That's my boy
Winner of the
“Hail Fellow” Challenge for
the Short stories – Spherical Scriptings Group
“How’s that, you bastards?”
The heavy ball sailed high and seemed to stay a split longer in the air than seemed natural and landed “plop” in the soft sand next to the jack.
“Truly a bigger arse of a shot can not be found Michael”
“More like you picked that shot out of your arse”
“That’ll be the money shot”
Came the replies of his opponents and partner
“Money shot be right, pay up boys”
Money exchanged hands and everyone moved up the pit to collect their balls.
“Oi Bobby I’ll collect mine, just leave it there” he called to his partner.
He needn’t worry about his opponents they never got close to the jack.
“My you’ve really hit your straps lately my friend” said Bobby ” Won’t be long before no one will plays us”
Michael waddled up to pick up his balls, picking up the last thrown with care and gently polishing it with a towel before putting it in a fur lined carry case.
“Aye it’s been a treat” Michael said more to the case than to Bobby.
The two men separated when they left the park to go to their individual homes.
“When I caught that Leprechaun, I never thought he’d be as sneaky as he was young Jim”
Michael stopped talking as a pair of ladies passed by, he gave them a polite smile. When they were clear he continued.
“My one wish and I only thought of you. Who’d of thought it would turn out like this, hey?”
He looked around and open the fur lined bag.
“To make something useful out of my only son I asked”
He patted his pockets
“ How useful you really have become, hey?”
The ball moved in the bag and let out a little sigh.
Anne van Alkemade
LOL that’s so twisted, Danny. Maybe you should pop this in Twisted Tails too.
Well done, mate.
Danny
thanks M’am
kseriphyn
wiggle wiggle, pop goes the weasel.
jcmontgomery
Very nice. I like twisted.
Cathryn Swanson
Hehe, very good.
Lawford
You’ve spent too long in the park watching Bocce my boy.
Lephrechaun indeed. Excess of green beer on St Patrick’s day I think.
Great story.
Danny
replied
Hey Lawford
there is a Bocce pit next to this
not far from where i grew up in Oakleigh.
It was the first thing I thought of.
Italian to Irish was more palatable to me.
Lawford
Isn’t that Motel fabulous? Very American 1950.
Alison Pearce
Great story! I thoroughly enjoyed this!
Michael Alesich
Great story Danny,
deliriousgirl
JFC!!! You have such great characters, a fantastic read.
Zolton
Oh my goodness do I love that photo above. Great story. Read it three times. Aaaah parents.
Empress
deliciously demented and funny
thank you.
Damian
LOL, that’s a lesson in being careful what you wish for!
JaneAParis
Smooth cheaters. Cute story. Congrats on winning! Smiles from Jane:-)
PJ Ryan
that’s fabulous !!
congratulations on the comp too :)
Anne van Alkemade
Way to go Danny. Well done on winning!!
Danny
Thank you for your kind comments.
kseriphyn
Congrats Danny. top win – top story.
kseriphyn
PS: Congrats on being featured in the writing gallery today.
Danny
replied
But its not poetry? WTF
Miri
many congrats on the win…what a great story, made me giggle!!
Lawford
Second read is even better. Well done Mr N.
Cathryn Swanson
Well done on the win :)
Ange
i didnt congratulate you on the win danny. congrats….this is one cool story.
C J Hummel - ...
Mmmh interesting but I know you have written better ones
C J Hummel - ...
oops, sorry wrong story…that was not meant for you ignore the above message
C J Hummel - ...
it was a friend who asked me to give a very honest review of her work – and the above message was not meant for you