Hurry
An entry for the Flash Fiction Group’s Back of an Envelope challenge.
We needed to write the story as something urgent that had been written on an envelope, in less than 150 words.
The only reason I write on paper is if I’m going somewhere and need that message left in the real world…
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ChainmailChick
Zombies, right?
Damian replied
LOL, maybe… not saying… (get out while you can…!)
mlgkats
great writing as always , and well done k, good luck my friend
Damian replied
Thanks Mel, glad you liked it :)
dirtman
Lots of great teasing in this one—it’s happened before? Friendly people end up dead? Was it so sudden that the person the note is to was just away for a few hours, or has it been a longer time? Why is s/he so certain that this person has survived?
Lots of questions make good stories! Well done.
Damian replied
Thanks dirtman :)
All those questions and more, like who has found the envelope right now. A family member, starving survivors, or an archeologist :)
jcmontgomery
What is implied seems so much scarier than what is said. Sometimes I wonder if my imagination is a curse or a blessing! Great job Damian.
Damian replied
Thanks Jo! No, I agree with you, the implications are frightful! :)
ChainmailChick
I ain’t skeered…I has katana. Let’em come to be chopped into tiny bits of zombieslaw!
Damian replied
LOL, there’s my new word for the day…zombieslaw… :)
ChainmailChick
There ya go…people should learn a new word every day. Glad to be of assistance, lol.
jcmontgomery
Zombieslaw ????
:shakes head into her hands
Damian replied
LOL, I wonder if it’d count in a game of Scrabble?
ChainmailChick
I see I’m going to have to write a dictionary of my own. Hrm…sounds fun! =)
Damian replied
Haha, the Gaylanary, featuring all of those words you said while swinging a katana :)
Alison Pearce
Fabulous Damian! A well written and intriguing snippet that’s left me wanting answers!!!
Damian replied
Thanks Alison :)
Not the sort of note you’d want to find, I think :)
Empress
what is served with zombieslaw?
and why do i suspect the writer did away with those “friendly people”?
Damian replied
Served with zombieslaw? Probably a side of shotgun shells or spilt blood, LOL!
And the writer IS one of the friendly people. He wouldn’t have taken all the good gear from the other friendly people. Nope. ;)
ChainmailChick
Not all were polite words. Eeep. =)
Damian replied
So it’d be an interesting read then? :)
ChainmailChick
Oh, yeah.
LOL
ChainmailChick
Fried Cthulhu bits go well with zombieslaw. Sprinkle with a little vamp pepper and top off with a nice werewolf blood’s Chianti, and you’re in business. Oh, and don’t forget the gnome puffs or the fairy pies, either. Gotta have dessert.
Damian replied
LOL, fried Cthulhu! I’d like to see anyone try and harvest those squid rings :)
Firedrake
Hehe…Cthulhu rings!!!!
Cool image. Reminds me of that movie Children of Men…have you seen it? It’s based on a book I’ve been meaning to read.
Damian replied
LOL, Cthulhu rings; the most evil take away food you can buy :)
I’ve seen Children of Men, only the movie, so can see what you mean. Could actually be a lingering afterthought of 28 Days Later, which is another Brit movie with a massive disaster.
Firedrake
A Cthulhu ring would encircle your house!!
I’ve seen 28 Days Later…I quite like dystopian/apocalyptic books and films!
Damian replied
I’d love to see that Cthulhu ring! Although maybe around someone else’s house, LOL!
We must overlap quite a lot in taste in books and films then :)
Judi Taylor
Amazing writing … you told an entire story on the back of an envelope with more passion than most in an entire novel!! You are brilliant!
Damian replied
LOL, thanks so much Judi, I’m glad you thought so :)
Firedrake
I just read a Handmaid’s Tale – that was great. Read that one?
Damian replied
Ooo, doesn’t ring a bell. I’ll go look it up!
Tracey Mac
Wow this is compelling…..can’t you write a full series of envelopes? Or turn it into a PC game like Myst? I want more…...please do more….this is just great, excellent work….did you win? I sure hope so!! :)
Damian replied
A series? That’s an interesting idea :)
So’s the PC game idea! LOL, thanks :)
Didn’t win the comp, but I think 3rd? Was something fun and different anyway :)
Wendy Slee
Now THIS is intriguing…..
I want to know more…...lol
very clever…...
Damian replied
Thanks Wendy, I’m glad you liked it! I should try and play with words and images a bit more :)
KMorral
Fantastic- great as an image and great as a story- it leaves everything open to the imagination, which is always exciting!
Damian replied
Thank you :)
Pleased you liked it visually as well as for the story.
danabee
Loved the photo and short mystery…
Damian replied
Thanks danabee :)
gypsycaster
You DO know I LIVE for zombies right?
Damian replied
Haha, I do now :)
I’m still playing catch up on what happened while I was out NaNo’ing, so I think this is funny that I’m doing a zombie story now, LOL :)
mrana
ooooo very cool!
Damian replied
Hi Mariana, thanks, glad you liked it :)
bearpaw
this is awesome… it leaves you wanting to know more…
Damian replied
Thanks bearpaw! Glad it got your curiosity :)