This is my very first attempt at writing dialogue and I found it challenging to say the least. Obviously I still have a long way to go with my writing however I find the exercises very helpful.
Exercise 7 – Dialogue
All the traffic lights at the intersection were lit – red, orange, green. The overhead streetlights were blinking erratically against the night sky. In the centre of the intersection were the twisted remains of 8 cars.
From all directions came the sounds of sirens – police, fire and ambulance vehicles arriving at the scene with a number of tow trucks quickly following. As the police started arranging for witnesses to interview, the number of people loitering around the accident scene quickly thinned. Constables Steve Cole and Paul Ryan were experienced in this type of work and immediately started collecting the names of those remaining witnesses. Wayne Norris was the first to be interviewed.
‘So what did you see?’ asked Constable Cole.
‘They just all came through at once – the cars that is’ said Norris. ‘They didn’t slow down, no brakes, nothing’.
‘But is that what you actually saw?’ ‘Did you see them collide?’ asked Constable Ryan.
‘Well yes and no’ said Norris. ‘I was looking in the shop window and quickly turned after I heard the noise of the first 4 cars hitting to see the next four cars crash into the first four’.
‘Ok then – so what stood out when you looked around at the crash scene?’ ‘What did you actually see?’ said Constable Cole
Norris stood silent; his mind wandering back to the instance the cars had collided.
After a minute he replied – ‘the green glow, everything seemed to be green and the overhead street lights were off’.
‘Green?’ said Constable Ryan.
‘Yes green – all the traffic lights were green – both ways, the lights were stuck on green’.
Constable Cole looked around and noted that all the lights on the traffic signals were now on – red, orange and green all showing.
‘What about people? What were the other people around the intersection doing?’
‘Nothing’ replied Norris.
‘Nothing?’ said Cole.
‘Yes – nothing’ replied Norris – obviously getting annoyed at the questions.
‘All of them?’ asked Cole.
‘Yes all of them – well except for one man at that metal cabinet over there’, pointing as he spoke to what was obviously the control box for the traffic signals. ‘He had the door open and didn’t even look up when the cars collided’.
This certainly sparked the interest of both Constables. ‘So what did he do after the crash?’ they asked in unison.
‘Well he just closed up the cabinet, picked up what looked like a tool box and then walked off up Montpellier Road’ ‘I really only noticed him because he seemed to be the only person not interested in the accident’.
‘So what did he look like?’ they asked………………………..