Deep is the sea

Ilmari
Author: Ilmari
Word Count: 50
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Wise man…
what can you tell to man
who sinks by his own weight?
To a man
whose soul is behind a mirrorlike plate
that feasts with things he hate.

Could you tell him straight
about the misery of his faith?

Could you dominate his soul
to drop the weight?

Deep is the sea

A conflict of how to make someone understand your perspective on things; how to make a person see him self with your eyes.

And yeah, english is not my mother language so I respect any advice of correction but please be merciful ;-)

  • Jessica Tremp

    Jessica Tremp, about 1 year ago

    Ilmari, beautifully written…i love ‘the misery of his faith’

  • Alexandra Strömgren

    Alexandra Strö..., 11 months ago

    Wow, really beautiful and interesting, I love it! :)

  • Ilmari

    Ilmari, 11 months ago

    Thank you Jessica and Alexandra your feedback means alot to me!

  • LaurenBlair

    LaurenBlair, 11 months ago

    Well said Ilmari; you made you point well even if English isn’t your mother tongue. Thanks for stopping by my site to leave a comment :-) ~Lauren

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sea, poem, deep, faith, conflict and misery