See-Saw

girlinthestars
Author: girlinthestars
Word Count: 104
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I saw you wash us away that night
Right down the sink
With salad and wine
You chopped us to bits
Admiring her
As she stood up from her chair

You would have never imagined me there

For wasn’t I a thousand miles away
But what if I couldn’t stay?

We collapsed as the water choked us
You had absent mindedly left it on
To go and touch her
And as you were making the most of her offer
You swore you saw me there
Wind makes a kite
Of hair

A thousand miles away

But what if I couldn’t stay?

  • Janine Peterson

    Janine Peterson, 3 months ago

    Hmmmm…......what would a man in this position do? Probably good that you stayed.:)

  • Nicole Ryan

    Nicole Ryan, 3 months ago

    this is such beautiful and brilliant writing A !!

    I saw you wash us away that night
    Right down the sink
    With salad and wine
    You chopped us to bits
    Admiring her
    As she stood up from her chair

    BANG !! Killer first paragraph !!!!!!!!

  • Sally Omar

    Sally Omar, 3 months ago

    Fantastic writing!!! Sally xxoo

  • Trish Cooper

    Trish Cooper, 3 months ago

    WOW!!!!! Simply amazing work my friend!!!!!! xoxoxoxo

  • iofthebeholder

    iofthebeholder, 3 months ago

    love the imagery in the first stanza

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