at me
“I’ve got a secret!”
he said, said he
little boy sitting high in a tree
little boy climbing high in a tree
little boy smiling down at me
“My secret is hiding”
he said to me
from his hiding place up there in that tree.
little boy climbing high in a tree
little boy smiling down at me
“do you know what I see?’
he said to me
that little boy spying high in a tree
little boy climbing high in a tree
little boy smiling down at me
“I see you all playing”
he smiled a me
little boy watching from high in a tree
© Jan Stead, JEM productions, 2008
SharonD
Wonderful writing Jan.
Jan Stead JEMp... replied
Thank you Sharon…another one which landed in my lap and simply flowed onto the virtual page!!
But I do appreciate your generous words….it was a tiny bit pinched from A.A. Milne I think?
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Marie Sharp
What a delightful poem, Jan! You’ve captured the heart of this little boy in your writing and it’s wonderful!
Jan Stead JEMp... replied
Oh thank you so much Marie. As I just said to Sharon, I really appreciate (and vlaue) your generous and kind support, although I really don’t feel I can take much credit for this one. It was a case of the words being given and the phrase which comes to mind is ‘the writing hand writ’. THat writing hand was mine, but what it ‘writ’ seemed to circumvent my conscious thought…definitely given to me!
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Chookas
☼ EXCELLENT!!! ☼
This would make an awesome Kids Book – a first reader or something! ☼
Repartition is a plus and a bit of fun also!
☼ BRAVO! ☼
Jan Stead JEMp... replied
Oooh! Thank you. I hadn’t thought of that. But yes, as a teacher I can see how that could work. Not necessarily as a first reader, but a little further down the track, yes!! Love you idea. I’ve always wanted to write and/or illustrate children’s books but know how hard that is.
I’m so thrilled that you not only like it, but feel it worthy of children!!! A HUGE compliment indeed…xxxxOo
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Tony Ryan
Think we can all sense what you have from this little boy if we slow ourselves enough to notice. I believe we all exchange emotion/thought energy with each other but most of it enters our bodies without our minds being aware. Then for those of us who do sense such things we tend to doubt what we have felt. Think it is wonderful that you have felt so deeply into this little boy.
Jan Stead JEMp... replied
THank you for your wonderful observations and thoughts Tony. We do tend to doubt ourselves, don’t we. The truth of the matter was that I didn’t feel or see at the time what I did when he was sitting still on my computer screen looking at me. Then it was as though I could see him, through his watchful eyes I gained a glimpse of the heart of him and his thoughts. When his mum read the poem (I printed it off for her) she was quite moved and affirmed my observation, saying people don’t see that in him, though she knows his quiet observational abilities are there…
So, well spotted and I’m so glad you like it..xxxx
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NeilWells
I love the rhythm and flow of this.
I have read this several times, changing the boys intonation in my mind’s ear. Each time adding a new dimension to the “sense” of this poem.
I have enjoyed what you have created here.
Jan Stead JEMp... replied
Oh Neil, thank you so much for your wonderfully effusive and flattering comment. I am quite stunned that you reread it so many times and even moreso your varied response to it each time. I thought it might be visual, but never considered the auditory aspect at all.
I’m more thrilled than I can truly express that you have found such pleasure in this piece..xxxx
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