lets get lost tonight

Imogene Munday
Author: Imogene Munday
Word Count: 420
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lets get lost tonight

another extract from 4u english work

“Let’s get lost tonight.”

That was the beginning of it. And so we’d driven out to an abandoned area of the town in the hopes of doing just that. Empty shopping carts became our new method of transportation as we wheeled around until we were too dizzy to go on. Creaking, they rattled like bones and threatened to throw us off, but we held on tight, clutching each others skeletons to stay locked in our embrace. We slid down hills and over valleys, speeding down imaginary streets without any brakes. We pushed past the wind, soaring through waking memories, stopping to say hi to ghosts.

When we tired of travelling, we relocated to the parking lot of an old Wal-Mart. Your brother knew someone who knew someone else that had managed to get us a box of dusty fireworks. You exclaimed over the roman candles and Catherine wheels and I exclaimed over you. The night was damp, the air moist. But our eyes were bright and our spirits high. The matches struck easily enough and the wicks caught.

The rockets we lit soared up to the heavens to explode in the face of God, lighting up the dark.

Once everything had burnt out we reclined on the bonnet of my just bought, second-hand Volvo 850 I was so proud of. The stars gazed at us unblinkingly. You knew all the constellations and never tired of pointing them out to me. The big dipper, the little one, the scorpion, the southern cross; you could see them all in a moment.

I traced the pattern of stars on your skin, searching to find the right combination between faded freckles and barely there sun spots.

“Let’s go back,” you murmured as my fingers brushed down your spine.

You wouldn’t let go when we reached your place, so I trailed after you up the stairs, tiptoeing so as not to wake those sleeping in other rooms, holding my breath. Anticipation mingled with the air around us as we kicked off shoes, undressing in the dark. Muffled silences and smothered sounds.

We fell in a tangle of limbs, burrowing into the sheets, making our own world down there. Your lips were so soft, like the fluttering of wings and your heartbeat was trembling. Every inch of me was burning as we twisted together, and though your skin was cool and soothing against mine, a fire consumed us.

We shuddered into being.

We’d wanted to get lost, but we ended up home.

  • Elucidate

    Elucidate

    Great imagery, excellent choice of words. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, particularly the conclusion.

  • berndt2

    berndt2

    Thrilling – great work and very evocative

  • poeticgenius

    poeticgenius

    it was a very provacative piece overall and I envisioned every line this told me that if I saw what u wanted your readers to see you have a great view for passion

  • Elucidate

    Elucidate

    Imogene! Congratulations on having this featured on the homepage writing section!

  • Imogene Munday replied

    oh wow =)

    thanks!

  • TheWanderingBoo

    TheWanderingBoo

    fantastic piece of writing…wonderful imagery

  • Mardra

    Mardra

    Great final line – perfect.

  • Steve Strodder a.k.a Saul and Cal.S.Heart

    Steve Strodder...

    Makes me njealous and fill me with longing for things that where.
    well done

  • Dwayne Boyd

    Dwayne Boyd

    This makes me think of the past and takes me back to some reckless times. Thanks!

  • Rex Inkpen

    Rex Inkpen

    beautiful flow of words and emotions – great story..

  • Michaeldavitt

    Michaeldavitt

    a door slams shut
    never to go back again
    behind every mirror
    I stop and wonder why
    thought I heard you name
    thought I heard you cry
    can’t recall your smile
    can’t sustain the blame

  • erika15

    erika15

    I thought it was dreamy: how he counted the stars and then you tracing them on his skin. I liked that. And of course, the ending was perfect: how you wanted to get lost, but ended up coming home. Beautiful. Everything flowed nicely.

  • XMalina

    XMalina

    Truly wonderful. I just joined redbubble, and I think you’ve convinced me to stay indefinitely, if not just to wait around for more from you. Great work.

  • tracyxkeema

    tracyxkeema

    very descriptive and enjoyable to read, wonderful writing x

  • 3XEternity

    3XEternity

    I like your writing it’s wild and very mysterious :)

  • Nicole Cultraro

    Nicole Cultraro

    I love this piece of writing.. and for english 4u??! It seems so mature for a high school paper :) Im excited to read more from you :)

  • roger  boreham

    roger boreham

    lIKE D the imagry although I found the story a little too wordy,,,, If I were to do it I would try to write it as song structure youknow intro verse chorus break chorus ,,,,
    but that is my opinion,,,,,nice tho

  • Martin Sanchez

    Martin Sanchez

    This is really good.I want to read more pieces like this.XD

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home, lost, love, night and skeletons