I was ready to leave

Ena Lü
Author: Ena Lü
Word Count: 128
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I was ready to leave

this is by no way no way a good piece of writing
many gaping ugly holes, no flow, at all!
I am only playing around with an event as a way to
find something for myself, to understand that connection
between woman and man, that mutual sharing of presence
of course I might not be looking in the right place
there may be more to come

in advance
forgive me

ena x

I was ready to leave
when
My way was taken

I could tell almost

immediately

by the cool slide of your
shoe as it found mine

somewhere in that crowded gallery

that I had come

only to find you

I was sure I was ready to leave
when my breath was taken

I could sense
the easy light

make your mouth

richly
spilled with words and smiles
between sips of wine

that I would want only you

when there in between everything

the room had no floor

I wasn’t sure of what was holding me up?

Perhaps the distinctive strength of your shoulders

I touched the outline with my fingertips
you said velvet

I said suede

maybe it was just the simple way
you
watched me

go ?

  • VelvetGirl

    VelvetGirl

    very beautiful and very sad. xx

  • Ena Lü replied

    bless you :) for commenting, sure it is just a first draft and could be
    nothing at all in the end lol x

  • hellmelon

    hellmelon

    I hope there’s more.This is really lovely.You are so forgiven :-)

  • Ena Lü replied

    Definitely have more emotion about what happened, just not sure of how the story moves yet….. BAH! Back to the writing board…...

  • Jakki O

    Jakki O

    Look forward to reading more ; )

  • Ena Lü replied

    I’m Gaaaaa GAAAAAH Gone Jaks!!!

  • Tania  Donald

    Tania Donald

    very intriguing..ahh potential, mystery, connection…...can’t wait to see how you tease all this out : )

  • Ena Lü replied

    Need a big ol 70’s hairbrush methinks MissT …...

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