Dusk

Peter Davidson
Author: Peter Davidson
Word Count: 60
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Jumping into dark waters just as the sun smeared the horizon, I knew they’d be waiting, looking to feed.

I’m glad of the knife as my torch spears the gloom. For there, in the depths, a myriad of cold eyes await, darkly reflecting the light.

More accomplished hunters than I, they consider my intrusion with hostility, drawn to fresh prey.

Dusk

  • Ushna Sardar

    Ushna Sardar, 5 months ago

    beautiful Peter!

  • Natella2020

    Natella2020, 5 months ago

    Wow, powerful and gripping descriptions. A model flash.

  • JaneAParis

    JaneAParis, 5 months ago

    Wow Peter, this is good. I’ll probably freak you out but this sounds like my life. And you write it so well with so few words. I bet you can tell I totally related to this. Spoken by someone who has been hunted. Super writing. Smiles from Jane:-)

  • jcmontgomery

    jcmontgomery, 5 months ago

    I think this is why I have always begged off learning how to dive. Although having been out on the ocean many times, the beauty of it all always makes me think twice about the decision.

    This piece evokes a lot of memories. Thank you, it is beautiful.

  • Miri

    Miri, 5 months ago

    evocative & powerful, like it!

  • Peter Davidson

    Peter Davidson in reply to Ushna Sardar’s comment, 5 months ago

    Thanks Ushna.

  • Peter Davidson

    Peter Davidson in reply to Natella2020’s comment, 5 months ago

    Cheers Natella!

  • Peter Davidson

    Peter Davidson in reply to JaneAParis’s comment, 5 months ago

    That sounds worrying … glad you like it though.

  • Peter Davidson

    Peter Davidson in reply to jcmontgomery’s comment, 5 months ago

    Night dives are different. Go ahead and dive, you won’t regret it.

  • Peter Davidson

    Peter Davidson in reply to Miri’s comment, 5 months ago

    Thanks Miri!

  • Louise Kuskovski

    Louise Kuskovski, 5 months ago

    Made me think of piranhas, I found myself listening for their telltale popping sound…

    Louise

  • debrakcarey

    debrakcarey, 5 months ago

    Powerful mind picture, as usual Peter…:)

  • sssshuknowwho

    sssshuknowwho, 5 months ago

    I enjoyed this a lot. Very descriptive. Like a written snapshot. I just wish it had gone on beyond being a vignette, as I was eager to know what next…

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