busted euphoria in passion tendrils
I’ve just read this at work, perhaps not a good idea….very seductive…
Fantastic, I think you could have gone ahead with more erotic detail, however, I don’t mind the (insert fantasy here)….and I am ;)
Not a good one at all!thanks for tip on more erotic detail! the whole “lesbian thing” is a very touchy subject and I’m never sure how far to push the envelope. ^^
Thanks for your praise!!
The lesbian thing is not that touchy in my opinion….especially here in Australia. Most woman I know are bisexual and we all know how man love to read about girl on girl action. I think more importantly, you’ve built the anticipation, the longing and desire wonderfully….
I look forward to reading more of your work, but maybe from home ;)
Thank you so much! ^^it’s kind of touchy here in a small town :blah:but you want more..you got it!!
I like to add a few of these intimate ones everyonce in awhile..guess when the mood hits!
Love the write…well done
Have to add, I like the comments too…and agree with Lisa.
Should I stop reading in future…pmpl…I don’t think so
Nicely done, I enjoyed the read! I loved the build up, and the feeling of falling for someone across the room.
I also think you could do something else other than the line ‘(insert fantasy here.)’, even if you’re metaphorical or evasive in your detail. Or you could leave that line out entirely, as you’ve already said ‘but I will leave that to the imagination’.
Yes, yes thanks Damian! ^^ Felt the need to give the reader a tease.
I was inspired by NIN video “Closer” edited version.(with the censor thing!) that’s where it came from ^^
That’s a great filmclip :)No, I see where you’re coming from, and definately gives a tease lol!!!
Ha ha indeed Damian!well spoken! ^^
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