Forgotten
I’m broken now
But I have not forgotten the way it feels
To swallow rain like candy drops
And then to
Stop
And fervidly kiss
If I ever backed off
You’d insist
A bit more intense
A bit more you
I’m broken now
But I will never forget
The baking sun breathing life into our veins
As you rolled on top of me in the most splendid
State of sweat
And then
Kept
Licking my spine
Your weight made it your call
I couldn’t fight it at all
My sensations of satisfaction
Obvious through my reaction
A bit more intense
A bit more me
Oh I am broken now
And when they see me
They see a messy head
Unmade bed
Mismatched socks
Ignoring clocks
Cuz I’ve no where to go
But what they don’t see
Is our days
Our ways
All those feelings
Still reeling in me
I know I look adrift
Holding to old times
Tracing all your lines
But I’m finding my way back home
Each memory cloud you left
Has turned to stone
And I have not forgotten
Comments
Oh my God Amy – I can’t tell you how deeply this touched me! How incredibly poignant this is and how true! Just an amazing work, my good friend!
thank you so much Lianne, I am so glad you liked this, your comments mean so much~*
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“As you rolled on top of me in the most splendid state of sweat.”
Imagined or not this is really powerful, your writing has such an excellent flow to it, everything I read of yours has such a pull from one line to the next. Very nice work.
thank you so much, what a compliment, you made me smile~*
– girlinthestars
You made me all misty again……..really now, is there someone behind all of this heartfelt pain? If so either you need to make a call or he doesn’t deserve you.;)
thank you Janine…oh, I am fine, I have had my heart shattered once and I never forgot those feelings…but I am happily in love now…thanks for your kind words though, you’re sweet~*
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Hits straight home for me, as always :) You are so talented :)
thank you, I am so glad you enjoy my work…it means a lot~* :)
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Absolutely awesome…Sally xxoo
thank you Sally!!~*
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really love that – its wonderful!
thanks so much Juni, it means a lot~*
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B R A V O Amy! [… if I may use your name]
This is the first work I have read of yours [I think] and it is absolutely S T U N N I N G !!!!
I cant wait to read the rest of your words!
No wonder you were featured in WMG!!! B R A V O !!!
Keep Happy! ~ alyssa :o)
thank you so much Alyssa, I am so very flattered by this comment…you are so kind!~*
– girlinthestars
you’re so beautiful
i love this piece so much !!!
thank you Nicole, you’re so sweet~*
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this is very nicely written. the feeling is very easy to conceive. very well done
thank you Jordan~* :)
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amazing writing………. such real emotion… thank you for sharing…………b
thank you so much butchart, I appreciate your comment a lot~*
– girlinthestars