IMPRESSIONS
This piece is about a girl on the train, doing her hair and make-up all the way into town. It was written in the 12 minutes it takes to get from Newport to Southern Cross.
IMPRESSIONS belongs to the following groups:
Melbourne & Victoria and The Word TreeShe tries so hard, for it must be perfect,
Applying her make-up to enhance her age.
The dress is right, for tonight must be different,
A whole new chapter, not just a turn of a page.
Obsessed with her image, the delusional girl seeks to find…
Her heart’s match— She’s no flower’s keeper.
A strand of her hair hangs down, covering one eye,
Will she find him? Or just another to wound her deeper.
With her mascara set, she smiles into her little mirror.
Almost done— As she packs up her aids.
Lips lightly gloss, her posture keen…
She steps out of the train, but into the crowd she fades.
ladyb
Beautifully written, and I love that you wrote this in a twelve minute journey. I like your mind. x
Erin Lyall
Wow I really like the last line.
MissKristy
I agree with Erin, killer closing line. Imagery really works well. I enjoyed it.
Max Gatrell
An excellent piece, thoroughly enjoyed it.
M