Weird (s)Hit

It was the weirdest hit I’d ever taken.

Some grade “A” acid shit cooked up in a military laboratory, or so the rat-faced bum said, y’know – back when Uncle Sam was getting fucked a long time down Saigon way.

“Will take you off the fucking scale, man, you won’t know what to believe.”

I’m not sure he could believe it when I grabbed his foil wrap and took off. That’s the kind of cold-sweating, bowel-wrenching fuck-up I’d become.

One man’s high is another man’s misery.

Back in my ends I was flying, like really tripping. House plants were talking to me, the walls bleeding. It was really bad shit. I couldn’t make out the crazy stuff from the reality.

I mean, why the fuck was that weird flying fist getting bigger and bigger?

And that’s when it hit me.

“You stole my shit, man!”


DBA Lehane

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For the 150 word flash fiction challenge And that’s when it hit me

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I’m a writer from the supposed mean streets of deepest, darkest south London, UK. I’ve been lucky enough that both my writing and photography has been published extensively online and in print.

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Comments

  • TheWanderingBoo
    TheWanderingBooover 1 year ago

    great write!

  • thank you!

    – DBA Lehane

  • Solar Zorra
    Solar Zorraover 1 year ago

    Very realistic. :) Solar

  • Thanks…in a good way I hope?

    – DBA Lehane

  • Karirose
    Kariroseover 1 year ago

    I can absolutely hear the voice of the kid that sold the acid to the character. (Will take you off the fucking scale, man, you won’t know what to believe.)

    That’s the kind of cold-sweating, bowel-wrenching fuck-up I’d become. Love the description.

    A very good read.

  • Thanks Kari, I really appreciate that!

    – DBA Lehane

  • Solar Zorra
    Solar Zorraover 1 year ago

    Definitely in a good way, it’s a great story! :) Solar

  • Thanks again, I really appreciate it!

    – DBA Lehane

  • CreativeKitty
    CreativeKittyover 1 year ago

    great write for sure!

  • Thank you kitty

    – DBA Lehane

  • Zolton
    Zoltonover 1 year ago

    ha ha ha… I asked a room full of people yesterday if I was the only person to never try acid. A resounding “yes” came back at me. This is great… lots in this short.

  • Thanks Z Lady! Just say no, take it from me!

    – DBA Lehane

  • ian osborne
    ian osborneover 1 year ago

    A real knockout flash story Darren. Great stuff!

  • Most kind Ian, thank you

    – DBA Lehane

  • IWML
    IWMLover 1 year ago

    been a while since i’ve seen bleeding walls… takes me back to my pre-parent days. ahhh. nice evocation!

  • Cheers! Yeah acid most probably aint a wise parenting technique

    – DBA Lehane

  • Cathryn Swanson
    Cathryn Swansonover 1 year ago
    ‘It was the weirdest hit I’d ever taken’, nice tricky lead in to the story. Clever and well written.
  • Thanks a lot Cathryn! Quite enjoyed this prompt!

    – DBA Lehane

  • IWML
    IWMLover 1 year ago

    you’re right. MUSHIES is the way to go.