like icarus
Written 13 July 2009.
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! Creative Writing & Poetry !, "Poetry and Beautiful Women" , All Out Emotion, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Childhood, Core [C.O.R.E], Creative, Talented, and Unknown, Featured Features - For Featured Art, Photography, T-Shirts, Writing, Freedom In Words & Art, Freedom to Shine, Graphic Scratch, Imperfectly, Lifeline, Light In The Darkness, Live, Love, Dream: May you have a Blessed Christmas Season , Midnight Ramblers, On Youth, Shameless Self-Promotion, The Art of Pain, The beauty of poetry, The Healing Journey, Unconventional Artistry - 3 per day, Up & Coming Writers and WMGwhen i was younger
i would dream
of a world beyond my own
where i could be
simply me
a world where dreaming
was my reality
no aspiration was too grand
no ambition was too lofty
for me to conquer
or achieve -
youth lent me confidence
and one day
i gathered together
the feathers
of my dreams, soft as thought
and wove them together
with hope
and my vision
of the future
and then:
i took the jump
my heart soared
and i did too
but like icarus
i aspired too high
i flew too close
to the burning sun of your displeasure
the bitter fire of your words
melted the bonds
that linked dream with reality
hope with certainty
and i fell
like icarus
my youthful dreams
burn as i fall
their ash is scattered
to the winds
i fall
back to the cold earth
and plunge
into the sea
my dreams are nothing
in your eyes
Erika .
I sighed deeply when I read this…especially the end. It’s bittersweet and sad. I can relate to this piece entirely, my friend.
oneperfectkiss
so very sad and i deeply relate. xxx
Vanessa Anderberg
Great writing….true life words
skinnyman
A really nice piece E. Comparing yourself to icarus is rather brave of you, perhaps your a phoenix now.
JonoCarrick
beautiful.
wigs
soulfully sad…. but beautifully expressed in your writing
Shoaib .
should have listened to daedalus …. lol
but hey at least you have a whole SEA named after you now…
great metaphor with this … i m very impressed by your work
Rhenastarr
A soulful bittersweet journey you took us on. Beautifully written.
PJ Ryan
really visual, beautifully tragic concept, beautifully written.
Mikyle
This is fantastic Jordan! I love the imagery and metaphors that you have used throughout this poem. Magical, sad, moving… profound. Great piece of writing.
Matt Penfold
You capture a loss of innocence beautifully Jordan, also the tenuous and fragile nature of perceiving oneself through the eyes of others. Nice work mate.
RebeccaWeston
Wonderful – how sad, how true. Excellent writing XX
Becca
BiographyofRed8
perhaps though your dreams should be enough for your own eyes..
ArcadiaTempest
You write shows the emotional impact so succinctly when dreams crash…..and some dreams sure do crash loudly.. Human endurance is a blessing is it not? The imagery you have employed here is stunning…XX
Hannah Fenton-...
This was just featured in
The beauty of poetry
LTScribble
Wow so many artists can relate to this, (or is it just people in general).........this wonderful poem about imagination and escapism….about someone with words destroying such beautiful worlds….....i know i share the kinship of this piece…....
Ushna Sardar
excellent Jordan!
RebeccaWeston
Wow – congratulations on the well deserved features XX
Becca
Larasolnishko
wonderful
marthie
wow i feel like that like all the time good
Lund
my youthful dreams
burn as i fall
their ash is scattered
to the winds
Your words paint such vivid images… Incredible metaphors and soulfulness. Wow.
happyfeet5
Beautifully written. Great meataphor. And I had dreams also broken, by my parents. Now, I have a big critc very close to me, especially about my writing. But I’ve learned not to let it make me fall. You see, I already fell. Now, I’m going higher and higher, thanks to the support of my RB friends and my children, who are my biggest fans. Great work. Love it.
MistressZombie
This is like viewing a piece of art – so wonderful are the images you summon with words.
jevoudrais
such incredibly powerful writing…