Literature in Limbo

Imagine something for me:
Imagine a town on the banks of a river, nestled in the foothills of distant mountains. Picture boats in a small harbour, clinging to the jetties like fruit on a laden bough, and the dusty streets lined with houses.

Let us follow these dark streets to an inn. A faded sign hangs above the door, red paint flaking from its boards. The sign rattles in the cool night breeze. Inside, the inn is dimly lit by oil lamps. The floor is made of dark wood and is covered with rushes. On one side of the room is a bar, where young men sit and drink after a hard day’s work in the fields.

In the far corner of the room sits a jaded minstrel, plucking disconsolately at a harp. The clear, pure notes fill the air, but the drinkers take no notice of him. He sits wrapped in his music, immersed in the sound of his own creation. As he plays, he reaches up to brush a strand of dark hair from his face, and the music falters. But none takes notice, for the barman is in the cellar fetching barrels of ale, and the men at the bar have eyes for the barmaid alone.

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    You are going places!!! You are a gift. X This has poise and imagery that beckons you to want more…..How old are you…..108?

  • Jordan Busson replied

    You make me laugh. 108? Not yet… Thank you so much for your words (and the fave, of course!). Perhaps I should write the rest of it sometime soon…

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    Do…..it is already so far a great little read….make it more see where she takes you this little ditty

  • Jordan Busson replied

    Thanks, Arcadia. I think I will.

  • butchart

    butchart

    i loved imagining this…. it was easy to do…..... great start…...... more please….............b

  • Jordan Busson replied

    Thank you. I’ll just have to se what the rest of the story holds. I think I’ll start writing it again. Your encouragement and the positive response I’ve received is inspiring.

  • Ann  Palframan

    Ann Palframan

    You paint a vivid picture with words…a rare gift! I agree – you really should explore this further :))

  • Jordan Busson replied

    Thank you for your kind words, Ann. I’d best get started :)

  • Erika .

    Erika .

    You are so talented. This definitely captures the imagination, and the imagery is so vivid. The ending definitely makes you reflect on the little things that you have missed in life. I just feel like walking over to the minstrel and ask him to please keep playing.

  • Jordan Busson replied

    Thanks, Erika :) I’m pleased that it works so well.

  • Suzanne German

    Suzanne German

    this is intriguing and really takes your mind’s eye to the centreo the scene and the pulse of the situation…..write more…..go on!!

  • Jordan Busson replied

    Your words are appreciated, Suzanne. Thanks for the feature!

  • Erika .

    Erika .

    Hey Congratulations on your feature Elucidate!! :D

  • Jordan Busson replied

    Thanks, Erika! I’m so proud!

  • Mikyle

    Mikyle

    I’m having a field day with your writing. Magnificent as usual… x

  • Jordan Busson replied

    Grazing through the verdant fields of prose? I’m glad that you’re reading. Thank you.

  • BruceMeyer

    BruceMeyer

    Every musician should play in a bar sometime. :-)
    You captured the feeling well.

  • Jordan Busson replied

    Thank you, Bruce.

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