2:13

Jared D White
Author: Jared D White
Word Count: 244
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2:13

A short exchange impoliteness.

I pull her chair and she sits.
She says “Thank you”.
I instantly reply “You’re welcome” and speculate inwardly on the term. A simple “Thank you” reciprocated with a smile and possibly a sincere nod would suffice more logically and linguistically.
I ask for the water pitcher.
She looks at me blankly.
My eyes look away briefly to my vacant glass then back to meet her vacuous stare. I needlessly clear my throat and inquire again.
She queerly cocks her ear in my direction and smiles from the side facing me.
I am confused. I am certain of her auditory capability.
She says, “What do you say?”
I am immediately five years old. “Please?”
The magic word procures the water.
She sneezes.
I glance at her, merely attracted to the noise. Eyes meeting, I smile.
A second sneeze. So cliché.
Still with my eyes fixed on her I raise my eyebrows. Feigned concern.
Her eyebrows rise as well although she adds pursed lips, a slight downward curl.
I am unsure about this development. I am silent, watching.
Her brows drop.
Silent moments elapse. She sneezes again. Somewhat suspect.
I say “You alright?”
To which she hastily responds, “A bless you would have been nice.”
I say “Oh”.
At this point a rush of air rises from the back of her throat and her lips retreat in a surly gesture.
I liked this woman exactly two minutes and thirteen seconds ago.

  • DeviousLili

    DeviousLili

    ...perhaps the cutest way to say, “fuck off and die” to the politeness nazis that I’ve ever encountered.

    Perfect.

  • Jared D White

    Jared D White

    Thanks Steph
    btw this isn’t my wife :)

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