of dolls with scars

careless rapture
Author: careless rapture
Word Count: 299
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of dolls with scars

of dolls with scars belongs to the following groups:

All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical and The Sensual Word

I’m waiting for my tram.
My red painted lips help disguise my bed hair as a deliberate kitten do and give me something to hide behind, a person more confident and ready to fight than is true.
The raspberry muffin I’m eating lets me forget for a short while how tired I am and how terrified.
It’s just another day that started with a hangover headache and a man’s body beside me. I climbed on top of him before he quite woke up. His hands gripped my hips and I let him wrestle me onto my back. We lazily ground against each other for a while and the gentleness rocked me steadily into the morning sun streaming through the windows. Sex always makes it better, lets you feel close, if but for a moment. I felt warm towards him while I watched him in the shower, swaying back and forth under the hot water and I resisted the urge to jump in with him. Though I was keen to have him leave fairly early, I felt instantly lonely the second the door closed behind him. I could have confided in him, asked for help, but nowadays it’s hard to trust anyone.
The tram door closes behind me, like a hiss and sends a chill down my neck. I take a seat next to an elderly woman clutching her groceries. Nerves gather in the pit of my stomach and argue back and forth with my thoughts which gather speed as the tram accelerates. I bite down hard on my lip and by the time I reach my stop and tread down from the steps with shaky knees, the red has vanished from my lips and there is nothing left to protect me from what is standing right before me.

  • excitablegirl

    excitablegirl

    JFC!!! Fucking magnificent writing. It shoots straight into my heart like a flaming arrow.

  • careless rapture replied

    thank you dear, you are too lovely

  • Outdoors2

    Outdoors2

    This is raw!
    Amazing portrait of vulnerability
    well done

  • greeneyedlady

    greeneyedlady

    wow, someone finally puts words to the nauseating, always underlying fear that followed me for the first 30 years of my life…..not just vulnerability, but the idea of being found out.........amazing writing!!

  • rebelgirl

    rebelgirl

    yes that was good, so many women can relate to it.

  • ltruskett

    ltruskett

    Powerful writing…...so very well done.

  • PJ Ryan

    PJ Ryan

    this is absolutely stunning writing .. sensual, vulnerable, raw ..

  • liciouspoet

    liciouspoet

    love your words, they are so true. for many. don’t you wish that sometimes, that guy would walk half ways away, and then turn around and open that door as if you are too much to leave. alone.

    don’t you wish, he’d push you against the wall, make you feel wanted, and…...........

    sorry carried away…lipstick that stands out, or any makeup, says me. from them….judgements, eyes, and lies….,

    always,
    licious,
    xoxo

    anyways, thanks for this piece beautiful, keep writing!

  • careless rapture replied

    thanks licious,
    too true, too true darling
    x

  • aglaia b

    aglaia b

    i felt like i was reading a wonderful extract from something longer and this leaves me begging for more.
    a lovely read. ;-)

  • careless rapture replied

    thanks aglaia, it may become something longer

  • Paul Vanzella

    Paul Vanzellafounder

    I’m in awe how people can write like this… so sensational!!!

  • cherryvanilla

    cherryvanilla

    This bit into me.
    This took a big fucking chunk. Beautiful.

  • Timothy Goodwin

    Timothy Goodwin

    Brilliant use of overtones and undertones!! Excellent work!!

  • Luckyvegetable

    Luckyvegetable

    I’m getting breathless and the goosebumps won’t quit.

    You amaze me.

  • Caroline Gorka

    Caroline Gorka

    Christ…that has actually brought tears to my eyes

  • ToastedGhost

    ToastedGhost

    LIke an extract from a novel
    wonderful

  • natapee

    natapee

    wanted to keep reading, please continue!!

  • bellmusker

    bellmusker

    The last line is brutal and made me recoil from the computer…..this whole piece is beautifully crafted…like the comment above says, I’d like to hear more. x

  • Xen Pow

    Xen Pow

    How honestly written. I’m inspired

  • mstrace

    mstrace

    great title, powerful writing, and it leaves me wanting more…

  • LauraHartley

    LauraHartley

    It ended too soon. I want more…..........I’ll give her my lipstick if she’ll keep on talking.

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