It came from deep inside
from that dark place we all keep hidden.
It roared silently from my head
as though it would never stop
Through the crowds of people
who mingled with disinterest
in my agony.
Why could they not hear my pain
as I stood there screaming
no one looked or even glanced my way,
were they so indifferent to my life
through clenched teeth and painted smile
I could hear a voice speaking
“good morning sir” as I held open the door.
and my silent scream continued
hilarydougill
Beautifully written Alan. So many people are indifferent to another’s pain. Very well expressed, and very visual. well done
Alan Findlater replied
Thanks Hilary sometimes things like this are hard to write its taken 4 years in this case
juice
excellent…our silent scream…will soon be heard…thank you for writing this so visually, emotive and ongoing…the best part…a never ending scream
Alan Findlater
Thanks for reading Jewels i appreciate it as well as your comments
Ginger Barritt
You moved me.
Alan Findlater replied
Now that comment has made my week i am happy to have shared this with you.
Jen Whyte
You have conveyed such emotion and feeling with your words … beautifully written
Alan Findlater replied
Hi Jen thanks for your great comment, i wish it did not take me so long to have the courage to put them down here.
loramae
For all of our best efforts we fall short on the simplest things…to listen and not hear to look and not see…well written…
Alan Findlater replied
And sometimes we choose not to listen thanks for your kind comment
spiritsfreedom
Oh this is absolutely stunning, as if you knew how I have been feeling. I am new to North Carolina, out of my element, still getting to know people. My daughter chose to stay with her father back in Michigan, so with Mother’s Day and all, I have been consumed by the blackness of depression. I am working on that and decided that I need to start exploring this new area with my camera. But, that poem fit me to a tea. Beautiful work, keep it up. I look forward to reading more. :-)
Alan Findlater replied
Hi Spiritsfreedom thanks for reading my little thoughts, whilst i am glad you understood its meaning i hope you as i have, found a way through life that hurts least. some things we have no control over and we can only do our best to cope with them.
I look forward to seeing some of your work over the coming weeks,
please keep in touch
Alan…
Aritheeagle
silent scream
just like a bad dream
please talk to me
why do you scream
like I can’t hear you
like I can’t bear you
don’t ride my day
with this unheard sway
of anger, pain and grey
if you think I’ll give way
you’re in the wrong head by the way
good morning day
what a wonderful day!!
Hooray Hooray!!
Ari
Lovely …. Alan ….... to submit to this phenomenon and share it is a privelege on HEALING knows!
You are well on your way to hEAL and keep this noisy pest away!
Ari
Alan Findlater
thanks for your excellent comment
Susie Mac
A powerful and emotive poem… very well written… it touched me susie ;)
Alan Findlater replied
thanks for your great comments i really appreciate them
deliriousgirl
JFC! I have this theory that we’re all walking wounded in some way here on this planet, I’m sure the silent scream reverberates in all of us at some point. Excellent excellent insights you have!!!
Alan Findlater replied
I once recently worked in an empty building, and just that one time i released the scream, Just for a moment it run wild.
Sean Farragher
beautifully written
Alan Findlater replied
Hi Sean thanks for reading it
spiritsfreedom
Thank you Alan, I am much better now, LOL. Some issues have been chasing me and finally caught up with me. I have so much to learn, but at times I just want to hide because the world is such a judgmental, hurtful and angry place. I have just recently moved to North Carolina and still feel out of my element. With warmer weather here I can begin to explore. I have tons of beautiful photos of my home state of Michigan, but I fear they are to small for this website. I do feel much better. Just had to face the issues and deal with them. Thank you and keep up the great work!
Max Gatrell
A great piece, truly thought provoking. I suppose the reason we’re so apathetic to people’s suffering, is cause we’re too busy with our own, we all hurt in our own way ;)
M
Alan Findlater replied
Thanks so much for your comment its appreciated
Max Gatrell
No worry’s, twas a top piece.
M
rojaburbuja
No one hears you even when you scream sometimes.
Your poem is so wonderful though.
Sometimes you can be a a room full of people and still feel alone.
Sometimes you can be all alone and feel totally full.
It is so beautiful. I brought a tear to my eye.
But to feel is a wonderful thing. To want to scream is a start of emotion.
That is a good thing…peace and love to you and all on this earth.
p.s. I am not from another planet though my son’s think come from you…lol ;-)))))))))))))))
Alan Findlater replied
thanks so much your considered comments they capture exactly the meaning off my words, I appreciate the time you take to read them.
barnsy
really good..i keep on hearing voices in my head now!
Alan Findlater
just dont listen Barnsy Thanks for checking out this work and for your great comment
bluz2nz
Thought prevoking well done!
Alan Findlater replied
sorry for the delay in answering, and thankyou for taking the time to read
lolowe
Really good, it made you think about what’s really going on beyond the smile.
Alan Findlater replied
thank so much for your time and comment
Karen Fahey
Alan, this is an extraordinarily well written piece, describing a feeling with which we can all relate, it’s so universal, yet completely unique at the same time to the person undergoing it.
Alan Findlater replied
thanks Karen as you say we can relate i just tried to put down how i felt at that time. but thanks for your great comments and for your time
Elenne Boothe
Wow!! I know the feeling, so deep!!!!!
wonderful writing.wonderful!!!!
Alan Findlater replied
Thanks Elenne when i wrote this i was thinking of one perticular time however since i have found that it describes many times in our lives and many situations. thanks for the kind comments
Elenne Boothe
You are so welcome.
JaneAParis
This is the all true scary truth of life sometimes, and sometimes more than sometimes. Nice piece Alan. It touchs all of our very real fears. It sounds like my everyday day life unfortunately. Just Jane—-
Alan Findlater replied
as it comes from how i truely felt at that time it has a power to return me to that time whenever i read it. thanks for taking the time jane i appreciate all your comment
Pet _
This is Brilliant Al!
Alan Findlater replied
thanks for the comment Petra
Goggo
I like this poem. Perhaps we have all been there, in those times of emotional pain. I would love you to read my poem and let me know what you think (which is about the joy of falling in love – the other end of the spectrum). It was extremely intense. That relationship ended and unfortunately I was left feeling what is in your poem!
rubyjo
I know that scream.
anisja
Very well writen.
Alan Findlater replied
thanks for taking the time to read this i appreciate it