Not Yet.

Jayca
Author: Jayca
Word Count: 15
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Not Yet.

A classic haiku.
The first line came to me on a beautiful, warm spring day as the breeze fluttered through my open window. I wanted to make it into a poem, but I couldn’t get past the third line.
Then I read a story (required reading for my American Lit class, lol) where the main character’s mother wrote haiku for a Japanese-American newspaper. And I remembered: haikus are only 3 lines, and were 5, 7, 5. I counted the syllables in the lines I had.

It was perfect.

I usually prefer to write unorthodox things in an orthodox fashion, but this one fits into the category of “haiku” perfectly. The syllables are all correct, and it’s about weather. lol

Not Yet. belongs to the following groups:

All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Everyday Women and The Word Tree

The breeze says, “Summer”
as it sneaks into my room;
but the trees say, “No.”

  • Shoaib .

    Shoaib .

    ohhh nice one
    its hard to write a good haiku
    i think u did a great job, i usually only write extended ones when i do write them

  • Jayca replied

    Thanks!!!!
    lol mine usually turn out extended, too. :)
    Then again, I haven’t actually sat down and tried to write a haiku in a long time, until this one.
    I’m pretty amazed that this one turned out on the first try! :) lol

  • Shoaib .

    Shoaib .

    me too, i quit writing them a while back
    i dont think going to until i can see something that is a haiku that blows my mind
    ...

    this is one of my last ..here

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