I knew when it came, I saw it so plain,
your eyes were so tight and so thin.
I just wanted so much to come in from the rain
and move out of the flesh I was in.
I could never forgive you, I couldn’t live with you,
you cut out a slice from my heart;
your story is untrue, your garments are see-through,
the love that’s in us must depart .
And raising your hands like a bent stop sign
you pulled down the blinds on my life,
but that’s a black dove, not the one we call love,
all you’ve done is to sharpen the knife.
You stood there so false, like some drunk in a waltz,
you slipped out of your clothes into lies;
like a defeated army, stood naked before me
and yet you still wore a disguise.
Wet was the day when you finally went,
like a gutted wax candle you’d gone;
that feeling you get when you come close to death,
I felt then and there’s all of it left.
I can still see you then, I could love you again
if our lives could be lived through some others;
maybe next time around, our love won’t be drowned
in the knowledge that you are my brother.
Comments
WOW! Very very powerful – so heart wrenching too… life and relationships do tend to go in so many directions when we change something in our lives..The ending floored me and got me thinking of family and how fragile it can be when it shouldn’t. Amazing work as always!!! xoxo!
Thank you so much, maxy.
– darkvampire
Wow this is absolutely amazing!….your use of analogies are soo complex but dynamic and beautiful…your use of words and flow had me from the beginning..
And raising your hands like a bent stop sign
you pulled down the blinds on my life,
but that’s a black dove, not the one we call love,
all you’ve done is to sharpen the knife really….just amazing! the words just come together intertwined into a powerfully moving piece!…great job!
Thank you very much, JaNae. I’m so glad you like it.
– darkvampire
Wonderful writting DV
Thanks, frogster.
– darkvampire