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Indeterminacy 402 (The Balloon)

Balloon: Which came first, the girl or the balloon?

Girl: I came first, and none too soon.

Balloon: You were a wish that I created!

Girl: You are a thing that I inflated!

Balloon: But I can float to outer space!

Girl: With a few quick squiggles I drew your face!

Balloon: I can prove that it was I.

Girl: Whatever you prove will be a lie. But please, let’s hear you certify…

Balloon: It was like this: One day, floating along the shore, I spied a boy alone on his towel wishing for a girl. Since wishing for girls is what boys do best and since issuing wishes is my finesse, I hovered to the boy and presented him his complementary wish. Well, of course he wished for you! I dipped into the sea, patted some jellyfish together, added some seaweed for hair, some salt for preservation. And there you were! End of conversation.

Girl: Jellyfish!? Seaweed!? Salt!? My softness and huggability have nothing to do with jelly! And my hair is perfectly the opposite of algae! And last and never least, I am sweet, not salty! Your ravings are nonsense times triple and double – you’re but a stick of gum I chewed and blew into a bubble!

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This story was originally posted at indeterminacy.blogspot.com, a site featuring “one minute short stories” inspired by found photos.

Here is the found photo which served as the catalyst for the story:

This photo appears with kind permisison of English Snow.

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balloon, girl, girls

Comments

  • cheridan
    cheridanabout 7 years ago

    This ROCKS! Thanks so much for sharing :)

    PS. It’s definitely the girl who came first imho

  • Thank you! Coming from a girl, that means a lot!

    – indeterminacy

  • Lehane
    Lehaneabout 7 years ago

    If I had a smiley for a standing ovation, I’d put it right here: x. Instead x marks the spot and you’ve just hit it with this refreshingly original piece!

  • gosh, thanks so much DBA. Actually if I hit anything, it was last summer – I think that’s when I originally posted this.
    I think smileys can’t stand, they just lay there on their side. ;-)

    – indeterminacy

  • adgray
    adgrayabout 7 years ago
    o o( )(____)

    This one stands up!
    Again exquisite! and yes I’d love to use this in my English classes too!
    Keep Happy :o) [this one feels lazy lol]
    ~ adg xox

    PS: My kids love your work too!

  • adgray
    adgrayabout 7 years ago

    Damn! that one didn’t work – ok try this one!
    …o o
    ……()
    …(___)

  • adgray
    adgrayabout 7 years ago

    lol
    I’ll get it right yet!
    …o o
    …..()
    …(___)

    please please please please work!

  • adgray
    adgrayabout 7 years ago

    Oh BUM! lol
    well you got the idea! lol
    I guess this girl needs a balloon!
    [or another wine or two! lol]

  • I’m not sure I know that smiley. Is it a bunch of balloons? ;-) It really flabbergasts me to think you can use these stories I wrote for something useful.

    – indeterminacy

  • Peter Davidson
    Peter Davidsonabout 7 years ago

    Yes, some originality at last! Loved this! And this line in particular:
    ‘Since wishing for girls is what boys do best and since issuing wishes is my finesse, I hovered to the boy and presented him his complementary wish.’

    Beautiful.

  • Thanks a lot Peter! I guess after the 401 stories that preceded it, it was about time that one came out well ;-) I got really lucky with that rhyme. It just happened somehow.

    – indeterminacy

  • adgray
    adgrayabout 7 years ago

    Yes thank you Peter for reminding me that Inde’s words are to be complimented
    and yes Inde, I love your words! I love the natural rhyme you find and the twists you give – just when one thinks they’ve predicted the story you go and surprise us! If you ever wrote a mystery novel it would be brilliant!
    Of Course your words would be useful! My goodness you inspire excellence! Cant wait to read your next piece.
    Keep them coming my friend! ~ adg

  • You’re really too kind – whatever went right with this story or any of the others, I wish it was something I was completely conscious of and could control. I’ve always thought I could never write a longer piece – because if I have any talent at all it seems to be in starting stories, and not ending them. By ending the stories as quickly as possible I get around that weakness. Usually if I write along for a longer narrative, I start to lose steam.

    – indeterminacy

  • loramae
    loramaeabout 7 years ago

    One word…Brilliant!!!

  • Another word: hug

    – indeterminacy

  • Nancy Ames
    Nancy Amesabout 7 years ago

    I’m really enjoying your photo-stories, indeterminacy. There is a nice interplay of the two media where the eye goes back and forth, and with a tastefully light touch. It sure works for me.

  • Thank you so much! What a nice thing to say.

    – indeterminacy

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