fishbowl eyes
fishbowl eyes belongs to the following groups:
All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical and Melbourne & VictoriaShe had rivers of black running down her cheeks.
Her eyes reminded me of the twenty five centimeter fish bowl I once had when I was nineteen and ready for things I wasn’t.
When I looked at her, I wanted to stare for too long and tap on the sclera to test the strength of the white of her eyes.
Don’t scare the fish.
I saw a shark in her eyes one night. It was circling a memory, its black fin slicing through the calmness and warning threatening schools of thought.
Today, her mascara streams down her face, like leaking octopus ink and I wonder what it tastes like.
Was she an obscure culinary treat or a dangerous creature of spontaneity?
She said things sometimes that made me step backward once or twice, just enough to include safe space. I was never frightened of her, though wary.
Her fishbowl eyes were enticing and sometimes entrancing but I knew there were things trapped within and I wondered how to set them free.
My mother once tipped my two goldfish down the toilet when I was seven and three quarters but she said they’d have a better life and it wasn’t fair to keep them in such a small square tank.
I held my breath as I thought about them slurping into the revolts of the S bend, down and away, out through a big underground pipe. Hopefully they found the ocean.
I reach across from me and slide two delicate fingers across my friends cheek, her ink attaches to my skin and for a moment I consider trailing it across my tongue.
She smiles at me and the smudges in her eyes help her to see more clearly.
The view outside often makes her cry.
© ryan
Lisa Jewell
Fuck……………what a stylish and wondrous piece of writing…you had me enthralled, entranced and reading several times.
I absolutely adore your fishbowl analogy. xxx
Holly Ringland
nix, you just get better and better girl. your writing is brilliant and i always walk away feeling so privileged to have read your trails of words, and to know and adore you as i do.
Jess Andrews
amazing writing, like Lisa, you had me going over it again and again
Matt Penfold
Wow, your imagery is graphic, dark and thought provoking, excellent writing.
natapee
i love your word choices, your writing is very mindful. a great metaphor. xx
ShadowDancer
Oh PJ, this is crazy good… i really did read it again and again.. what a morself, i could taste the conflicting emotions in this piece… i’ll stop babbling now and will just sit back in awe. xx
seeker19
Wow, great! When I take photos of people or look at portraits I always try to read the eyes, and it’s so disappointing when they have no depth, but sometimes there is so much inside them that it can be frightening. You’ve expressed this so well for me, and I really love this line in particular: She smiles at me and the smudges in her eyes help her to see more clearly/The view outside often makes her cry. It adds a wonderful depth to the piece.
rubyjo
awesome wording
aglaia b
i’ve been savouring to read this all day, cause when i saw it in my activity, i had knots in my tummy, and knew it was gonna be a good one.
so love entering your world
just brilliant writing nicole ;-) XOX
Genevieve Robey
Once again another fabulous piece … such an interesting darkness and depth …
skinnyman
I saw a shark in her eyes one night. It was circling a memory, its black fin slicing through the calmness and warning threatening schools of thought. Amazing.
MissAlexis
You’re in the top 3 of my favorite writers that I’ve met on here so far, defiantly one of the best. I’m picky; congratulations.
Rebekah Anderson
This is really well written, PJ. I just love the language, the flawless metaphor and the power it holds. Really well done
xx
amanda marx
. . . this is simply the best piece of writing i’ve seen on the bubble . . . thankyou for sharing your beautiful words with us . . .
xXx
Astoreth
pj, you always leave me feeling wobbly and wondering…..you always have and you probably always will…..you’re the best, xxxx
Rex Inkpen
i think your doting admirers have said it all pj… beautiful story, dripping with your wry observation and cold hard hyperbole..
Cassey
This is incredible PJ. I am in awe of your skills.
BiographyofRed8
woah.. I felt this in my chest when I was reading it, perhaps also the end, how you write is quite amazing, it amazes me how you can bring in all these different threads and then at the end, with a seemingly innocent line.. yes “the view outside.. ” just brilliant
Lund
“I saw a shark in her eyes one night. It was circling a memory, its black fin slicing through the calmness and warning threatening schools of thought.”
That just grabbed me. You write so amazingly creative and heart wrenching. Just wow…
Shoaib .
lots of really cool lines in here .. really cool writing
Kristin Reynolds
Awesome! I love this, wow, outstanding writing, filled with everything yummy, pain, memory, love, and the viceral sense of something untouchable. beautiful. Kristin
Rhinovangogh
Wow again. I love your work. Sincerely, RVG
lawrie .
Saw your comment on one of gretchens pieces, thought i’d come see, and yes wow, red bubble strikes again in finding another great read….hi pj
aglaia b
special stuff hey!
LOL
i love you ;-) xox
Alan Dean
quirky, beautifully written …..
jiba
Wow! This is really inspiring writing!