Liquid lightning, my fingers brush her
Senses, secretively screaming
A dark street of desire
Controlled and steady rhythm
She stands – immobile as a statue
Back arched in naïve supplication
A subconscious acceptance
Muscles, responding with infinite grace
My mind, a devouring hunger-smith
My hand, a fatherly comforter
Our eyes do not meet
Shying from the emptiness
Brief and fleeting, black and deep
A shadow of unconscious memory
My fingers die a lonely death
And once again we smile
Jessica Tremp
quite a sad piece Mark…’my fingers die a lonely death’...like that
Xenia
emotional! i like it!
Lisa Jewell
Powerful emotions….
I really like these lines “My mind, a devouring hunger-smith
My hand, a fatherly comforter”
marieancolie
Our eyes do not meet
Shying from the emptiness
love this.
jack01
love this. She stands – immobile as a statue
Back arched in naïve supplication
A subconscious acceptance
Muscles, responding with infinite grace,
MissKristy
‘My fingers die a lonely death
And once again we smile’
That made my heart hurt…so beautiful, so tragic. Such a bittersweet poem..my favourite kind :)
transmute
As everyone has said, bittersweet. There’s a blend of sensuality and sadness in this that really resonates.
Sara Lamond
ooooooooh – since I lack your skill with words, I’ll leave it at that – while I attempt to slow my breathing…
Jason Moses
My man, I can’t describe how good this is. I can’t pick a favourite line or stanza. What’s more, I usually hate alliteration, yet “liquid lightning” really got me.
shanghaiwu
I like brief interludes…....this sets me thinking in many directions
great words
John Segon-Fis...
Yes Mark, dark street of desire.
mick8585
Good effort Mark. You jam packed emotion in there. Great expression and imagery.
Suzanne German
hi bro’ ! how tender and profound your feelings in this are…a very special poem.
suzannex
flower68
intense.familiar.almost visual.would make a great abstract painting.
twistedson
What a moment, so electric and captivating, you put words together beautifully.
saint
really dark, i love it!
jianina
This feels very masculine…the feelings the word give are almost sensitive…sensitivity is also stong. Empowering!