The tank

Domenica
Author: Domenica
Word Count: 130
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Nan told us not to play there. I bet if she caught us hanging out around the tank, we’d be given a hiding. Not that Nan is mean or anything. She just has rules. Rules about most things. Rules that don’t make sense. Rules that always spoil our fun.

She never used to be like that. It used to be fun to spend a week at Nan’s. You could sleep in the lounge room, on the floor. If you woke up early, she wouldn’t mind if you turned the telly on. Mum never let us watch telly in the morning. But Nan would.

Not anymore though.

People say she’s losing her marbles. I just reckon she worries too much. I think she worries she’ll lose us.

Like she lost Mum.

The tank

The tank belongs to the following groups:

Flash Fiction
  • Lehane

    Lehane, 5 months ago

    Nicely paced. An enjoyable read.

  • Kitsmumma

    Kitsmumma, 5 months ago

    This is quite chilling and sad…........................ mums gone but that tank is still there, a constant reminder! Really well written, and thanks again, I’m honoured.

  • Natella2020

    Natella2020, 5 months ago

    I really like this. It is so sad.

  • Chanel2

    Chanel2, 5 months ago

    Yes, I enjoyed reading this too.

  • Peter Davidson

    Peter Davidson, 5 months ago

    yes, a dark tale, powerfully told. Thanks for the read!

  • Anne van Alkemade

    Anne van AlkemadeWordsmith, 5 months ago

    oh, that’s so sad. Beautifully written.

  • Domenica

    Domenica, 4 months ago

    Hey thanks kids! I appreciate all your comments…
    I don’t know where this piece came from. As my little sister would say, it just fell out of my pen!

  • staz89

    staz89, about 1 month ago

    Sad but great work

  • MickyMc

    MickyMc, about 1 month ago

    Maybe it’s just me; but I couldn’t help thinking that the reason Nan didn’t want them playing by the tank, was, because Mum was in there.

    A really nice bit of flash

  • Huxton Heroes

    Huxton Heroes, about 1 month ago

    Completely unexpected ending…
    Wow.

  • Digby

    Digby, about 1 month ago

    Very well written. Perfectly pitched and such an evocative sensibility.

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