Like Commas, Curled

You said my eyes held a thousand secrets
A thousand things you wish you knew You said
I’d kept them to myself for far too long
You said you wished you could see what it looked
Like when I blink. I said no one notices
When they blink. But I should’ve stopped at
Notices, cause I’ve never met another
Whose focus is clear enough to see
Something special about my eyes beyond
Their size. But you did. You, with the patience
With the wisdom of a semicolon
Saw movement in my eyes when you stopped.

We took a pause together, like commas, curled
When you said you thought my eyes could change the world.


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An experiment with the modern sonnet.

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Comments

  • shootback
    shootback5 months ago

    A very beautiful sonnet!

  • PJ Ryan
    PJ Ryan5 months ago

    Love this :)

  • sandra .
    sandra .5 months ago

    A beautifully created sonnet,Karissa, love it
    Sandra x

  • Paul Hickson
    Paul Hickson5 months ago

    this is so awesome!! great work!!

  • Steve Voorhees
    Steve Voorhees4 months ago

    Really liked this write. It means so much more to know someone see’s your depth before shine as far as eye contact is concerned. You want to know someone is looking into the windows to the soul and not just smacking bs about the curtains as they pass. Right on, write on

  • Jascie Epinn
    Jascie Epinn4 months ago

    I absolutely love this.

  • Tim Ruane
    Tim Ruane4 months ago

    “With the wisdom of a semicolon.”
    One cannot turn a better line than that.

  • carlieautumn
    carlieautumn4 months ago

    The way you write is brilliant :)

  • Thomas W. Richardson
    Thomas W. Rich...4 months ago

    a beautiful love story..