father
Written 26 May 2009.
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i can feel your touch
lingering still
on skin and stone
and on my soul
the faint sheen
of your presence
like oil
clings to my fingers
when i reach out to grab
at something solid
at some small piece
of you
where are you now?
i look –
hope lodged inside my chest
like a bullet
i hold on to it
its feathers brush gently
against my hands
and i feel its heartbeat
so fragile and light
that i wonder how
it can still survive
i look –
but i find nothing
the wind whispers your name
the earth speaks
of your presence
in low tones that
i strain to hear
is it that i’m out of touch?
or were you never there from the start?
i call to you
from across barren deserts
and empty plains
but all i hear in answer
is a hollow reply:
my own voice echoing back
over the years
where are you?
it’s not yet night,
but fading fast
Anthony Mancuso
superb!
Jordan Busson replied
Thank you, Anthony.
Plum
This really captures such a deep longing unanswered – love the lines – I look, hope lodged in my chest like a bullet – takes you right into that feeling >:
Jordan Busson replied
Thank you, Plum. I am refering, here, to both God and to our actual fathers. I appreciate your words.
Plum
that makes it even more poignant – I love the depth you can go to – very inspiring
Jordan Busson replied
That means more to me than you know. Thank you. xx
ArcadiaTempest
Goodness…...such longing. I know this….you write with a pen poised right on the heartbeat. Wow… X
Jordan Busson replied
Oh, KarenSue.
Your words are priceless to me.
Thank you. So much.
Erika .
Can’t describe how beautiful this is…..so profound and meaningful…
hope lodged inside my chest
like a bullet...I felt that.
I think KarenSue and Plum did a better job of describing this and I agree with them.
Inspiring poetry, my friend.
Jordan Busson replied
Truly, my friend, I think that simplicity speaks.
I am happy, that you could feel this. Thank you.
Astoreth
XX
Jordan Busson replied
Thanks, Jane.
marthie
ek is woordless ummm….. wow wow die gevoel kom net so goed deur wow wow
Jordan Busson replied
Dankie, Marthie!
Cassey
Really great. Heartfelt with sadness and longing, and powerful emotions.
OneMultipleCode
I relate to this when I think “daddy” instead of “father… hrm… :( I am glad you wrote this, and thank you for sharing.