An Empty Room
A poem about an empty room, and childhood memories. Written 18 April 2009. Featured in Masterpieces: Literary Workshop and On Youth.
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! 100% !, ! Creative Writing & Poetry !, "Poetry and Beautiful Women" , All Out Emotion, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Childhood, Core [C.O.R.E], Creative, Talented, and Unknown, First Things, Freedom In Words & Art, Freedom to Shine, Friends of RedBubble, Graphic Scratch, Light In The Darkness, Live, Love, Dream: May you have a Blessed Christmas Season , Masterpieces: Literary Workshop, On Youth, Shameless Self-Promotion, Something To Say, The beauty of poetry, The Healing Journey, The Word Tree, Up & Coming Writers and WMGan empty room
simple
and unfurnished
haunted by ghosts
of childhood
memory
green lino
faded with age
and cracking
at the edges
covers the floor
like lichen
walls
thick with the dust
of years
long passed
and forgotten
dull lime and faux pine
an ill-fated
domestic coupling
spider webs
gather in the corners
like shadows
their jaded landlords
spinning silken threads
in untiring futility
a coffee stain
adorns one wall
like an absent-minded addition
by an errant artist
in a moment
of decorative whimsy
an empty room
forgotten
and abandoned
alive
with dreams
of the past
RebeccaWeston
Wow – I love this, I’ve been trying to write something simliar but I won’t bother now as I can’t top that !!! X
Jordan Busson replied
Thank you so much, Rebecca. What a compliment! I really appreciate it :)
Anthea Slade
Oh Elucidate you have captured the abandonment and empty feeling in this evocative and stirring poem Empty Room. Wow your words move me deeply and I am so impressed with your poetic brilliance. Beautiful writing…
spider webs
gather in the corners
like shadows
their jaded landlords
spinning silken threads
in untiring futility
a coffee stain
adorns one wall
like an absent-mined addition
by an errant artist
in a moment
of decorative whimsy
Jordan Busson replied
Anthea! Your words are so inspiring and encouraging. I cannot thank you enough. Words like yours are my reason to carry on writing… I’m so glad that this piece could stir your emotion. Thank you.
Cassey
It surely doesn’t sound empty to me. It sounds alive, very much alive. Beautiful!
Jordan Busson replied
I’m happy you saw it that way: it is alive, in its own way. Thank you for your kind words.
Monkee
cool… gives it a real sense I being there..;o)
Jordan Busson replied
Thanks!
Erika .
Wow, this is sad. It’s alive with emotion and loneliness. The imagery is amazing.
But this line just got me:
an empty room
forgotten
and abandoned
alive
with dreams
of the past
I can feel it. This is really brilliant writing, Elucidate.
Jordan Busson replied
Thank you, Erika. I love that you can feel this :)
natapee
a coffee stain
adorns one wall
like an absent-mined addition
by an errant artist
in a moment
of decorative whimsy
love that stanza.
Jordan Busson replied
I enjoyed writing it. Thanks, natapee.
ArcadiaTempest
so wonderfully evocative….....brilliant imagery…your getting so WOW!!!!...... no correction you just are WOW!!!
Jordan Busson replied
Thank you so much, KarenSue. Your words always encourage me. I’m so glad that there are people like you out there.
Shoaib .
brilliant my friend
Jordan Busson replied
Thanks, Shoaib :)
Amber Elizabet...
WOW Wonderful Work!!!!
Jordan Busson replied
Wow, I’m honoured! Thank you so much!
Svetlana Sewell
Lovely as always!
Do you want to publish yourself?
Jordan Busson replied
Oh, Lana, I would love to. I just don’t know how :(
Svetlana Sewell
Well if you have been featured – what does it mean – people like your soul poems – what does it mean – spread the wold and gain from it and when you are famous don’t forget about us!!!
wow – I think that I just gave you an idea about next work of yours. Regarding your previous answer – you can deducate your next work to….....
Lana, hugs,xoxo
Jordan Busson replied
I’ll be sure to :) Ah, it would be great to have my work published in an anthology, or something. I should take a look around.
Svetlana Sewell
Serch the internet – there is the way!!!
Jordan Busson replied
True… There are always ways and means :) Thanks, Lana.
cathrinedp
powerful and filled with so many images. You are so talented!
Jordan Busson replied
Thank you, Cathrine. Your encouraging words are a beautiful gift.
Impassioned
Wonderfully written!
Jordan Busson replied
Thank you!
Matt Penfold
Great work once again, you painted a picture and an atmosphere with so few words, well done.
Jordan Busson replied
Thanks, mate. Much appreciated.
Mikyle
Wow. I really enjoyed reading this asp.
Your words are like a paint brush to blank canvas in the eye of my mind…
Jordan Busson replied
What beautiful words. Thank you.