He could feel the shovel vibrating in his hands as he struck something hard. Finally, after all the digging, he had found the treasure. Quickly, he piled the remaining bit of sand at the edge of the pit and used the shovel to lift the chest out. It was heavy. Just as he was about to lift it over the side of the pit, it was gone.
The boat was being hurled from side to side. Waves beat upon the little boat as he struggled to reach the shore. Looking back, he could see the large ship following him. Plunging the steel oar into the tumultuous waters, he desperately began to paddle away from his pursuer.
His opponent’s stance showed all of the hostility he felt. The two raised their foils and the duel began. The only sounds to be heard were the clanging of metal and the gasps of the crowd as they watched. He was pushed back against a wall and ducked just in time to avoid failure. Gracefully, he fell to the floor, rolled over, and stood up again behind his opponent. Just as he was about to land the winning mark,
“Timmy! How many times do I have to tell you: spoons are for eating, not the sandbox.”
Comments
Ahhh… loved it. You got me! This is great twist on the the prompt. It was so dark, I was thinking oh my is there going to be blood?? Clever you :>)
Thanks! I’m so glad you liked it and that it worked out the way I wanted it too.
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lol!! Excellent…I was thinking…huh? Where has the chest gone? Huh? How did he suddenly get from the boat into a sword fight? and then the end line revealed all. Very clever! :)
Thank you! I love twisted tales because of the challenge it is in making the reader think one thing and ending up with another.
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Wonderful story!! :-)
Thanks a million Dave!
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The misdirection of the writing magician. Pretty darn good. JH
Wow! Thanks so much!
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Excellent!!!
Glad you thought so Alison!
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Heee heee… cute story!
Aww…thanks Zolton!
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Excellent twist. Adorable story, I love an unexpected twist like this. :) SZ
Thank you so much!
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You had me wondering, lovely little twister :-)
Thanks Matt!
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Excellent immediacy. Cute twist. A short but gripping read.
I’m not so used to the new 350 word limit. I’m still in the habit of doing less than 250. Thanks for a nice comment!
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Haha, great work :)
Thanks Damian!
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