What I would change

iloveyoumiss
Author: iloveyoumiss
Word Count: 56
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What I would change

The way some people feel that they must change to attract others…

I would change
Blonde to brunette
Brunette to red
Red to black
Black to blonde

My hair for you

I would change
Hazel to green
Green to blue
Blue to brown
Brown to hazel

My eyes for you

I would change
Smart to dumb
Unique to conformity
Loud to quiet
Independent to dependent

Myself for you.

  • olivecrayon

    olivecrayon

    I was hesitant about this piece, not seeing enough originality or spark…
    Until I got to the last verse.
    And realised the whole thing was a buildup to that punch. =)

  • iloveyoumiss replied

    Yeah, I’m glad you sat through it :D
    None of it seems particularly important until suddenly the changes are all negative…
    I’ve changed myself completely before, in an attempt to get someone to like me, and it’s only now that I realise what a mistake it was…

  • olivecrayon

    olivecrayon

    We all do it.
    Change to make people like us.
    Sometimes it’s sudden, sometimes it’s on purpose, or sometimes we don’t even notice ourselves until it’s too late.
    The hard part is knowing who we’re meant to be, and who we truly are.

  • iloveyoumiss replied

    And do you perhaps change, even if only slightly? for someone else, if you love them? And how do we know what we were/are originally?

  • SashaC

    SashaC

    wow. yeah. I believe that everyone we meet/see/talk to changes us in some way. So really. we’re a product of the influences of everyone around us.
    (sorry if that didn’t make sense. I’m trying to find a Chuck Palahniuk quote that says what I’m trying to convey… but I misplaced it, and I forgot it :( )

    But I totally get what you’re saying with this :)

  • iloveyoumiss replied

    Thanks Sasha :D
    Yeah I think we are changed even ever so slightly by every person we meet, but when you start to change FOR them, then is that actually a very healthy relstionship?

  • SashaC

    SashaC

    Yeah. Probably not. That’s kinda what I was trying to say… but i kinda failed.
    We are all accidentally changed by everyone around us, but it’s sad when we change ourselves on purpose to try and please someone else. And you got that through well with your poem, so well done :)

  • iloveyoumiss replied

    Thank you very much :D

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