Promptus Fructus

I opened the door quickly, casually, as I always did. My feet finding their way over the threshold without me giving the order. I stumble absentmindedly, my mind once again caught up in all the things I have to do, places I said I’d go today and never got around to. My composure regained I scan the dimly lit living room searching for what fouled me up. The room faintly illuminated by the city light flooding through the closed drapes does little to help me find my way. As my eyes adjust they find nothing which would have caused the trip. Off handedly I toss my briefcase and coat to the floor, making sure to place my keys in the the leaf shaped porcelain dish Marissa bought on our honeymoon. I remember the minute she spied it through the shop window, the way her eyes lit up. Suddenly the thought of her has me headed quickly towards the bedroom where she lay, surely fast asleep. I grasp the door handle like the edges of a dream disappearing, and pull it towards me, savoring the moment my eyes take her in. My gaze filtered through the luxury the long hours that I work provide, I see her, breathe her in, and her beauty does not disappoint. Curls as black as pitch spread out on the pillow surrounding her head, a crown of ringlets denoting the princess she is. She lies so still, so majestic, it’s all I can do to quickly remove my clothes and slide in next to her. The roughness of the satin sheets tag brushes my skin and I recoil in disgust at the stark contrast of heavenly sensations meeting paper. I kick at it, simultaneously moving myself closer to her, to my Marissa. Our skin meets, and the subtle warmth of her feels like home, and like a womb it envelopes me. Now right beside her, I lay my head on her bare breast and fall quickly to sleep.

I dream of us. I dream of her smile and her eyes which say everything in an instant in lieu of lips that seldom speak. As morning dawns I wake with icy finality. I am clutching to Marissa for warmth and find only the oddity and strangeness of cold hard limbs. Pressing my head to her chest once again, it was what I didn’t hear that sent me reeling from the bed. It was then I saw it, the note I had mistaken for the satin sheets tag:


Edibl3leper

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This piece is the result of a writing club prompt, it is also the first full short story I have ever finished. That’s not completely true, technically I finished one many moons ago and then promptly lost it along with the memory of how it went, go figure. Either way, to me this counts as my first, and as it is up here, unless I forget my password, there’s no losing it, and hopefully I never look back and wish I would have lost it. lol

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Originally dark blonde, shy girl with an inferiority complex. But that’s no fun now is it? Black hair, yellowy hazel eyes, a “the louder the better” mentality, and an ego the size of Detroit (as fake as my raven hair I should mention) rounds out my very normal nautre. (-: Judge me by my poetry and my writing, and you’ll know me better than 85% of the rest of the world. (-:

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  • Jenifer DeBellis
    Jenifer DeBellis8 months ago

    Wow Mandi, didn’t see that coming. I absolutely love I grasp the door handle like the edges of a dream disappearing, and pull it towards me. This imagery still tugs at me and keeps pulling me back toward it. Isn’t it refreshing when a writing prompt bears such marvelous fruit? Great piece. xox

  • Edibl3leper
    Edibl3leper8 months ago

    Appreciation that knows no bounds hefted in your direction. lol Thank you for the lovely comment. I needed that. I’m feeling all vulnerable and exposed having not been active on the bubble for quite sometime.

  • vkatt0304
    vkatt03048 months ago

    Oh I love this one ♥ You did a great job!

  • What a great comment, the time it took you to read and comment are appreciated more than you may know. (-:

    – Edibl3leper

  • Ushna Sardar
    Ushna Sardar8 months ago

  • My utter astonishment and thank you. (-;

    – Edibl3leper

  • msdebbie
    msdebbie8 months ago

    Hey Mandi, I really like the story you’ve woven together. I too love love love the line Jen picked, but also I dream of us. I dream of her smile and her eyes which say everything in an instant in lieu of lips that seldom speak.
    Great characterisation. I liked the hand-written note too, but as a small aside, think if you have any satin sheets you could use as the backdrop, it would be even more effective as an image. Well done on the short story too! It’s very well done xxx

  • Errr, I have no satin sheets, it’s a side effect of having metal workers hands my whole life. *Odd note, I went to school for metrology. lol The soft textures catches on my rough skin and gives me the ebbie-geebies, i sure if I had some time though I could find a stock photo, definitely something for me to consider. Thank you so much for the idea, and the time you took to read my story. I know I haven’t been on here mush lately, great to see you are still active and haven’t lost faith in me. (-;

    – Edibl3leper

  • jainiemac
    jainiemac8 months ago

  • Again, pure astonishment, and appreciation. People enjoying my work never ceases to amaze me. (-: Thank you.

    – Edibl3leper

  • BasantSoni
    BasantSoni8 months ago

    GREAT presentation ..note is most suiting,,,at the end…!!super expression ..heart touching..

  • Why thank you. (-;

    – Edibl3leper

  • DeeLishess
    DeeLishess8 months ago

    this misted me up a bit… must be those damn allergies lol… great piece. heartbreaking. great twist too. i must confess i’m speechless right now, but thought this deserved a comment for sure :)

  • My sincerest thank you, I never get tired of reaching people on any level. lol Speechless is good. (-:

    – Edibl3leper

  • Brian Varcas
    Brian Varcas8 months ago

    This is so poignant. I could feel the powerful range emotions which the morning discovery would bring. Fabulous write.