My Acrophobia

fascinating writing…the going’s on in your life or imagination….I’m still waiting for your book…either a collection of your short stories…extended a little more…so I can get some more of your wonderful detail from your writing…or a really long story that fills my days with pleasure

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oh dear yes lust LOL! i should be careful what i type in my times of excitement hey!
love you and hope you’re feeling better! xox

oh no….and can you see my now trying to type this as i’m lying on the floor in fits of laughter! PMSL xox

see i can’t even type properly when i’m laughing so hard….i meant me god damn it me not my! you get me though, boy do you get me! xox

Do they think you pushed him?

Did you push him?

oh yes, you mentioned you were sick, it must have been somewhere on my page i think. i do remember it was really late here like 2 or 3 am!
anyhow you are back in full swing now i can tell!
and in a new house yes??
xox

a loft, what a great word. it so sounds like where john giorno and other beatniks would hang out and write all about it, life, love, poetry! just like you hey.
i have a bit of a geek squad here LOL in my other half (better hurray and type this before he catches me calling him a geek). he could have set up your puters for free!
so when are you moving here then? xoxo
i’m sure you’ll have the place spik and spam soon enough!

Not really. I have more empathy for the idea that it would never occur to you.

Gotta get ‘back on the horse’ to overcome, Don’t we?

Over coming the fear

i’m onto it!
LOL
xox

Go Higher then

You’re a bad cook. I don’t believe it.

it was the food that did it! he wanted you and you offered food!

Love it!

Lets see, do I want one more night of her cooking or…....................................................... thud

LOL

you invited him over for dinner?

oh i’m so confused.

is this story real jen?

did you really see someone jump?

you DID cook for him didn’t you?

or you asked him to set up your computer?

tee heeeeeeeee _{oh so confusing am i}

and most importantly (!!) I forgot to say that i love the compact size of this story .. because it says so much .. you’re good at this :)

this one punched me right in the chest….but somehow i knew it was coming….

ohhhhhh !!

i don’t know why i even questioned this .. i never question if writing is real or not .. i’m losing my mind .. i need sleep .. hahahhaaaa ohhhhhhhh what did i say today about blonde moments jen? see, too many today.

your flash fiction rocks :)

i still think about the hand in the vege section LOL

HA !!

that’d be FABULOUS if you lived with AB .. i only live 15 mins away :)

come on down under ;)

(oh shit that sounds so seedy)

OH, everything makes sense now.

No, it is a far from confusing write.

What confused me was you replied to someone with;

This one was witness

me, being “confused nicole” today (tomorrow i’ll be sane and on the ball nicole) thought you were saying you had witnessed this in reality.

DERRRRRRR

now i understand … “witness” was the word for the flash ..

sorry for the confusion darl

xx

LOL

too true :)

and too damn funny really

hey, I like to think in more fantastical ways, like maybe he walked off into another dimension as you said “vanished” but you made no mention of a body below, so…...............

the dimension of banquets and cook-offs, haha…

Nice work

this is a beautiful writing… is it true? if so I’m sorry.

Jen-More Magic, condensed into such a powerful piece.

Superb.

Wow what substance packed into a shorter piece, thats a hard thing to do and you did that very very well my friend…...Great job Jen!!!!! xoxoxoxo

It reminded me of watching a guy that I had known jump from a cliff in costa rica. No explanations just a long look at the sky and a leap. My thoughts ran from shock to the bizarre like there has to be water down there to he looks like a broken marionette strewn on the rocks.

It makes me dizzy to read this and even more so as it dredges up my memories. Bravo in it’s brevity.

You wrote the story in 20 minutes? That’s impressive. It is a great story, with enough ambiguity to keep the reader guessing.

Well, Magic GLADYS-I stand corrected!!

Zsa Zsa???

OK, American Film star from the 60’s…...................

Doris??

Stop changing the subject!!

Lana?

after Hepburn??

Audrey Hepburn was possibly the most gorgeous woman ever in the history of everything, but you’re not called Audrey, so,I really am being a bit too tenuous now…....

On Golden Pond-one of my favourite movies- she was just brilliant.

Bitch….....
Perfect Flash Fiction
Perfect

Nope!

still in awe

OK, I will!!

That was like a hammer in the face. A fast one at that. Way to gut me in under a minute there.
I try not to use this word much but as you’re the only person who actually used it on this page so far here goes:
Amazing

Awesome is an awful yoke alright. In England and Ireland alright now Astonishing has fallen into use a bit because of this guy on tv. He’s not the worst of ‘em either but its ripe to turn soon and not be remotey cool. I say Unreal without noticing it. I dunno is that ok or not yet.
Rapid is a good one here because its regular conversation but nobody outside Ireland gets it. I slapped it on a few pages though.
Now that I mention it.
The yoke you wrote above there is totally rapid and pure deaacent.

Oh no you don’t. I just made it not cool anymore.

Only a pure langer says unreal these days

You don’t want to know. Actually feckit you have unreal, it has a bit to go in it even here and you can alternate between the two. With my compliments.
I’m not completely sure but it appeared in the media in Ireland and Britain around 1993, possible sources are:
A “hit” for nightmarish awful life-sucking soulless torturous cheesy worthless unskilled ill-meaning caterwauling blues-riff-incessantly-repeating bad bad bad band Roxette
And the first or what was a long line of the Unreal Tournament series of video games. And probably some film too. I tried to play the latest Unreal Tournament, It turns out I’m too old. All this flashing lights stuff and noise and hassle and what I imagine must be coked up 16 years olds on the other end of the broadband splatting me across a time zone every few minutes. Never mind.

All this flashing lights stuff and noise and hassle and what I imagine must be coked up 16 years olds on the other end of the broadband splatting me across a time zone every few minutes.

You freekin crack me uppppppppp!!!!!!!!!

COD4 is like being stabbed with about 8 compasses for round and about half an hour until you can take no more.

And I don’t think I spelled that word secede correctly. sorry.

a pearl. a perfect little pearl. flash fiction as good as this is hard to do, lady, and boy do you do it good... wonderful piece.

shit, that hits the spot dg! short and sharp, really well written, well done

Dramatic and wonderfully written!

What a tale.

The blindness of the narrator is intriguing, or maybe the rest of us are just as blind as she is?

This is great stuff, a good entry.

You’re not saying that this is a true story, are you?!

I considered your tale a metaphor for a lot of crumbled lives, and a representation of the blindness of onlookers (sometimes those who are really close) who don’t see the end coming until it it too late.

O you dark, sick, twisted soul. How did I miss this?

Damn…is it okay to hate you because you’re brilliant? Cuz you are. And probably really good looking too…yep…I hate you. But in a dark, sick, twisted, sisterly way. Muah!!

y usted es mi llama :p

This one made my hair stand up because I have a fear of wrongly being accused of a crime! Well done.

Serves him right for mooning you from the bus.

Very powerful stuff here! Executed very well and your writing seems tight and polished with no errors! Such a great read…. definitely a good story!

beautifully tragic!

JFC the comments took me 8 times longer to read than the story, and now I forget the story….actually, no I don’t….wow, he jumped!

I mean….wow, I sorta saw it coming, but the emptiness when he did…..and ouch, having to explain because this person you thought you knew, but obviously didn’t…..your fiction constantly floors me!

I’m so pleased, especially that you were able to make some sense out of that drivel I typed….

Oh stop it. Your writing is fantastic! Before the internet I’d spend most nights reading books….you remember them? 1996 was when this rot started, and I began reading online fiction, mIRC and other fun and games…..then in 2004 I bought a decent camera….that threw me into the visual arts, and made me lazy.

Only buy a dozen paperbacks a year now, instead of a month….and get much more enjoyment from reading the tales on the bub (and in the rooms) because I can also have some sort of tenuous contact with the authors! Makes it all much more personally appealing.

^{hehe I pile them on the floor and side table….just don’t tell anyone}

damn this is good…wonderfully written

I have to digest. Your writing is overwhelming. Not just this one but all.

The fall, the thought, the look, the feeling…tracing it back through my mind, and I know. I know what it feels like on the edge.

You are one hell of a writer.

Sparse, concise writing that leaves all the emotional impact.
This is a story I’ll carry with me for the rest of the day.
Great job.

Vivid, and i do mean vivd was what i saw while i read. Wow! i can somewhat feel the casualness of watching him go over the edge…

holy shit thats amazing!

Christ! That made me take a deep deep breath! I love how you’ve pared this down to such a dramatic slap-in-the-face, don’t-breathe-while-you-read story….

That’s gorgeous. Loved the narrator’s uncomplicated view on things.

Oh dear, should I change it? :)

heh…..ok sweetheart, I’ll leave it…..just hate for you to need to go to the emergency room for lack of breath! :)

LOL, yeah, way behind :)
I was having a bit of a tour of the older works in the FFic group, stopping by ones I hadn’t visited before :)

i’m just typing around my slack dropped jaw here jen… i’ve never read this piece of yours before and just like damian, i’m taking a stroll through old flash fictions pieces and these words of yours are like finding buried treasure on my path. incredibly good, lady. incredibly good.

Incredibly powerful.