Desert Stars and Moon
Tanka with prose. I just love writing this way. I hope you enjoy this love poem with prose. x
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! ♥♥♥Love Is (Join us!)♥♥♥ !, All Out Emotion, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Live, Love, Dream: and Vibration in Art and Verse - VAVoom!A hummingbird flew
Caught before it found the nest
My love he reads me
Like musical wild flowers
Words engraved in a glass book
He reads my thoughts and writes them on the desert sand and yet I have never felt his soft lips, his breath upon my neck or his strong hands upon my face. Nor have I ever seen his smile. I have only seen a shy face looking on in wonder and then gone before I could embrace it. Yet he touches me a thousand leagues deep in one purple midnight moment that shines like persimmons on a golden plate. Our fleeting eye songs linger behind an ancient portal. The lyrics live alone with the stars.
Desert stars and moon
Took just one beguiling look
When you were my eyes
If only I could hold you
For just one fleeting moment
© Jane Solomon 2009
erich biemer
i think the universe just sighed…..
JaneSolomon replied
oh thanks Erich….I was just beginning to think nobody liked it. Thank you so much!! I’m so happy you enjoyed it. xxx
Erika .
Oh Jane…absolutely sublime. This hast to be one of your best. I love this.
JaneSolomon replied
I am so glad you think so Erika! Thank you for being here! xxx
Kristin Reynolds
This is absolutely breathtaking, Jane, really, one of the most beautiful tanka prose I’ve ever read. this is genius. wow. love this and know it so well…awesome poetry, lady! xo K
JaneSolomon replied
I’m totally floored by your comment Kristin, thank you so very much! xxx
Kristin Reynolds
oh, and I agree with Erika, one of your very best if not, THE best.
JaneSolomon replied
Really? that is so encouraging. Thankyou so much Kristin! xxx
billfox256
“He traverses familiar,
As one should come to town
And tells you all your dreams were true
He lived where dreams were born.”
Emily Dickinson
Written terrifically!!!!, Bill
JaneSolomon replied
Beautiful. Thank you so much Bill!! xx
autumnwind
Oh my heart, I am speechless. I agree with what Erich wrote completely. This line especially “Yet he touches me a thousand leagues deep in one purple midnight moment that shines like persimmons on a golden plate.” just blows me away. I am gone. xoxoxo
JaneSolomon replied
I am thrilled that you enjoyed this so much Shar. Thank you so much! xxx
autumnwind
Also love Bill’s quote – so perfect. xoxoxo
JaneSolomon replied
Isn’t it beautiful and perfect! xxx
Trenchtownrock
This is just beautiful writing my friend.. I think this works very well.
JaneSolomon replied
Just an experiment that I really enjoyed and will try again. Thanks so much my friend. xxx
raymondoantonio
YOU CREATE SUCH BEAUTIFUL VISTAS JANE!! BELLISSIMO!!! XX
JaneSolomon replied
Oh Ray, thank you so much my dear friend. xxx
James Watson
Very beautiful Jane.
JaneSolomon replied
Thank you so much James for being here. xxx
MarkezzAckui ...
this is well put together….an excellent piece of writing….touched me in a special way. I am like the biggest sucker for love you’d ever meet…so when I read poems like this…and I am in an open mind state (which I am )......it’s like I am rooting for the writer…like “don’t give up!!! love awaits….go find it”
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yeah….I’m out there:)))))
JaneSolomon replied
;-)) love your comment so much Markezz and thank you for being here! xxx
Marilyns
oh what beautiful images come before my eyes! desert stars and moon ….and love ! mix of poetry and prose create like in some movies , or music , a mouvement ,a change ,in rhythm , and so , in feelings !
JaneSolomon replied
What a beautiful comment. Thank you so much Marilyns! xxx
happyfeet5
Beautiful, imaginary visions while you read. I heard that hummingbird’s whispers. Love it. Iris
JaneSolomon replied
So glad you enjoyed this Iris, much love, Jane xxx
liliana
Truly amazing poetry Jane…I love this one
JaneSolomon replied
So happy to see you here Liliana and thank you so much! xxx
ArcadiaTempest
Your pen flows with such graceful magic me thinks. I love your romantic heart….love you XX
JaneSolomon replied
Thank you KS, what a wonderful thing to say….love you too. xxx
TheWanderingBoo
simply beautiful…
JaneSolomon replied
Oh thank you so much Simon! xxx
TAHill
gorgeous write….tah
JaneSolomon replied
Thank you so much my friend.xxx
wingsoffire
Jane, your words are like music for the soul. This is exquiste dear lady!
JaneSolomon replied
Thank you so much Charlene! xxx
Shoaib .
awwww yessss i love it
i miss reading you ! great work
JaneSolomon replied
Thank you so much Shoaib!! xxx
Charma Chircop
a jewel to read,so beautiful..mesmerizing is the moon and its capture in your poem-Charma
JaneSolomon replied
Charma, how lovely to see you here. Thank you so much! xxx
walela
Congratulations! wonderful.
JaneSolomon replied
Thank you so much walela! xxx
Andrew Bailey
Dancing on the dark side of the moon, Jane, could not be better than this. I think it is just fabulous.
JaneSolomon replied
Andrew, you are the sweetest, thank you so much! xxx
jim marshal
This is captivating, enchanting. The tanka style suits your personal expression. This is one of those legendary pieces and will live on. Excellent, Jane.
JaneSolomon replied
I’m floored by your generosity. I do love writing them. Thank you dear friend. xxx
Leda D
this is so beautiful
xox
JaneSolomon replied
Leda, lovely to see you here, thank you so much!! xxx
DarKarsean
absolutely beautiful…Tony
JaneSolomon replied
Thank you so much Tony. xx
lianne
Absolute perfection Jane – this sings in my soul, which then reaches the stars in admiration. What tenderness, what beauty you have expressed in this form that so perfectly suits you. Just one of the loveliest poems I have read in forever.
JaneSolomon replied
Oh Lianne, what a beautiful comment. Thank you so very much! xxx
John Fish
wow, what richness of words, so full of passion and thought. beautiful
JaneSolomon replied
I enjoyed writing this so much. Thank you John! xxx
chugginrail
beautiful…
JaneSolomon replied
thank you so much for being here. xx
msdebbie
Much to love here, but I was especially taken by Words engraved in a glass book and the beautiful persimmons xoxo
JaneSolomon replied
Thank you for enjoying MsDebbie, much love.xx